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b230tri

March 4, 2022

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He's pressuring me to get married.

He's pressuring me to get married.
I will never get married.
We're loving each other and it's enough.
I think marriage is an impediment to love
we wouldn't afford it.
It's too much burden to us.
Someone says There's no happiness more than having a child, yet I don't think so.
It's a fake fantasy someone made.
My mother had to went through tough journey more than 20 years alone. It was absolutely tragedy. There was no choice to her.
My mother is accomplished woman. I'm not saying this because she's my mother. She's truely amazing. If she'd had no child, she would be more free. She don't had to work that hard. too long. It was too long. She's old now. I can't pay her youth back. It's too sad. When I see my girlfriend, I picture my mom. I don't want put her into that situation.
Mom would say she has been happy. But She could had be more happy. It's unfair. I'm happy now. But I have no idea whether she's happy now. She always says everything is okay. But I can see somewhat grief in her eyes. She might be lonely. Every night, when she tries to sleep alone, sudden sadness may comes to her. I know at least, marriage end up not making her happy.
Sorry, it was hard to say. It's still complicated to me.

Corrections

HShe's pressuring me to get married.

I was a bit confused at first, but returned to the title and I think you meant to say "She" here. 👍

I will never get married.

We're lovinge each other and it's enough.

I think marriage is an impediment to love, and we wouldn't be able to afford it.

It's would be too much of a burden ton us.

Someone says , "There's no happiness moregreater than having a child", yet I don't think so.

It must be "greater than", not "more than" in this sentence. 👍

It's a fake fantasy someone made.

Perfectly fine sentence. This is a little more natural, "It's a fake fantasy someone came up with." or "someone invented." 👍

My mother had to wentgo through a tough journey of more than 20 years alone.

Or, "My mother went through a tough journey of more than 20 years alone."

It was absolutely a tragedy.

More naturally phrased, "It was an absolute tragedy."

There was no choice tofor her.

More naturally, "She had no choice."

My mother is an accomplished woman.

I'm not saying this because she's my mother.

She's truely amazing.

If she'd had no child, she would be more free.

I'm not sure if "more free" is grammatically acceptable...

But this is a natural expression, "she would be freer."

She don'twouldn't have had to work that hard.

Or, "She wouldn't have had to work so hard."

tToo long.

It was too long.

She's old now.

I can't pay her youth back.

It's too sad.

When I see my girlfriend, I picture my mMom.

I don't want to put her into that situation.

Mom would say she has been happy.

But Sshe could hadve been more happy.

It's unfair.

I'm happy now.

But I have no idea whether she's happy now.

She always says everything is okay.

But I can see somewhat grief in her eyes.

Or, "But I can see grief in her eyes somehow."

She might be lonely.

Every night, when she tries to sleep alone, sudden sadness may comes to her.

I know at least, marriage ended up not making her happy.

Perfectly fine sentence. Or, "marriage didn't end up making her happy." or "marriage didn't make her happy in the end."

Sorry, it was hard to say.

I'd say, "Sorry, that was hard to say."

It's still complicated to me.

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I'm so sorry to hear about your dilemma. Thank you for writing with bravery about your experience.

I hope you and your girlfriend find resolution.

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b230tri

March 5, 2022

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Actually my father is pressing me to get married. He is old fashioned. At first, I thought I was gonna write about marriage. But I ended up wrote about my mother. I think her life is still impacting me. Thank you so much for your correction.

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jogeumman

March 5, 2022

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Ah thanks for the explanation! I’m glad then, that at least you and your girlfriend are on the same page. I hope you and your Dad work this out somehow, one way or another.

In general, I had no idea Korea was such a conservative country until I started learning Korean a couple of months ago. (I’m embarrassed to admit, I knew hardly anything about Korea other than as the origin of fabulous 바둑 players and 태권도! I’d never actually even heard any kpop. But Squid Game inspired me to learn, and now I can’t get enough of the music and films/dramas!!)

Well anyway sorry for rambling! Please post more English and I will correct/suggest alternatives whatever you write! 👍

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b230tri

March 5, 2022

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Don't worry about rambling. It was interesting story. The fact that Squid Game inspired you to learn Korean impressed me. And yes. Korea is a very conservative country. But it is changing rapidly. I have no idea what's coming next. Couple of days later, there will be an election for president. I'm scared and anticipated.
Thank you for your kindness. you're so nice.

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jogeumman

March 5, 2022

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Ah thank you! Yeah I have read a lot about changes in Korean society, it must feel like a very strange time.

Changes for the better, like more conversations about bullying for instance, and the ban on dog meat, and 혼족 (hope I spelled that right).

Changes that are needed, but still scary, like the economic situation...! I didn't know there was a presidential election so soon - that's exciting!

Please do keep posting! I'm here to help! 감사합니다! 👍

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b230tri

March 6, 2022

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Thank you ^^ I'll do it

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jogeumman

March 6, 2022

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Cool! I will check every day no worries ^_~

(I won't ignore you! I mean, "I won't 무시 you!" So funny I just discovered that today, "무시합니다"! It's 무시무시! 이거 젛아요, it's easy to remember!) ^o^

There was no choice to her.


There was no choice tofor her.

More naturally, "She had no choice."

He's pressuring me to get married.


HShe's pressuring me to get married.

I was a bit confused at first, but returned to the title and I think you meant to say "She" here. 👍

He's pressuring me to get married.


I will never get married.


This sentence has been marked as perfect!

We're loving each other and it's enough.


We're lovinge each other and it's enough.

I think marriage is an impediment to love


I think marriage is an impediment to love, and we wouldn't be able to afford it.

we wouldn't afford it.


It's too much burden to us.


It's would be too much of a burden ton us.

Someone says There's no happiness more than having a child, yet I don't think so.


Someone says , "There's no happiness moregreater than having a child", yet I don't think so.

It must be "greater than", not "more than" in this sentence. 👍

It's a fake fantasy someone made.


It's a fake fantasy someone made.

Perfectly fine sentence. This is a little more natural, "It's a fake fantasy someone came up with." or "someone invented." 👍

My mother had to went through tough journey more than 20 years alone.


My mother had to wentgo through a tough journey of more than 20 years alone.

Or, "My mother went through a tough journey of more than 20 years alone."

It was absolutely tragedy.


It was absolutely a tragedy.

More naturally phrased, "It was an absolute tragedy."

My mother is accomplished woman.


My mother is an accomplished woman.

I'm not saying this because she's my mother.


This sentence has been marked as perfect!

She's truely amazing.


She's truely amazing.

If she'd had no child, she would be more free.


If she'd had no child, she would be more free.

I'm not sure if "more free" is grammatically acceptable... But this is a natural expression, "she would be freer."

She don't had to work that hard.


She don'twouldn't have had to work that hard.

Or, "She wouldn't have had to work so hard."

too long.


tToo long.

It was too long.


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She's old now.


This sentence has been marked as perfect!

I can't pay her youth back.


This sentence has been marked as perfect!

It's too sad.


This sentence has been marked as perfect!

When I see my girlfriend, I picture my mom.


When I see my girlfriend, I picture my mMom.

I don't want put her into that situation.


I don't want to put her into that situation.

Mom would say she has been happy.


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But She could had be more happy.


But Sshe could hadve been more happy.

It's unfair.


This sentence has been marked as perfect!

I'm happy now.


This sentence has been marked as perfect!

But I have no idea whether she's happy now.


This sentence has been marked as perfect!

She always says everything is okay.


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But I can see somewhat grief in her eyes.


But I can see somewhat grief in her eyes.

Or, "But I can see grief in her eyes somehow."

She might be lonely.


This sentence has been marked as perfect!

Every night, when she tries to sleep alone, sudden sadness may comes to her.


Every night, when she tries to sleep alone, sudden sadness may comes to her.

I know at least, marriage end up not making her happy.


I know at least, marriage ended up not making her happy.

Perfectly fine sentence. Or, "marriage didn't end up making her happy." or "marriage didn't make her happy in the end."

Sorry, it was hard to say.


Sorry, it was hard to say.

I'd say, "Sorry, that was hard to say."

It's still complicated to me.


This sentence has been marked as perfect!

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