Dec. 7, 2020
Helping people directly or by charities
The way to give a helping hand varies from person to person. Some people reckon that they should help the local community or give people direct help, while others argue that the best way to give a favor is to give money to charities. In my opinion, I agree with the former view.
On the one hand, people who believe in charitable organizations may hold that they can allocate public money equally and effectively. For example, some non-profit institutions may help schools from deprived areas with teaching facilities like building multi-functional classrooms, and recruiting well-qualified faculties. In this way, children from less well-off families can have access to sound a education, therefore they can break the poverty circle to be contributing members of society.
However, some individuals argue that lending a hand directly to people in need is the best way. With the wave of corruption nowadays, donations sometimes are not able to reach the right place and the right people. For instance, in China, there are numerous organizations that raise money from the public in the name of extending a helping hand to those under the poverty line. But actually what they did was put this money into their own pocket, leaving the poor to die. For this reason, citizens should give a favor to those people in a straight way, instead of by agencies.
In conclusion, although some non-profit agencies can allocate money effectively and quickly, I still opine that people should help destitute people directly in case of corruption.
Helping people directly or by charities
The way to give a helping hand varies from person to person.
Some people reckon that they should help the local community or give people direct help, while others argue that the best way to give a favorassist is to give money to charities.
Assist sounds more natural here
In my opinion, I agree with the former view.
You are giving your opinion by saying that you agree with the first view. So saying 'In my opinion, I agree...' is overkill. It isn't incorrect, it just sounds odd.
On the one hand, people who believe in charitable organizations may holdfeel that they can allocate public money equally and effectively.
For example, some non-profit institutions may help schools from deprived areas with teaching facilities likesuch as building multi-functional classrooms, and recruiting well-qualified facultiesstaff.
When you use the word recruit in this context you are usually talking about people, so staff sounds better. You may be using faculty to refer to a group of teaching staff but even then I think it is better to talk about recruiting individual staff as you wouldn't typically recruit all staff members within a faculty at the same time.
In this way, children from less well-off families can have access to a sound a education, therefore they c and break the poverty cirycle to become contributing members of society.
However, some individuals argue that lending a hand directly to people in need is the best way.
With the wave of corruption nowadays, donations sometimes are not able to reach the right place and the right people.
For instance, in China, there are numerous organizations that raise money from the public in the name ofby claiming that they are extending a helping hand to those under the poverty line.
But actually what they did wao is put this money into their own pocket, leaving the poor to die.
For this reason, citizens should give a favor to those people in a straight waassist people directly, instead of bythrough agencies.
In conclusion, although some non-profit agencies can allocate money effectively and quickly, I still opinbelieve that people should help destitute people directly in case oforder to avoid corruption.
Opine isn't wrong but it wouldn't be used often in everyday speech or writing.
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Wow - that was a complicated piece to write and you did it very well. Congratulations!
Dec. 8, 2020
Thank you for review, I’m really appreciate it,but why I can’t use “therefore they can break......” instead of “and......”. This sentence is a result, right? Or can I use “ ,and therefore ......”?
Dec. 8, 2020
Hi Ricky. You can use 'therefore they can break' as it isn't incorrect. It just seems very wordy and you can achieve the same meaning by simply saying 'and break'. Sorry - I should have made this comment when correcting.
Dec. 9, 2020
I get it, thank you so so so much!
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Helping people directly or by charities This sentence has been marked as perfect! |
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The way to give a helping hand varies from person to person. This sentence has been marked as perfect! |
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Some people reckon that they should help the local community or give people direct help, while others argue that the best way to give a favor is to give money to charities. Some people reckon that they should help the local community or give people direct help, while others argue that the best way to Assist sounds more natural here |
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In my opinion, I agree with the former view.
You are giving your opinion by saying that you agree with the first view. So saying 'In my opinion, I agree...' is overkill. It isn't incorrect, it just sounds odd. |
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On the one hand, people who believe in charitable organizations may hold that they can allocate public money equally and effectively. On the one hand, people who believe in charitable organizations may |
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For example, some non-profit institutions may help schools from deprived areas with teaching facilities like building multi-functional classrooms, and recruiting well-qualified faculties. For example, some non-profit institutions may help schools from deprived areas with teaching facilities When you use the word recruit in this context you are usually talking about people, so staff sounds better. You may be using faculty to refer to a group of teaching staff but even then I think it is better to talk about recruiting individual staff as you wouldn't typically recruit all staff members within a faculty at the same time. |
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In this way, children from less well-off families can have access to sound a education, therefore they can break the poverty circle to be contributing members of society. In this way, children from less well-off families can have access to a sound |
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However, some individuals argue that lending a hand directly to people in need is the best way. This sentence has been marked as perfect! |
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With the wave of corruption nowadays, donations sometimes are not able to reach the right place and the right people. This sentence has been marked as perfect! |
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For instance, in China, there are numerous organizations that raise money from the public in the name of extending a helping hand to those under the poverty line. For instance, in China, there are numerous organizations that raise money from the public |
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But actually what they did was put this money into their own pocket, leaving the poor to die. But actually what they d |
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For this reason, citizens should give a favor to those people in a straight way, instead of by agencies. For this reason, citizens should |
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In conclusion, although some non-profit agencies can allocate money effectively and quickly, I still opine that people should help destitute people directly in case of corruption. In conclusion, although some non-profit agencies can allocate money effectively and quickly, I still Opine isn't wrong but it wouldn't be used often in everyday speech or writing. |
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