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arisa7799

Oct. 22, 2024

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Hello!

Hello My name is Arisa.
I am from Japan and I live in Tokyo. My hobbies are to read, play games, travel.
I am start again my English study so I can go to working holiday visa in England.
I want to live in London and I want to work there one day.
Please become my friend and I can help you with Japanese!! Please help me with my English!
What else should I put in introduction? help me please! :D

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Hello M, my name is Arisa.

ALSO POSSIBLE: Hello. My name is Arisa.

I am from Japan and I live in Tokyo.

My hobbies are to reading, playing games, and travel.

I amhave start again myed studying English studyagain so I can go toet an working holiday visa in England.

I want to live in London and I want to work there one day.

Please become my friend and I can help you with your Japanese!!

Please help me with my English!

What else should I put in my introduction?

help me please![SUGGESTION: Delete this phrase. It is redundant.]

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arisa7799

Oct. 23, 2024

1

Thank you very much for correct!

Hello!

Hello! My name is Arisa.

I am from Japan and I live in Tokyo.

My hobbies are to reading, playing games, and travelling.

I am start agaresuming my English studyies so I can go ton a working holiday visa into England.

Or:
"I am studying English so I can obtain a visa and go on a working holiday to England"

I want to live in London and I want to work there onand work in London some day.

You don't need to write "I want" twice in the same sentence.

Please become my friend and I can help you with Japanese!!

Please help me with my English!

What else should I put in my introduction?

hHelp me please!

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Welcome to the site, Arisaさん

頑張ってください!

Feel free to make a lot of posts and users here will correct your English. Feel free to ask any questions about UK or London. Whilst I don't live in London, I travel there for work very frequently.

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arisa7799

Oct. 23, 2024

1

Lummers-san ありがとうございます!
I never been to London but want to move there! So amazing you go there frequently! これからも仲良くしてください😊

Hello!

Hello M, my name is Arisa.

A capital letter should only be used in the first word of the sentence, for I, and in proper nouns. My is none of these, so it should be capitalized as "my".

I am from Japan and I live in Tokyo.

My hobbies are to read, play games, and travel.

At the end of a list, and should be used with the final item. For example, "I love eating, playing, and sleeping."

I am start againg my English studyies again so I can go toapply for a working holiday visa in England.

1 - The action of starting your studies is happening now, so use "starting" instead of "start"
2 - Studies is the correct plural form
3 - You don't go to a holiday visa, you apply for one.

I want to live in London and I want to work there one day.

Please become my friend and I can help you with Japanese!!

Please help me with my English!

What else should I put in my introduction?

You can add your likes, dislikes, favourite things to do, and more. You are introducing yourself!

hHelp me please!

:D

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arisa7799

Oct. 23, 2024

1

Thank you Jakaloup-san!

Hello!


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Hello My name is Arisa.


Hello M, my name is Arisa.

A capital letter should only be used in the first word of the sentence, for I, and in proper nouns. My is none of these, so it should be capitalized as "my".

Hello! My name is Arisa.

Hello M, my name is Arisa.

ALSO POSSIBLE: Hello. My name is Arisa.

I am from Japan and I live in Tokyo.


This sentence has been marked as perfect!

This sentence has been marked as perfect!

I am from Japan and I live in Tokyo.

My hobbies are to read, play games, travel.


My hobbies are to read, play games, and travel.

At the end of a list, and should be used with the final item. For example, "I love eating, playing, and sleeping."

My hobbies are to reading, playing games, and travelling.

My hobbies are to reading, playing games, and travel.

I am start again my English study so I can go to working holiday visa in England.


I am start againg my English studyies again so I can go toapply for a working holiday visa in England.

1 - The action of starting your studies is happening now, so use "starting" instead of "start" 2 - Studies is the correct plural form 3 - You don't go to a holiday visa, you apply for one.

I am start agaresuming my English studyies so I can go ton a working holiday visa into England.

Or: "I am studying English so I can obtain a visa and go on a working holiday to England"

I amhave start again myed studying English studyagain so I can go toet an working holiday visa in England.

I want to live in London and I want to work there one day.


This sentence has been marked as perfect!

I want to live in London and I want to work there onand work in London some day.

You don't need to write "I want" twice in the same sentence.

I want to live in London and I want to work there one day.

Please become my friend and I can help you with Japanese!!


This sentence has been marked as perfect!

This sentence has been marked as perfect!

Please become my friend and I can help you with your Japanese!!

Please help me with my English!


This sentence has been marked as perfect!

This sentence has been marked as perfect!

This sentence has been marked as perfect!

What else should I put in introduction?


What else should I put in my introduction?

What else should I put in my introduction?

You can add your likes, dislikes, favourite things to do, and more. You are introducing yourself!

What else should I put in my introduction?

help me please!


hHelp me please!

hHelp me please!

help me please![SUGGESTION: Delete this phrase. It is redundant.]

:D


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