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milkyway

Dec. 23, 2022

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I saw a news that it was a record heavy snow on the Sea of ​​Japan side.
I remembered that Mr. Mori, a weather forecaster, said on TV a little while ago that yellow sand was observed in December and that there was a possibility of heavy snowfall in such years.
Yellow sand is a phenomenon which Chinese desert sand come over to Japan by the wind.
Usually, It is observed in spring, so it is rare to be observed in winter.
It snowed heavily as Mr. Mori said, so I thought weather forecasters are amazing.
It was interesting that it seemed to be not related between yellow sand and snow, but actually they did.


日本海側で記録的な大雪になっているというニュースをみました。
少し前にテレビで天気予報士の森さんが、12月に黄砂が観測されたことと、そういう年は大雪になることがあると話していたのを思い出しました。
黄砂は、中国の内陸部の砂漠の砂が風に乗って日本にやってくる現象です。通常は、春に観測されるので、冬に来るのは珍しいです。
森さんが言っていた通り大雪になったので、天気予報士はすごいなと思いました。
黄砂と雪は一見関係なさそうなのに、気象的な要因ではつながりがあるのだなと興味深く思いました。

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Heavy Snow

I saw aon the news that ithere was a record heavy snow on the Sea of ​​Japan side of the country.

I remembered that Mr. Mori, a weather forecaster, said on TV a little while ago that yellow sand was observed in December and that there was a possibility of heavy snowfall in such years.

Yellow sand is a phenomenon whichere Chinese desert sand come over to Japan by the wind.

Usually, Iit is observedseen in spring, so it is rare to be observedseen in winter.

"observed" in the passive tense is mostly used for holidays and traditions eg. "Christmas is observed on December 25th"

It snowed heavily just as Mr. Mori said, so I thought weather forecasters are amazing.

A more natural phrasing "When I saw that it ended up snowing heavily just as Mr. Mori said, I was amazed at the accuracy of weather forecasters."

It was interesting that it seemed to be not related between yellow sand and snowthe yellow sand and snow seemed not to be related, but actually they did.were.

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Very interesting, good job!

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milkyway

Dec. 24, 2022

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Thank you for your corrections and comments. They are very useful.

I saw athe news that it was a record heavy snow fell [on the Sea of ​​Japan side of the island | on the west side of the island | on the coast of the Sea of Japan].

Does “Sea of Japan side” mean “the side of the island that is nearest to the Sea of Japan” (the west side of the island)? Or do you mean “on the coast of the Sea of Japan”?

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milkyway

Dec. 24, 2022

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I don't really understand the difference, but I think “on the coast of the Sea of Japan” is probably more correct.
Thank you for your correction.

Heavy Snow

I saw aon the news that it was a record heavy snow on the Sea of ​​Japan side.

Or, "I saw on the news that there has been a record heavy snow on the Sea of Japan side of the country" ?

I remembered that Mr. Mori, a weather forecaster, said on TV a little while ago that yellow sand was observed in December and that there was a possibility of heavy snowfall in such years.

Yellow sand is a phenomenon in which Chinese desert sand come overis carried to Japan by the wind.

Usually, Iit is observed in spring, so it is rare to be observedseeing it in winter.

It snowed heavily as Mr. Mori said, so I thought weather forecasters are amazing.

It wais interesting that it seemed to be not related betweens yellow sand and snow are unrelated, but actually they didre might be a connection.

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milkyway

Dec. 24, 2022

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Thank you for your corrections.

Heavy Snow

I saw awatched news that itsaid there was a record heavy snowfall on the Sea of ​​Japan side.

また、

I watched news that said there was heavy snow falling on the Sea of ​​Japan side.

I remembered that Mr. Mori, a weather forecaster, said on TV a little while ago that yellow sand was observed in December andso that there was a possibility of heavy snowfall in such years.

Yellow sand is a phenomenon whichere Chinese desert sand comeis blown over to Japan by the wind.

Usually, It is observed in sSpring, so it is rare to be observed in winter.

It snowed heavily as Mr. Mori said, so I thought weather forecasters are amazing.

It was interesting that it didn't seemed to be not related betweento yellow sand and snow, but actually they didit was.

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面白そうです。教えてくれてありがとうございました。上手に書けています!

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milkyway

Dec. 24, 2022

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Thank you for your corrections.

Heavy Snow

I saw a news that itarticle/report that there was a record heavy snow on the Sea of ​​Japan sidearea.

日本海側を直訳すると、「Sea of Japan side」になりますが、[Sea of Japan area]のはもっと適切だと思います。

I remembered that Mr. Mori, a weather forecaster, said on TV a little while ago that yellow sand was observed in December and that there was a possibility of heavy snowfall in such years.

Yellow sand is a phenomenon in which Chinese desert sand comes over to Japan by the wind.

Usually, Iit is observed in spring, so it is rare to be observed in winter.

It snowed heavily exactly as Mr. Mori said, so I thought weather forecasters are amazing.

Using "exactly" here shows that the weather report was very accurate. This adds more to your amazement of weather forecasters.

It was interesting that it seemed to be not related between yellow sand and snowthe yellow sand and snow seemed to be unrelated, but they actually they didwere.

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Good writing! I learned about a new weather phenomenon that occurs in Japan today: "yellow sand." Thank you!

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milkyway

Dec. 24, 2022

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Thank you for your corrections and comments. They are very useful.

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I saw a news that it was a record heavy snow on the Sea of ​​Japan side.


I saw a news that itarticle/report that there was a record heavy snow on the Sea of ​​Japan sidearea.

日本海側を直訳すると、「Sea of Japan side」になりますが、[Sea of Japan area]のはもっと適切だと思います。

I saw awatched news that itsaid there was a record heavy snowfall on the Sea of ​​Japan side.

また、 I watched news that said there was heavy snow falling on the Sea of ​​Japan side.

I saw aon the news that it was a record heavy snow on the Sea of ​​Japan side.

Or, "I saw on the news that there has been a record heavy snow on the Sea of Japan side of the country" ?

I saw athe news that it was a record heavy snow fell [on the Sea of ​​Japan side of the island | on the west side of the island | on the coast of the Sea of Japan].

Does “Sea of Japan side” mean “the side of the island that is nearest to the Sea of Japan” (the west side of the island)? Or do you mean “on the coast of the Sea of Japan”?

I saw aon the news that ithere was a record heavy snow on the Sea of ​​Japan side of the country.

I remembered that Mr. Mori, a weather forecaster, said on TV a little while ago that yellow sand was observed in December and that there was a possibility of heavy snowfall in such years.


This sentence has been marked as perfect!

I remembered that Mr. Mori, a weather forecaster, said on TV a little while ago that yellow sand was observed in December andso that there was a possibility of heavy snowfall in such years.

This sentence has been marked as perfect!

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Yellow sand is a phenomenon which Chinese desert sand come over to Japan by the wind.


Yellow sand is a phenomenon in which Chinese desert sand comes over to Japan by the wind.

Yellow sand is a phenomenon whichere Chinese desert sand comeis blown over to Japan by the wind.

Yellow sand is a phenomenon in which Chinese desert sand come overis carried to Japan by the wind.

Yellow sand is a phenomenon whichere Chinese desert sand come over to Japan by the wind.

Usually, It is observed in spring, so it is rare to be observed in winter.


Usually, Iit is observed in spring, so it is rare to be observed in winter.

Usually, It is observed in sSpring, so it is rare to be observed in winter.

Usually, Iit is observed in spring, so it is rare to be observedseeing it in winter.

Usually, Iit is observedseen in spring, so it is rare to be observedseen in winter.

"observed" in the passive tense is mostly used for holidays and traditions eg. "Christmas is observed on December 25th"

It snowed heavily as Mr. Mori said, so I thought weather forecasters are amazing.


It snowed heavily exactly as Mr. Mori said, so I thought weather forecasters are amazing.

Using "exactly" here shows that the weather report was very accurate. This adds more to your amazement of weather forecasters.

This sentence has been marked as perfect!

This sentence has been marked as perfect!

It snowed heavily just as Mr. Mori said, so I thought weather forecasters are amazing.

A more natural phrasing "When I saw that it ended up snowing heavily just as Mr. Mori said, I was amazed at the accuracy of weather forecasters."

It was interesting that it seemed to be not related between yellow sand and snow, but actually they did.


It was interesting that it seemed to be not related between yellow sand and snowthe yellow sand and snow seemed to be unrelated, but they actually they didwere.

It was interesting that it didn't seemed to be not related betweento yellow sand and snow, but actually they didit was.

It wais interesting that it seemed to be not related betweens yellow sand and snow are unrelated, but actually they didre might be a connection.

It was interesting that it seemed to be not related between yellow sand and snowthe yellow sand and snow seemed not to be related, but actually they did.were.

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