Aug. 10, 2020
Application letter
I'm a graphic designer and I'd like to sell my designs on Merch by Amazon.
This is my application letter.
Could you check it and tell me, please, is it any good or not?
Hi, there
I'm an artist and a graphic designer. I've been creating and selling my designs through the Internet for several years now. My designs are created by using inspiration, imagination and of course special software.
Studying and understanding the importance of trends, niches, promotions, targeting and many other elements of successful online sales are helping me too.
That's why I think that designs should attract not only consumers' attention but also a desire to buy them.
Many of my works are already profitable on some Print On Demand platforms such as Teepublic, Redbubble, Zazzle.
I have a strong desire to apply for Merch by Amazon because I believe that combination of my experience and the one of the best performing company in the world could be profitable for both sides.
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Application letter
I'm a graphic designer and I'd like to sell my designs on Merch by Amazon.
This is my application letter.
Could you check it and tell me, please, isf it is any good or not?
Could you check it and tell me, please, if it is any good or not?
I would also suggest moving the location where you have please in this sentence. It sounds slightly awkward. For example:
Could you please check it and tell me if it is any good or not?
or:
Could you check it and tell me if it is any good or not please?
Hi,ello there.
Hello there.
Hi is a bit informal. There is no need for a comma here.
I'm an artist and a graphic designer.
I've been creating and selling my designs through the Iinternet for several years now.
I've been creating and selling my designs through the internet for several years now.
My designs are created by using inspiration, imagination and of course special software.
Studying and understanding the importance of trends, niches, promotions, targeting and many other elements of successful online sales are helping me too.
Studying and understanding the importance of trends, niches, promotions, targeting and many other elements of successful online sales help me too.
That'is is why I think that designs should attract not only consumers' attention but also atheir desire to buy them.
This is why I think that designs should attract not only consumers' attention but also their desire to buy them.
Many of my works are already profitable on some Print On Demand platforms such as Teepublic, Redbubble, and Zazzle. Many of my works are already profitable on some Print On Demand platforms such as Teepublic, Redbubble, and Zazzle.
I have a strong desire to apply for Merch by Amazon because I believe that the combination of my experience and the one of the best performing companyies in the world could be profitable for both sides.
I have a strong desire to apply for Merch by Amazon because I believe that the combination of my experience and one of the best performing companies in the world could be profitable for both sides.
Aug. 10, 2020
I've been creating and selling my designs through the Iinternet for several years now.
Either "Internet" or "internet" is fine. Webster's lists "Internet" as the primary spelling, but the Cambridge dictionary prefers "internet". Since dannymleone has noted elsewhere that they target British English your correction is probably the better one.
Aug. 11, 2020
Studying and understanding the importance of trends, niches, promotions, targeting and many other elements of successful online sales are helping me too.
Great catch! I missed that one the first time around.
Aug. 11, 2020
Thank you, guys, for helping me with my letter.
I'm a graphic designer and I'd like to sell my designs on Merch by Amazon.
This is my application letter.
Could you check it and tell me, please, isf it is any good or not?
Could you check it and tell me, please, if it is any good or not?
Hi, there. Hi, there.
I'm an artist and a graphic designer.
I've been creating and selling my designs through the Internet for several years now.
My designs are created by using inspiration, imagination and of course special software.
Studying and understanding the importance of trends, niches, promotions, targeting and many other elements of successful online sales are helping me too.
That's why I think that designs should attract not only consumers' attention but also a desire to buy them.
Many of my works are already profitable on some Print On Demand platforms such as Teepublic, Redbubble, and Zazzle. Many of my works are already profitable on some Print On Demand platforms such as Teepublic, Redbubble, and Zazzle.
Always end a serial list like this with a conjunction like "and" or "or".
I have a strong desire to apply for Merch by Amazon because I believe that the combination of my experience and the one of the best performing companyies in the world could be profitable for both sides.
I have a strong desire to apply for Merch by Amazon because I believe that the combination of my experience and the one of the best performing companies in the world could be profitable for both sides.
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This is good with a few minor corrections. Good luck!
Aug. 10, 2020
Thank you so much.
Aug. 10, 2020
You're welcome! One thing I would note as I look back over this, especially since you said you target British English, is an inconsistency in how you use the comma in lists. You have "Teepublic, Redbubble, Zazzle", with a final comma, but "inspiration, imagination and of course special software" without.
Either format is perfectly acceptable, although using the final comma -- what's often called the "Oxford comma" -- is much more common in American English. British English accepts both, depending on individual or institutional style. Use whichever feels better to you or matches the audience you're writing for, but try to stick with one format.
(You may have used the final comma in the first example simply because you were missing the conjunction but felt like *something* needed to be there. In that case, if we wanted to keep consistency with your second usage, my correction could have been better as "Teepublic, Redbubble and Zazzle".)
Aug. 10, 2020
As a side comment, it's funny that writing "Teepublic, Redbubble and Zazzle" felt completely *wrong* to me, almost uncomfortable, to the point that I had to actively think about it even this second time I typed it. That's even though I know it's fine, and is sometimes also used in the US even if the Oxford comma is much more common here. Language is weird.
Aug. 10, 2020
I have a strong desire to apply for Merch by Amazon because I believe that the combination of my experience and the one of the best performing companyies in the world could be profitable for both sides.
Could you explain to me why you put the word "companies" in plural form?
Aug. 10, 2020
Could you explain to me why you put the word "companies" in plural form?
Sure! Here you are naming Amazon as only one of a group of companies, "the best performing in the world". Since you're talking about membership in a group, the noun needs to be in the plural form to represent the multiple companies in the group.
You would use the singular if you were saying "Amazon is THE best performing company in the world", because there you are only talking about Amazon and no other companies.
Does that make sense?
Aug. 10, 2020
Oh, I also missed the first time that you have "and the one of the best". That first "the" doesn't need to be there, it should be "one of the best", because again you're talking about one of a group. I know that coming from Slavic languages articles can be tricky. Always try to think about whether you are talking about one particular thing in isolation, or one thing as a member of a larger set.
Aug. 10, 2020
Sure! Here you are naming Amazon as only one of a group of companies, "the best performing in the world". Since you're talking about membership in a group, the noun needs to be in the plural form to represent the multiple companies in the group. You would use the singular if you were saying "Amazon is THE best performing company in the world", because there you are only talking about Amazon and no other companies. Does that make sense?
It's a bit tricky. I'm confused.
I know that Merch by Amazon is a print-on-demand service by Amazon.
So,I assumed, that it some kind of branch of the company. That's why I came up with this question.
Aug. 10, 2020
Ahh, OK. If you're talking about Merch by Amazon as a branch of Amazon, and saying Amazon is the best performing company in the world, something like "the combination of my experience and part of the best performing company in the world" would be better, because here you are talking about a single company, Amazon. The way I first read it was as though you were talking about Amazon as one of a number of companies in which case the plural is necessary, but if you're wanting to talk about just part of one company the singular is fine.
Aug. 10, 2020
Either "Internet" or "internet" is fine. Webster's lists "Internet" as the primary spelling, but the Cambridge dictionary prefers "internet". Since dannymleone has noted elsewhere that they target British English your correction is probably the better one.
Aug. 11, 2020
Great catch! I missed that one the first time around.
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Many of my works are already profitable on some Print On Demand platforms such as Teepublic, Redbubble, Zazzle. Many of my works are already profitable on some Print On Demand platforms such as Teepublic, Redbubble, and Zazzle. Many of my works are already profitable on some Print On Demand platforms such as Teepublic, Redbubble, and Zazzle. Always end a serial list like this with a conjunction like "and" or "or". Many of my works are already profitable on some Print On Demand platforms such as Teepublic, Redbubble, and Zazzle. Many of my works are already profitable on some Print On Demand platforms such as Teepublic, Redbubble, and Zazzle. |
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