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Has anything impressed you recently?

I was very impressed by companies in "FOOMA" which is held in Japan to promote food industry. There were quite many companies' booth, and I could see various machines. I was very impressed these machines have made our foods we eat every day.

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Has anything impressed you recently?

I was very impressed by the companies inat "FOOMA" which is held in Japan to promote the food industry.

If "FOOMA" is an event and not a place then it should be "at" instead of "in".

There were quite many companies'y booths, and I could see various machines.

1. "Quite many" doesn't really work. You can either say "quite a few"/"quite a lot" or just "many".
2. Technically "companies' booths" (plural) would be correct but it sounds quite strange.

I was very impressed that these machines have made ourmake the foods we eat every day.

Or "...make our food every day".

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Keep it up!

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today

20

Thank you very much for your careful corrections.
Having you explain each case separately helps me to correct my mistakes and improve in the future.

Has anything impressed you recently?

Titles are usually written in title case, which has special capitalization rules.

I was very impressed by companies in "FOOMA," which is held in Japan to promote the food industry.

Also, it would be more normal to either:

1. write the full name of the event without the abbreviation

OR

2. explain what the event is

For example, you could say

I was very impressed by companies in "FOOMA," a large food processing event, which is held in Japan to promote the food industry.

There were quitevery many companies'y booths, and I could see various machines.

"very many" is more normal, or you could also say "quite a lot of"

Also, I changed it to "company booths" for concision. If there are 5 booths, for example, from different companies, then booth 1 is a company booth, booth 2 is a company booth, and so on. So each booth is a company booth. Since there are multiple, it would be "booths." And the word "company" serves as an adjective to describe what kind of booths they are.

As another example, in a skyscraper, we would say that there are "business offices" and not "businesses´ office."

I was very impressed these machines have made ourthe foods we eat every day.

It is more normal to see "the" food if it is being talked about generally.

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Your passage was informative, and I learned something new. Errors concerned mainly natural phrasing. Nice!

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TOMO_o

today

20

Thank you very much for your careful corrections.
Having you explain each case separately helps me correct my mistakes and improve in the future.
I would like to continue studying so that I can improve my English ability little by little.

Has anything impressed you recently?


Has anything impressed you recently?

Titles are usually written in title case, which has special capitalization rules.

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I was very impressed by companies in "FOOMA" which is held in Japan to promote food industry.


I was very impressed by companies in "FOOMA," which is held in Japan to promote the food industry.

Also, it would be more normal to either: 1. write the full name of the event without the abbreviation OR 2. explain what the event is For example, you could say I was very impressed by companies in "FOOMA," a large food processing event, which is held in Japan to promote the food industry.

I was very impressed by the companies inat "FOOMA" which is held in Japan to promote the food industry.

If "FOOMA" is an event and not a place then it should be "at" instead of "in".

There were quite many companies' booth, and I could see various machines.


There were quitevery many companies'y booths, and I could see various machines.

"very many" is more normal, or you could also say "quite a lot of" Also, I changed it to "company booths" for concision. If there are 5 booths, for example, from different companies, then booth 1 is a company booth, booth 2 is a company booth, and so on. So each booth is a company booth. Since there are multiple, it would be "booths." And the word "company" serves as an adjective to describe what kind of booths they are. As another example, in a skyscraper, we would say that there are "business offices" and not "businesses´ office."

There were quite many companies'y booths, and I could see various machines.

1. "Quite many" doesn't really work. You can either say "quite a few"/"quite a lot" or just "many". 2. Technically "companies' booths" (plural) would be correct but it sounds quite strange.

I was very impressed these machines have made our foods we eat every day.


I was very impressed these machines have made ourthe foods we eat every day.

It is more normal to see "the" food if it is being talked about generally.

I was very impressed that these machines have made ourmake the foods we eat every day.

Or "...make our food every day".

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