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Hard life for older people
It's getting harder and harder for older people to find a job in our country, especially in IT industry. IT company employers are very unfriendly to older employees and older job seekers, they make artificial barriers for them. Such as excessive demands, the non-renewable labor contract etc.
On the other hand, most older people have to take care of their parents and their children. Sometimes, they feel really desperate for life. How life can be so hard!
HA hard life for older people
It's getting harder and harder for older people to find a job in our country, especially in IT industry.
IT company employers are very unfriendly to older employees and older job seekers, t. They makcreate artificial barriers for them.
Such as excessive demands, the non-renewable labor contracts etc.
On the other hand, most older people have to take care of their parents and their children.
Sometimes, they feel really desperate for life.
How life can be so hard!
It's getting harder and harder for older people to find a job in our country, especially in the IT industry.
IT company employers are very unfriendly to older employees and older job seekers,; they make artificial barriers for them.
The two clauses are disconnected enough that a longer pause like a semicolon or full stop sounds more natural to me.
Such asFor example, excessive demands, the non-renewable labor contracts etc.
"Such as" is usually used for joining clauses, rather than starting entire new sentences.
Sometimes, they feel really desperate forin life.
How can life can be so hard!
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Thanks, I'll remember what you mentioned.
IT company employers are very unfriendly to older employees and older job seekers, they make artificial barriers for them.
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SThey make artificial barriers for them, such as excessive demands, the non-renewable labor contract etc.
Starting a sentence with "such as" is grammatically incorrect, so I used the ending from the sentence above to fix this.
Sometimes, they feel really desperate fobecause of their life.
Feeling desperate for something usually means that you want something very badly, but I think don't think that is what you're trying to say here.
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This is pretty good overall!
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Thanks my friend.
It's getting harder and harder for older people to find a jobs in our country, especially in the IT industry.
IT company employers are very unfriendly to older employees and older job seekers, t. They make artificial barriers for them.,
Ssuch as excessive demands, the non-renewable labor contracts, etc.
On the other handMeanwhile, most older people have to take care of their parents and their children.
"On the other hand" usually introduces the opposite side of an argument. For example, "On the other hand, companies need to make money." "Meanwhile" fits better here because you are describing the experiences of older people that keep them working for employers who mistreat them.
Sometimes, they feel really desperate for life.
How lLife can be so hard!
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Great work! I understand what you mean about how older employees are treated. It's very sad!
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Helpful comments,thank you.
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IT company employers are very unfriendly to older employees and older job seekers, they make artificial barriers for them. IT company employers are very unfriendly to older employees and older job seekers IT company employers are very unfriendly to older employees and older job seekers See feedback for my next correction IT The two clauses are disconnected enough that a longer pause like a semicolon or full stop sounds more natural to me. IT company employers are very unfriendly to older employees and older job seekers |
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Such as excessive demands, the non-renewable labor contract etc.
Starting a sentence with "such as" is grammatically incorrect, so I used the ending from the sentence above to fix this.
"Such as" is usually used for joining clauses, rather than starting entire new sentences. Such as excessive demands, the non-renewable labor contracts etc. |
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On the other hand, most older people have to take care of their parents and their children.
"On the other hand" usually introduces the opposite side of an argument. For example, "On the other hand, companies need to make money." "Meanwhile" fits better here because you are describing the experiences of older people that keep them working for employers who mistreat them. This sentence has been marked as perfect! |
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Sometimes, they feel really desperate for life. Sometimes, they feel really desperate Sometimes, they feel really desperate Feeling desperate for something usually means that you want something very badly, but I think don't think that is what you're trying to say here. Sometimes, they feel really desperate Sometimes, they feel really desperate |
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How life can be so hard!
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