The End of the Book "Divergent" (Spoiled)
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Yesterday, I just finished the first book of the series Divergent. I started to read it 2 months ago, and read 1 chapter a day. I decided to read it in English so that I'm improving my English and enjoy the reading at the same time. When I started to read it, it was a bit complicated, I didn't understand everything. But I think, with the habit of the author's writting style, I started to understant more and more, until understand almost everything. I really felt a big difference in my comprehensuon between when I started the book and when I finished it.
The story was really cool. So many things happened and the characters were really well developped. I loved Tris because she was brave and mysterious at tve same time. It was difficult to understand her feelings! When I started to read it, I didn't think the end would look like that. At the beginning, it's like an utopian, but it quickly turned into a dystopian. At the end, both Tris's parents died, and I found weird the fact that Tris didn't look that sad after their death. During her journey and her initiation test like they called it, she met Tobias (he's often called "Four" because he only had 4 fears when he did the exam with the fear landscape) and she fell in love. They're really cute together and it was funny to see the hiden part of Tobias's character, because he often looks tough whereas he's so kind with Tris.
To conclude, I really loved the story, but just think that the end should have been better, because so much happened in a really short time. I just received today the two next books, so I will start this evening to read them!
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The End of the Book "Divergent" (Spoiled)
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We usually write "Spoiler Alert," rather than "Spoiled," but "Spoiled" does communicate the message in a gramatically correct way.
Yesterday, I just finished the first book of the series Divergent.
We can use "just" to mean something that happened yesterday, but we wouldn't say yesterday. We would only ever mention the time if it happened very recently, i.e., a few seconds. Examples: "I just found this a few seconds ago" A: "I just finished the book" B: "When" A: "Yesterday"
I decided to read it in English so that I'm improving my English and enjoyenjoying the reading at the same time.
You could also just use the non -ing forms, but it must be consistent.
When I started to read it, it was a bit complicated;, I didn't understand everything.
"I didn't understand everything" is an independent clause, which warrants a semi-colon.
But I think, with the habit of the author's writtingwriting style, I started to understantunderstand more and more, until understandI understood almost everything.
I really felt a big difference in my comprehensuoncomprehension between when I started the book and when I finished it.
I think that was just a typo.
So many things happened; and the characters were really well developpeddeveloped.
I loved Tris because she was brave and mysterious at tvethe same time.
When I started to read it, I didn't think the end would look like thatthe way it did.
Since you haven't discussed the ending yet, we wouldn't use "like that."
At the beginning, it's like an utopianutopia, but it quickly turned into a dystopiandystopia.
At the end, both Tris'sof Tris' parents died, and I found weird the fact that Tris didn't look that sad after their death weird.
Where you put "weird" was ok, but less natural.
During her journey and her initiation test, like as they called it, she met Tobias (he'sHe's often called "Four" because he only had 4 fears when he did the exam with the fear landscape.) and she fell in love.
Today, I just received today the two next two books, so I will start this evening to read them this evening!
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Your skills are astounding. You are articulate and easy to comprehend. If you keep reading and writing like this, your writing style will continue to improve!
But I think, with the habit of the author's writtingwriting style, I started to understantunderstand more and more, until understand almost everything.
I really felt a big difference in my comprehensuoncomprehension between when I started the book and when I finished it.
So many things happened and the characters were really well developpeddeveloped.
I loved Tris because she was brave and mysterious at tvethe same time.
At the end, both Tris's parents died, and I found it weird the fact that Tris didn't look that sad after their death.
They're really cute together and it was funny to see the hidenhidden part of Tobias's character, because he often looks tough whereas he's so kind with Tris.
I just received today the two next two books today, so I will start this evening to read them!
I decided to read it in English so that I'm improving my English and can enjoy the reading at the same time.
When I started to read it, it was a bit complicated., I didn't understand everything.
But I think, with the habit of the author's writtingwriting style, I started to understantunderstand more and more, until understandI understood almost everything.
I really felt a big difference in my comprehensuoncomprehension between when I started the book and when I finished it.
So many things happened and the characters were really well developpeddeveloped.
I loved Tris because she was brave and mysterious at tvethe same time.
When I started to read it, I didn't think the end would look like that.
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Could say - I didn't think the end would be like that - I didn't see the ending coming
At the beginning, it's like an utopiana utopia, but it quickly turned into a dystopiandystopia.
AtIn the end, both Tris's parents died, and I found it weird the fact that Tris didn't look that sad after their death.
I just received today the two next books, so I will start this evening to readI'll start reading them!
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Great English, enjoy the books!
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