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My ex-girlfriend
She called Alicia, she was very beautiful. Her eyes are green like her mother. She's 22 years old, was from Poland. She and I dating for 7 years, but her leaves me for another men called Carlos, that's all bye.
My ex-girlfriend
She's called Alicia, she was very beautiful.
She's/ she is/ she was all would be fine here.
Her eyes awere green like her mothers.
Past tense sounds better here to me, but technically her eyes are still green so either can work.
She' is 22 years old,. She was from Poland.
The combination of past and present tense sounds strange when combined in one sentence like this. Is she 22 now or was she then.
She and I were dating for 7 years, but sher leavesft me for another mean called Carlos, t. That's all bye.
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A lot of it is generally correct but the way you are changing between past and present tense often within the same sentence makes it quite confusing and sounds unnatural.
She calledHer name is Alicia, s. She was very beautiful.
You could also say "She is very beautiful" because that might not have changed. However, if she used to be beautiful and no longer is, you can still say "she was very beautiful".
Her eyes are green like her mother's.
This is the same thing as saying "Her eyes are green like her mother's eyes" but because that's repetitive, we say, "Her eyes are green like her mother's."
She's 22 years old, wand she's from Poland.
She and I datinged for 7 years, but sher leavesft me for another mean callnamed Carlos, that's all bye.
Just fixed up your tenses here. Also, to say "that's all bye" is a very abrupt ending. You could just end the writing there, that final part of the sentence is not necessary.
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Well done! Sorry to hear your relationship ended. Let me know if you have any questions about my corrections.
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She called Alicia, she was very beautiful.
You could also say "She is very beautiful" because that might not have changed. However, if she used to be beautiful and no longer is, you can still say "she was very beautiful". She's called Alicia, she was very beautiful. She's/ she is/ she was all would be fine here. |
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Her eyes are green like her mother. Her eyes are green like her mother's. This is the same thing as saying "Her eyes are green like her mother's eyes" but because that's repetitive, we say, "Her eyes are green like her mother's." Her eyes Past tense sounds better here to me, but technically her eyes are still green so either can work. |
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She's 22 years old, was from Poland. She's 22 years old, She The combination of past and present tense sounds strange when combined in one sentence like this. Is she 22 now or was she then. |
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She and I dating for 7 years, but her leaves me for another men called Carlos, that's all bye. She and I dat Just fixed up your tenses here. Also, to say "that's all bye" is a very abrupt ending. You could just end the writing there, that final part of the sentence is not necessary. She and I were dating for 7 years, but she |
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