June 15, 2021
Good morning.
I don't have a fixed routine. My time table is totally horrible from the others' eyes.
In some days, I walk in the early morning, so I can sometimes see a little bit unusual sights.
For instance, there are pigeons eating something on the road in a bustle. I don't want to interrupt their breakfast at that time. But in other situation there is a time I can follow them walking as if I were a peer behind of them.
And the other is that baseball players of high school on a school ground gather even before 7 a.m., presumably because they can avoid cruel sun at noon or over in their practice, or they might go to a venue of a game or games after all gathering together. Anyways, these students have to wake up early. I want to cheer for them, but simultaneously I feel sympathy for them because it's too early for general students.
Their duty is not a baseball, they also need to study hard. Then, can they sleep well? Can they enjoy themselves in hanging out? etc.
See you!
Good morning.
I don't have a fixed routine.
My time table is totally horrible from the others' eyesperspective.
In sSome days, I walk in the early morning, so I canand I sometimes see a little bitsome unusual sights.
For instance, there are sometimes pigeons eating something on the road in a bustle.
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I don't wantry not to interrupt their breakfast at that time.
be cearful with tense. Is this a specific moment in the past or a repeated occurrence? Did you see the pigeons once or many mornings on your walk?
But in other situation there is a times, I can follow them walkingunnoticed, as if I were a peer behindone of them.
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Anyways, these studentbasketball players have to wake up early.
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Their duty is not afocus should baseball, but they also need to study hard.
Then, canI wonder if they sleep well?
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CanDo they enjoy themselves in hanging out?
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See you!
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Try writing shorter pieces and more simple topics. Focus on writing 3-4 sentences correct then write a longer piece.
June 15, 2021
I don't need your help. Your correction has also lots of mistakes. Good luck with your study.
June 15, 2021
Here are notes for this article.
・The form of ''enjoy oneself in (or at)'' is possible.
・In a bustle is also possible.
・Cruel can be also applied to a weather or a season. e.g. a cruel winter
June 15, 2021
・view, point of view, perspective
・sightは視力
They bustle around, trying to find the best morsels.
I also walk behind them sometimes, as a peer.
hang out=大人の遊びで全般的に使える。bar, homeでも場所を問わず、複数人がより集まって遊ぶイメージ。
play は基本は子供の遊び。大人の性的な意味もある。スポーツやゲームでも使う。
June 15, 2021
Comments about how many mistakes a person has made is NOT constructive and totally unnecessary. Since you are new, I won't hand out any account warnings this time Kail97. LC is an open space and we encourage users to make mistakes.
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My time table is totally horrible from the others' eyes. My time |
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In some days, I walk in the early morning, so I can sometimes see a little bit unusual sights.
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For instance, there are pigeons eating something on the road in a bustle. For instance, there are sometimes pigeons eating something on the road In a bustle is not correct usage. |
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I don't want to interrupt their breakfast at that time. I be cearful with tense. Is this a specific moment in the past or a repeated occurrence? Did you see the pigeons once or many mornings on your walk? |
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But in other situation there is a time I can follow them walking as if I were a peer behind of them. But awkward phrasing, |
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And the other is that baseball players of high school on a school ground gather even before 7 a.m., presumably because they can avoid cruel sun at noon or over in their practice, or they might go to a venue of a game or games after all gathering together.
awkward |
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Anyways, these students have to wake up early. Anyways, these |
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I want to cheer for them, but simultaneously I feel sympathy for them because it's too early for general students. I want to cheer for them, but simultaneously I feel sympathy for them because it's too early |
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Their duty is not a baseball, they also study hard. |
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Can they sleep well? |
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See you! This sentence has been marked as perfect! |
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Can they enjoy themselves in hanging out?
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