May 7, 2020
Good evening! About My aunt
At PM 6 o'clock, my aunt and I went on a walk. After walking, I went to my aunt's house. When I checked my homework with using my personal computer, my aunt pass gas. Hers pass gas smells badly. When she pass gas, I always run away from her. Why is her pass gas smells so bad? Because I am going to live with her from September, I will have to be more careful it.
At PM 6 o'clock PM, my aunt and I went on a walk.
When I checked my homework with using my personal computer, my aunt pass gas.
Hers pass gasIt smells (very) badly.
When she pass gadoes this, I always run away from her.
Why idoes her pass gasfart smells so bad?
Good evening! About Mmy aunt
In formal titles, each word has to start with a capital letter (besides a, to, but, yet, or so - unless one of them is the first word of the title):
Good Evening! About My Aunt
but if you are writing an informal title, you don't have to capitalize all of them, only the first word, so:
Good evening! About my aunt
would be correct.
At 6 PM 6 o'clock, my aunt and I went on a walk.
It's either:
6 PM
or
6 o'clock
you can't combine the two
After walking, I went to my aunt's house.
When I checked my homework with using my personalon my computer, my aunt passed gas.
Nobody really says "personal computer", just "computer" :)
Also, you usually say that you "check something on the computer", not with
Hers pass gas smellsed badly.
You were using past tense before, so I changed smells -> smell
"pass gas" is an action. You're just talking about her gas, so you just say "Her gas smelled bad."
When she passes gas, I always run away from her.
Why idoes her pass gas smells so bad?
BecausSince I am going to live with her from September, I will have to be more careful it.
It sounds better with since.
https://dictionary.cambridge.org/grammar/british-grammar/as-because-or-since - this explains the difference between since/because.
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Oh no, that doesn't sound too good!!
Nice writing :D
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Good evening! About My aunt Good evening! About In formal titles, each word has to start with a capital letter (besides a, to, but, yet, or so - unless one of them is the first word of the title): Good Evening! About My Aunt but if you are writing an informal title, you don't have to capitalize all of them, only the first word, so: Good evening! About my aunt would be correct. |
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At PM 6 o'clock, my aunt and I went on a walk. At 6 PM It's either: 6 PM or 6 o'clock you can't combine the two At |
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After walking, I went to my aunt's house. This sentence has been marked as perfect! |
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When I checked my homework with using my personal computer, my aunt pass gas. When I checked my homework Nobody really says "personal computer", just "computer" :) Also, you usually say that you "check something on the computer", not with When I checked my homework |
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Hers pass gas smells badly. Her You were using past tense before, so I changed smells -> smell "pass gas" is an action. You're just talking about her gas, so you just say "Her gas smelled bad."
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When she pass gas, I always run away from her. When she passes gas, I always run away from her. When she |
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Why is her pass gas smells so bad? Why Why |
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Because I am going to live with her from September, I will have to be more careful it.
It sounds better with since. https://dictionary.cambridge.org/grammar/british-grammar/as-because-or-since - this explains the difference between since/because. |
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