Nov. 10, 2022
Gold Tree In Japan
Three years ago, I travelled to Tokyo, Japan. I amazed to see a gold tree in the Tokyo Museum, which was a gift sent by a Korean King about 800 years ago.
It looked around 400 square centimeters, curved on the top , like a small fan. It looked a little bit dark, but didn't as we expected as shinning gold. many gold leaves hung on a gold tree.
Gold Tree In Japan
Three years ago, I travelled to Tokyo, Japan.
I was amazed to see a gold tree in the Tokyo Museum, which was a gift sent by a Korean King about 800 years ago.
It looked to be around 400 square centimeters, in size, and it was curved on the top , like a small fan.
It looked a little bit dark, but didn't as we expected as shinning golnot gold and shiny like we expected.
many gold leaves hung on a gold treeThe tree also had lots of gold leaves.
Nov. 11, 2022
@itsmejohnc: Thank you!
I was amazed to see a gold tree in the Tokyo Museum, which was a gift sent by a Korean King about 800 years ago.
"amazed" is an adjective here, so you need a verb
It looked to be around 400 square centimeters, and curved on the top , like a small fan.
if something is looking, alone, then it's using its eyes to see. but a tree doesn't have eyes to look with. but if something looks/seems to be something, then it has that appearance. (of whatever it is you say afterwards - in this case, 400 cm²)
the only real descriptors here are 400cm² & curved on the top, the "like a small fan" is a modifier to "curved on the top," it isn't actually part of the list. so because you only have a list of 2 things, we don't use a comma between them, just "and"
It looked a little bit dark, but didn't as we expected asnot the shinning gold we expected.
"but" implies a contradiction. which technically there is a contradiction in your text - you expected gold, but the tree was dark. however, in this case we already know the tree is dark, so say "but" it wasn't gold as you expected just doesn't make sense.
Nov. 11, 2022
@motte: Thank you!! You explained the reasons of corrections, it's very helpful for my future writing.
Nov. 11, 2022
@motte: Thank you!! You explained the reasons of corrections, it's very helpful for my future writing.
i try to always write some explanation no matter how brief, it's no problem :)
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I amazed to see a gold tree in the Tokyo Museum, which was a gift sent by a Korean King about 800 years ago. I was amazed to see a gold tree in the Tokyo Museum, which was a gift sent by a Korean King about 800 years ago. "amazed" is an adjective here, so you need a verb I was amazed to see a gold tree in the Tokyo Museum, which was a gift sent by a Korean King about 800 years ago. |
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It looked around 400 square centimeters, curved on the top , like a small fan. It looked to be around 400 square centimeters if something is looking, alone, then it's using its eyes to see. but a tree doesn't have eyes to look with. but if something looks/seems to be something, then it has that appearance. (of whatever it is you say afterwards - in this case, 400 cm²) the only real descriptors here are 400cm² & curved on the top, the "like a small fan" is a modifier to "curved on the top," it isn't actually part of the list. so because you only have a list of 2 things, we don't use a comma between them, just "and" It looked to be around 400 square centimeters |
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It looked a little bit dark, but didn't as we expected as shinning gold. It looked a little bit dark, "but" implies a contradiction. which technically there is a contradiction in your text - you expected gold, but the tree was dark. however, in this case we already know the tree is dark, so say "but" it wasn't gold as you expected just doesn't make sense. It looked a little bit dark, |
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many gold leaves hung on a gold tree.
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