June 20, 2023
Global warming
Nowadays, people are facing one of the most important issues in the world – Global warming. It is known as the rise in temperature around the Earth’s atmosphere. The reason causes global warming is mainly humans and it affects people’s lives and the ecosystem dangerously. According to me, the biggest cause of global warming is carbon dioxide (CO2) emissions from burning fossil fuels or gases in facilities. Besides, the burning of petrol for transportation: cars, motorbikes, etc. is also a source to produce carbon dioxide. Moreover, deforestation should be mentioned as one of the causes because of global warming. The cutting down of forests for wood and paper makes the temperature increase rapidly. Furthermore, the worst effect of global warming is the rise of sea levels, famines, water shortages and natural disasters like droughts and floods that may injure or kill some people. What’s more, some species are on the verge of extinction. In conclusion, it is necessary that people have to know that global warming is happening so that they should try to do something to solve the problem and reduce its effect seriously.
Nowadays, people are facing one of the most important issues in the world – Gglobal warming.
The reason causes gGlobal warming is mainly caused by humans and it dangerously affects people’s lives and the ecosystem dangerously.
Or "The reason for global warming is humans..." but that doesn't sound as good
According to me, tThe biggest cause of global warming is carbon dioxide (CO2) emissions from burning fossil fuels or gases in facilities.
Besides, tThe burning of petrol for transportation: cars, motorbikes, etc., is also a source of carbon dioxide
Moreover, dDeforestation should also be mentioned as one of the causes beof global warming. / Deforestation is another cause of global warming.
The cutting down of forests for wood and paper makes the temperature increase rapidly. / Cutting down forests for wood and paper makes the temperature increase rapidly.
Furthermore, tThe worst effects of global warming isare the rise of sea levels / the rising sea levels, famines, water shortages and natural disasters like droughts and floods that may injure or kill (some) people.
In conclusion, it is necessary that people have to know that global warming is happening so that they shouldey can try to do something to solve the problem and seriously reduce its effect seriously/ People have to know that global warming is happening...
Should is used to give a personal opinion. Ex: People should do something to solve the problem of global warming.
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I removed some transitions not because you used them incorrectly, but because using too many transition words makes your writing seem disjointed and repetitive, especially when you use them at the beginning of your sentences. I removed the ones that I felt weren't needed.
June 21, 2023
Thanks for your corrections! I'll use the transitions more carefully :)
Global wWarming
Important words in a title need a capital letter.
Nowadays, people are facing one of the most important issues in the world – Gglobal warming.
Don't need capital 'G'
It is known as's the name describing the rise in temperature aroundof the Earth’s atmosphere.
If something "is known as" it is normally followed by a name. eg He is known as Bob.
The reason causes gGlobal warming is mainly caused by humans and it dangerously affects people’s lives and the ecosystem dangerously.
Sounds better this way.
According to me,In my opinion the biggest cause of global warming is carbon dioxide (CO2) emissions from burning fossil fuels or gases in facilities.
"According to me" sounds less like an opinion and more like you are an authority / expert.
Besides, tThe burning of petrol for transportation: cars, motorbikes, etc.
Don't think you need "Besides". It sounds a little strange here.
is also a source to produceof carbon dioxide production.
"a source of water/oil/food" etc
Moreover, deforestation should be mentioned as one of the causes because of global warming.
Don't need "because"
The cutting down of forests for wood and paper makes the temperature increase rapidly.
Furthermore, the worst effects of global warming isare the rise ofin sea levels, famines, water shortages and natural disasters like droughts and floods that may injure or kill some people.
"some people" sounds slightly dismissive of the issue in this instance. This is a major issue so "people" or "many people" would be better.
You have several 'effects' so plural noun needed.
What’s more, some species are on the verge of extinction.
In conclusion, it is necessary thatfor people have to know that global warming is happening, so that they shouldcan try to do something to solve the problem and seriously reduce its effect seriouslys.
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Good work.
June 21, 2023
Thank you very much! :D
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Global warming Global Important words in a title need a capital letter. |
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Nowadays, people are facing one of the most important issues in the world – Global warming. Nowadays, people are facing one of the most important issues in the world – Don't need capital 'G' Nowadays, people are facing one of the most important issues in the world – |
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It is known as the rise in temperature around the Earth’s atmosphere. It If something "is known as" it is normally followed by a name. eg He is known as Bob. |
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The reason causes global warming is mainly humans and it affects people’s lives and the ecosystem dangerously.
Sounds better this way.
Or "The reason for global warming is humans..." but that doesn't sound as good |
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According to me, the biggest cause of global warming is carbon dioxide (CO2) emissions from burning fossil fuels or gases in facilities.
"According to me" sounds less like an opinion and more like you are an authority / expert.
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Besides, the burning of petrol for transportation: cars, motorbikes, etc.
Don't think you need "Besides". It sounds a little strange here.
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is also a source to produce carbon dioxide. is also a source "a source of water/oil/food" etc |
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Moreover, deforestation should be mentioned as one of the causes because of global warming. Moreover, deforestation should be mentioned as one of the causes Don't need "because"
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The cutting down of forests for wood and paper makes the temperature increase rapidly. This sentence has been marked as perfect! The cutting down of forests for wood and paper makes the temperature increase rapidly. / Cutting down forests for wood and paper makes the temperature increase rapidly. |
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Furthermore, the worst effect of global warming is the rise of sea levels, famines, water shortages and natural disasters like droughts and floods that may injure or kill some people. Furthermore, the worst effects of global warming "some people" sounds slightly dismissive of the issue in this instance. This is a major issue so "people" or "many people" would be better. You have several 'effects' so plural noun needed.
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What’s more, some species are on the verge of extinction. This sentence has been marked as perfect! |
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In conclusion, it is necessary that people have to know that global warming is happening so that they should try to do something to solve the problem and reduce its effect seriously. In conclusion, it is necessary I Should is used to give a personal opinion. Ex: People should do something to solve the problem of global warming. |
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