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tommy

Dec. 23, 2020

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Giving up My Seat

Yesterday morning I noticed that a high school student standing in the train grasped the walking stick made of metal. I gave up my seat for him since he might have some disability with his legs.
However, he apprently seemed upset and was unwilling to sit on my seat.
I felt embarrassed immediately after noticing that it might have been my misunderstanding.
Even though Japanese people claim themselves as kind people, I can't agree it. If someone who have disability or pregnant woman get on the train, you can hardly see anyone who give up his seat.
I want to be a person who always give up my seat even if I feel embarrassed.

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Giving uUp My Seat

Yesterday morning, I noticed that a high school student standing ion the train, graspeding the walking stick made of metal.

You could also say, “A metal walking stick”.

I gave up my seat for him since he mightappeared to have some sort of disability with his legs.

However, he was apparently seemed upset and was unwilling to sit oin my seat.

I felt embarrassed immediately after noticimmediately embarrassed after realizing that it might have been my a misunderstanding on my part.

Even though Japanese people claim themselvesat they are as kind people, I can't agree with it.

If someone who haves a disability or is pregnant woman gets on the train, you can hardly see anyone who gives up histheir seat.

If you don’t know the gender of someone, people used to put either his/her or he/she (depending on what the sentence called for). However, more recently it’s become more common and generally accepted to put “their”, probably because it’s more inclusive.

I want to be a person who always gives up mytheir seat, even if I feel embarrassed.

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Great Job! Just a few corrections!

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ato

Dec. 24, 2020

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I felt embarrassed immediately after noticimmediately embarrassed after realizing that it might have been my a misunderstanding on my part.

"I felt embarrassed immediately after..." sounds more natural and clearer to me because the verb (felt) and the feeling go right next to each other, and then the timing (immediately after) go next to each other.

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ato

Dec. 24, 2020

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Yesterday morning, I noticed that a high school student standing ion the train, graspeding the walking stick made of metal.

The original phrasing could also work: Yesterday morning I noticed that a high school student standing in the train was holding a walking stick made of metal.

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oceandrive76

Dec. 24, 2020

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The original phrasing could also work: Yesterday morning I noticed that a high school student standing in the train was holding a walking stick made of metal.

However, you can't say, "that a high school student standing". You would have to say, "a high school student that was standing".

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ato

Dec. 25, 2020

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I respectfully disagree. While you can certainly add “that” into the sentence, in the context written above (I noticed that...), ‘A high school student standing in the train’ is a grammatically correct subject itself that also doesn’t sound unnatural.

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tommy

Jan. 5, 2021

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Dear Oceandrive76 and Ato, thank you for your feedbacks.

Giving up My Seat

Yesterday morning I noticed that a high school student standing ion the train grasped the walking stick made of metalwas holding a metal walking stick.

You could also say "a cane" or "a crutch." (Google images might help if you're not sure what those terms mean.)

I gave up my seat for him since he mightseemed to have some sort of disability with his legs.

What you wrote is correct, but "disability with his legs" sounds a bit unnatural (at least to my ear). In this context, it's clear that you mean he had a leg-related disability. You could also say "physical disability."

However, he apprently seemed upset and was unwilling to sit oin my seat.

I felt embarrassed immediately after noticing that it might have been my  misunderstanding.

Even though Japanese people claimsee themselves as kind people, I can't agreeentirely agree with it.

If someone who haves a disability or a pregnant woman gets on the train, you can hardly see anyone who gives up his seat.

"Someone who has a disability" and "someone with a disability" are both correct. (But "someone who have disability" is not.)

I want to be a person who always gives up my seat even if I feel embarrassed.

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Yes, it can definitely be hard to navigate this kind of thing. It is good that you are so considerate :) I agree that it's always better to err on the side of being overly generous/polite!

tommy's avatar
tommy

Jan. 5, 2021

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Thank you for your comments! We must not be afraid of failures.

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Aviva

Jan. 5, 2021

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Yes, I agree :) you're welcome

Giving up My Seat


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Giving uUp My Seat

Yesterday morning I noticed that a high school student standing in the train grasped the walking stick made of metal.


Yesterday morning I noticed that a high school student standing ion the train grasped the walking stick made of metalwas holding a metal walking stick.

You could also say "a cane" or "a crutch." (Google images might help if you're not sure what those terms mean.)

Yesterday morning, I noticed that a high school student standing ion the train, graspeding the walking stick made of metal.

You could also say, “A metal walking stick”.

I gave up my seat for him since he might have some disability with his legs.


I gave up my seat for him since he mightseemed to have some sort of disability with his legs.

What you wrote is correct, but "disability with his legs" sounds a bit unnatural (at least to my ear). In this context, it's clear that you mean he had a leg-related disability. You could also say "physical disability."

I gave up my seat for him since he mightappeared to have some sort of disability with his legs.

However, he apprently seemed upset and was unwilling to sit on my seat.


However, he apprently seemed upset and was unwilling to sit oin my seat.

However, he was apparently seemed upset and was unwilling to sit oin my seat.

I felt embarrassed immediately after noticing that it might have been my misunderstanding.


I felt embarrassed immediately after noticing that it might have been my  misunderstanding.

I felt embarrassed immediately after noticimmediately embarrassed after realizing that it might have been my a misunderstanding on my part.

Even though Japanese people claim themselves as kind people, I can't agree it.


Even though Japanese people claimsee themselves as kind people, I can't agreeentirely agree with it.

Even though Japanese people claim themselvesat they are as kind people, I can't agree with it.

If someone who have disability or pregnant woman get on the train, you can hardly see anyone who give up his seat.


If someone who haves a disability or a pregnant woman gets on the train, you can hardly see anyone who gives up his seat.

"Someone who has a disability" and "someone with a disability" are both correct. (But "someone who have disability" is not.)

If someone who haves a disability or is pregnant woman gets on the train, you can hardly see anyone who gives up histheir seat.

If you don’t know the gender of someone, people used to put either his/her or he/she (depending on what the sentence called for). However, more recently it’s become more common and generally accepted to put “their”, probably because it’s more inclusive.

I want to be a person who always give up my seat even if I feel embarrassed.


I want to be a person who always gives up my seat even if I feel embarrassed.

I want to be a person who always gives up mytheir seat, even if I feel embarrassed.

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