yesterday
Ginko Leaves
Last night, the wind must have blown strongly, because my daughter's bicycle, which she keeps outside, had fallen over. The large ginkgo tree next door had also lost almost all of its once brilliantly yellow leaves.
A thick layer of fallen leaves had gathered around its roots, creating a kind of quiet beauty. Many of those ginkgo leaves had also blown into my garden.
昨夜は風が強かったのか、屋外にある娘の自転車が倒れていた。また隣の大きな銀杏の木の黄色く輝いていた葉っぱほとんどなくなっていた。根元にはたくさんの枯れ葉が重なりそれなりにきれいだった。また銀杏の枯れ葉がたくさん僕の庭に飛んできていた。
Ginko Leaves
Last night, the windre must have bloween strongly winds, because my daughter's bicycle, which she keeps outside, had fallenfell over.
"the wind must have blown strongly" is grammatically correct but it sounds unnatural.
"Fell" is better than "had fallen" here
The large ginkgo tree next door had also lost almost all of its once brilliantly yellow leaves.
A thick layer of fallen leaves had gathered around its roots, creating a kind of quiet beauty.
Many of those ginkgo leaves had also blown into my garden.
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Your writing is very beautiful! This reads like poetry.
yesterday
The formatting in my correction looks really weird. Here is the way I think you should reword the sentence.
"Last night, there must have been strong winds, because my daughter's bicycle, which she keeps outside, fell over."
today
I agree @beached_fish that your writing is beautiful and reads like poetry.
I have no wish to change any of the tenses or phrasing. I think the differences may be stylistic or personal preferences.
However, I think "had fallen over" is better than "fell over" because the time aligns with "must have blown" or "must have been."
The only way to use "fell over" is to use the simple past in the first part of the sentence too: for example, "There were strong winds... and her bike fell over." (But I'm not 100% sure on this.)
Ginkgo Leaves
Last night, the wind must have blown strongly, because my daughter's bicycle, which she keeps outside, had fallen over.
The large ginkgo tree next door had also lost almost all of its once brilliantly yellow leaves.
A thick layer of fallen leaves had gathered around its roots, creating a kind of quiet beauty.
Many of those ginkgo leaves had also blown into my garden.
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Well done! You used "had" perfectly multiple times.
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Last night, the wind must have blown strongly, because my daughter's bicycle, which she keeps outside, had fallen over. This sentence has been marked as perfect! Last night, the "the wind must have blown strongly" is grammatically correct but it sounds unnatural. "Fell" is better than "had fallen" here |
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The large ginkgo tree next door had also lost almost all of its once brilliantly yellow leaves. This sentence has been marked as perfect! This sentence has been marked as perfect! |
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A thick layer of fallen leaves had gathered around its roots, creating a kind of quiet beauty. This sentence has been marked as perfect! This sentence has been marked as perfect! |
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Many of those ginkgo leaves had also blown into my garden. This sentence has been marked as perfect! This sentence has been marked as perfect! |
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