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alexwong2164

Sept. 17, 2021

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Getting more confidence

Recently I start doing excise again.

But this time the amount of training is much more!

In fact, I would even say is a “fool” style.

For example, I will be jogging 1 hour for 7 days!

First of all, I do know my body can manage to do without end up injured myself.

But as a normal person spend such amount of time for excise.

I am a fool!

But at the same time, I did agree that I become a little more confidence.

Because this is an achievement makes me feel good about myself.

I don’t even care what other people think of me.

If you want to enrich your confidence level, maybe you follow what I did.

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Recently I start doing excise again.

See comments below.

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Recently I start doing excise again.
-- You need to use the past tense of the verb “start” here. The word “start” itself is the present tense. Looking through your past journals, I have noted that you very often make the same mistake.
TASK: find out the simple past tense of “start”.
--Spelling correction needed for “excise” – TASK: try to find the proper spelling from a dictionary.

But this time the amount of training is much more!
--ok

In fact, I would even say is a “fool” style.
– insert “it” – “In fact, I would even go as far to say that it is a “fool” style.”

For example, I will be jogging 1 hour for 7 days!
--Insert “for” before “1 hour” - “… jogging for 1 hour for 7 days!”

First of all, I do know my body can manage to do without end up injured myself.
--If you use the phrase, “first of all”, then the reader will expect a “second” and possibly even a “third” point.
--The rest of the sentence needs some work, especially in relation to the verbs, “end up” and “injured” ---> “ending up”; “injuring”.

But as a normal person spend such amount of time for excise.
--Not overly sure what you want to say here!

I am a fool!
--ok!

But at the same time, I did agree that I become a little more confidence.
--Verbs again are the problem (see advice below).
-- “confidence” is a noun. You need the adjective (describing word) = “confident”

Because this is an achievement makes me feel good about myself.
-Almost there! --> “Because this is an achievement that makes me feel good about myself.”

I don’t even care what other people think of me.
--ok

If you want to enrich your confidence level, maybe you follow what I did.
--The word “should” or “could” is missing in this sentence. Where do you think it should or could (!) go?

General Advice
I note that you have written many journals. That is an excellent effort and shows dedication. Well done! But you seem to be making the same sort of mistakes time after time. This is especially the case with your use of verbs (action words), particularly the tense (timings) of the verbs – past and present tenses. My advice is that you should find a formal course that will help you master the verbs. Verbs are arguably the most important part of a sentence, so we need to get them right from the start.

Please let me know if I can help you further with any of the above.
Best wishes,
Sincerely,
mjm

Getting more confidence


Recently I start doing excise again.


Recently I start doing excise again.

See comments below.

But this time the amount of training is much more!


In fact, I would even say is a “fool” style.


For example, I will be jogging 1 hour for 7 days!


First of all, I do know my body can manage to do without end up injured myself.


But as a normal person spend such amount of time for excise.


I am a fool!


But at the same time, I did agree that I become a little more confidence.


Because this is an achievement makes me feel good about myself.


I don’t even care what other people think of me.


If you want to enrich your confidence level, maybe you follow what I did.


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