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The Meaning of Success
Success is a tricky concept for me. It's not as easily defined as scientific facts and mathematical axioms. I didn't know it then but I used to think that success meant gathering accolades and becoming wealthy. Part of the reason why I thought that way was society. Society often tells us that the road to success is a linear path: study well, land a high-paying job, own a nice house, and build a great family.
It all changed once I had my first taste of failure. I didn't get the accolades I desperately sought. I ran myself to the ground all for nothing. Then, I started to question what it was all for. It turned out I was merely chasing the wisps of success totally at odds with who I really am. I mistook validation for happiness.
At this point in my life, I think success is about being present in the moment. It's appreciating the little things in life while seeking to grow, one step at a time. This definition of success may not apply to everyone but it's what suits me best.
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The Meaning of Success
Success is a tricky concept for me.
It's not as easily defined as scientific facts and mathematical axioms.
I didn't know it then but I used to think that success meant gathering accolades and becoming wealthy.
Part of the reason why I thought that way was society.
Society often tells us that the road to success is a linear path: study well, land a high-paying job, own a nice house, and build a great family.
It all changed once I had my first taste of failure.
I didn't get the accolades I desperately sought.
I ran myself to the ground all for nothing.
Then, I started to question what it was all for.
It turned out I was merely chasing the wisps of success totally at odds with who I really am.
I mistook validation for happiness.
At this point in my life, I think success is about being present in the moment.
It's appreciating the little things in life while seeking to grow, one step at a time.
This definition of success may not apply to everyone but it's what suits me best.
yesterday
Thank you!
Part of the reason why I thought that way was (the influence of) society. Part of the reason why I thought that way was (the influence of) society.
Because the rest of this piece is written in a pretty formal place, it's better to be explicit that it's about the influence of society here.
I ran myself into the ground, all for nothing. I ran myself into the ground, all for nothing.
"all for nothing" is a phrase but it's not an adjective or adverb, so it needs a comma to seperate it here.
If you omitted the "all" you could also omit the comma.
It turned out I was merely chasing the wisps of success totally at odds with who I really am.
It turned out I was merely chasing wisps of success totally at odds with who I really am.
"the wisps of success" would imply that there's some aspects of success that you've either already detailed or assume to be generally known.
(I assume wisps is a poetic choice here so left it alone, it's not a common phrase though)
yesterday
Thank you!
Success is a tricky concept for me.
It's not as easily defined as scientific facts and mathematical axioms.
I didn't know it then but I used to think that success meant gathering accolades and becoming wealthy.
I used to think that success meant gathering accolades and becoming wealthy.
"I didn't know it then" doesn't need to be included since "I used to think" automatically implies you don't think like that now.
Part of the reason why I thought that way was because of society. Part of the reason why I thought that way was because of society.
It all changed once I haexperienced my first taste of failure.
It all changed once I experienced my first taste of failure.
"had" isn't wrong but "experienced" sounds more natural.
I didn't get the accolades I desperately sought.
I ran myself into the ground all for nothing.
I ran myself into the ground for nothing.
Then, I started to question what it was all for.
It turned out I was merely chasing the wisps of success totally at odds with who I really am.
It turned out I was merely chasing wisps of success totally at odds with who I really am.
I mistook validation for happiness.
At this point in my life, I think success is about being present in the moment.
It's appreciating the little things in life while seeking to grow, one step at a time.
This definition of success may not apply to everyone but it's what suits me best.
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I ran myself into the ground I ran myself into the ground, all for nothing. I ran myself into the ground, all for nothing. "all for nothing" is a phrase but it's not an adjective or adverb, so it needs a comma to seperate it here. If you omitted the "all" you could also omit the comma. |
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It turned out I was merely chasing
It turned out I was merely chasing "the wisps of success" would imply that there's some aspects of success that you've either already detailed or assume to be generally known. (I assume wisps is a poetic choice here so left it alone, it's not a common phrase though) |
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