Feb. 13, 2020
The Valentine Day💝
Tomorrow is the Valentine Day. In Japan, girls give a chocolate on that day to a boy who she likes. I am going to give my bosses a bit expensive chocolates and will get nice sweets on March 14. March 14 is called the White Day here. On that day, men have to give a nice sweet back to the girl who gave them a chocolate on February 14.
My bosses always give me an expensive nice sweet. I never fail to give them chocolates for nice sweets I could get on the White Day.
I also give Tirol chocolates to male colleagues so that I can get many sweets from them. Tirol chocolate is ¥15 per piece.😂 Some of them bought me a 1000 yen lunch for one 15 yen Tirol chocolate. I am very happy I have had nice colleagues.
Some women don't like the Valentine Day but I really enjoy it every year.😆
バレンタインデー
明日はバレンタインデーだ。日本では女の子が好きな男の子にチョコをあげる日。私は上司達にちょっといいチョコをあげます。そして3/14にナイスなお菓子をもらいます。3/14はホワイトデーと呼んでます。その日に男性は2/14にチョコをくれた女の子にお菓子をお返ししなければなりません。
私の上司達はいつも高価で美味しいお菓子をくれます。 私はホワイトデーにナイスなお菓子をゲットするために必ず上司にチョコをあげます。
あと、男性の同僚達からもお菓子をもらうためにチロルチョコをあげます。チロルチョコは1個15円です。チロルチョコ1個でホワイトデーにランチをおごってもらったことがあります。ナイスな同僚がいて私は幸せ者です。
バレンタインデーが嫌いな女性もいますが、私は毎年楽しんでます。
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In Japan, girls give a chocolate on that day to a boy who sto boys they likes.
In Japan, girls give chocolate to boys they like.
I don't think "on thanked day" is necessary. We already know you are talking about Valentine's Day.
On thatis day, menboys have to give a nice sweet backs to the girls who gave them a chocolate on February 14.
On this day, boys have to give nice sweets to the girls who gave them chocolate on February 14.
😂 Some of themmy male colleagues even bought me a 1,000 yen lunch forin return for just one 15 yen Tirol chocolate.
😂 Some of my male colleagues even bought me a 1,000 yen lunch in return for just one 15 yen Tirol chocolate.
I am very happy that I have had nice colleagues.
I am very happy that I have nice colleagues.
If you still have nice colleagues now, you don't need "had."
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Nice job. I just made a few suggestions.
Feb. 14, 2020
Thanked day😂 Thank you very much!
I gave nice chocolates to my bosses today as I posted😁
The Valentine's Day💝
Valentine's Day💝
Tomorrow is the Valentine's Day.
Tomorrow is Valentine's Day.
IOn that day in Japan, girls give a chocolate on that day to a boy who sthey likes.
On that day in Japan girls give chocolate to a boy who they like.
I moved "on that day" in the beginning so it sounds just a bit more natural; also i changed "she" to "they" since you said "girls" in plural.
I am going to give my bosses a bitsome expensive chocolates and will get nice sweets on March 14.
I am going to give my bosses some expensive chocolates and will get nice sweets on March 14.
March 14 is called the White Day here.
March 14 is called White Day here.
On that day, men have to give a nice sweets back to the girl who gave them a chocolate on February 14.
On that day, men have to give nice sweets back to the girl who gave them chocolate on February 14.
My bosses always give me an expensive and nice sweets.
My bosses always give me expensive and nice sweets.
I never fail to give them chocolates forso I can get nice sweets I could get on theon White Day.
I never fail to give them chocolates so I can get nice sweets on White Day.
I also give Tirol chocolates to male colleagues so that I can get many sweets from them.
Tirol chocolate is ¥15 per piece.
😂 SomOne of themmy colleagues bought me a 1000 yen lunch in return for one 15 yen Tirol chocolate.
😂 One of my colleagues bought me a 1000 yen lunch in return for one 15 yen Tirol chocolate.
I am very happy I have had nice colleagues.
I am very happy I have nice colleagues.
Some women don't like the Valentine's Day but I really enjoy it every year.
Some women don't like Valentine's Day but I really enjoy it every year.
March 1, 2020
Thank you very much!😄
The Valentine's Day💝
Valentine's Day💝
Tomorrow is the Valentine's Day.
Tomorrow is Valentine's Day.
In Japan, on that day girls give a chocolate on that day to a boy who sto boys they likes.
In Japan, on that day girls give chocolate to boys they like.
I am going to give my bosses a bitsome expensive chocolates, and then I will get nice sweets in return on March 14.
I am going to give my bosses some expensive chocolates, and then I will get nice sweets in return on March 14.
March 14 is called the White Day here.
March 14 is called White Day here.
My bosses always give me an nice expensive nice sweet.
My bosses always give me a nice expensive sweet.
I never fail to give them chocolates for nice sweets I could get on theon Valentine's Day, so I can get nice sweets on White Day.
I never fail to give them chocolates on Valentine's Day, so I can get nice sweets on White Day.
I also give Tirol chocolates to my male colleagues so that I can get many sweets from them. I also give Tirol chocolates to my male colleagues so that I can get many sweets from them.
Tirol chocolate is ¥15 per piece.
😂 Some of them even bought me a 1000 yen lunch for one 15 yen Tirol chocolate. 😂 Some of them even bought me a 1000 yen lunch for one 15 yen Tirol chocolate.
I am very happy that I have had nice colleagues. I am very happy that I have had nice colleagues.
Some women don't like the Valentine's Day, but I really enjoy it every year.
Some women don't like Valentine's Day, but I really enjoy it every year.
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Great story! And really almost perfect grammar...
Feb. 14, 2020
Thank you very much! I gave chocolstes to some male colleagues today. I will collect nice sweets next month😆
The Valentine’s Day💝
Valentine’s Day💝
Tomorrow is the Valentine’s Day.
Tomorrow is Valentine’s Day.
When talking about holidays, english speakers don’t use the definite article. Valentine’s day is also a little different. The word “Valentine” is accompanied by a “ ‘s “ at the end!
In Japan, girls give a chocolate on that day to a boy who she likes.
I am going to give my bosses a bitsome expensive chocolates and will get nice sweets for them on March 14.
I am going to give my bosses some expensive chocolates and will get nice sweets for them on March 14.
March 14 is called the White Day here.
On that day, men have to give a nice sweet back to the girl who gave them a chocolate on February 14.
My bosses always give me an expensive and nice sweets.
My bosses always give me expensive and nice sweets.
I never fail to give them chocolates forso I can get nice sweets I could get on theon White Day.
I never fail to give them chocolates so I can get nice sweets on White Day
I also give Tirol chocolates to male colleagues so that I can get many sweets from them.
Tirol chocolate is ¥15 per piece.
😂 Some of them bought me a 1000 yen lunch for one 15 yen Tirol chocolate.
I am very happy I have had nice colleagues.
Some women don't like the Valentine Day but I really enjoy it every year.
😆
Feb. 14, 2020
Tomorrow is the Valentine’s Day.
When talking about holidays, english speakers don’t use the definite article. Valentine’s day is also a little different. The word “Valentine” is accompanied by a “ ‘s “ at the end!
Oh I didn't know that. Thank you very much for tellingm me that and correcting my English😄
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In Japan, girls give a chocolate on that day to a boy who she likes. This sentence has been marked as perfect!
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I moved "on that day" in the beginning so it sounds just a bit more natural; also i changed "she" to "they" since you said "girls" in plural.
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I never fail to give them chocolates for nice sweets I could get on the White Day.
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I also give Tirol chocolates to male colleagues so that I can get many sweets from them. This sentence has been marked as perfect! I also give Tirol chocolates to my male colleagues so that I can get many sweets from them. I also give Tirol chocolates to my male colleagues so that I can get many sweets from them. This sentence has been marked as perfect! |
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😂 Some of them bought me a 1000 yen lunch for one 15 yen Tirol chocolate. This sentence has been marked as perfect! 😂 Some of them even bought me a 1000 yen lunch for one 15 yen Tirol chocolate. 😂 Some of them even bought me a 1000 yen lunch for one 15 yen Tirol chocolate.
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I am very happy I have had nice colleagues. This sentence has been marked as perfect! I am very happy that I have had nice colleagues. I am very happy that I have had nice colleagues.
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