April 28, 2024
To start with, doing business in the modern world is not easy. The success of a business depends on how well it predicts consumer demands.
The author of the article presented the ideas of futurologists in the field of future market trends. Let's look at some of them
First of all, the needs of consumers are becoming more personalized. It means that mass marketing is outdated, today's trend is an individual approach.
Secondly, marketers will focus on the needs of both the old and parents.
Smart gadgets and services will become another trend, because modern people often lack time for household routine.
And finally, new technologies. People are increasingly using online food deliveries, online services to pay bills, buy tickets, and study.
According to these trends, I can name some products and services of the future. For example, retirement homes for cats and dogs, snacks to combat depression, clothing with an in-built massage facility as specific consumer requests.
Products for calming parents will also become especially popular. For example, products aimed at children’s health and diet will be a major growth area.
As for new technologies, products in this area will become increasingly popular. For instance, intelligent refrigerators, smart cookers, delivery services and etc
And from my point of view, by the end of next year, electric cars are about to become common
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To start with, doing business in the modern world is not easy.
The success of a business depends on how well it predicts consumer demands.
The author of the article presenteds the ideas of futurologists in the field of future market trends.
Unless the article is only of historical interest, it's best to use the present here.
A futurologist only deals with the future, so "future" market trends is a bit redundant!
Let's look at some of them First of all, the needs of consumers are becoming more personalized.
It means that mass marketing is outdated, - today's trend is an individual approach.
Commas separate different parts of the same idea while a hyphen introduces a new idea. If you can replace the comma with "while", a hyphen is usually better.
Secondly, marketers will focus on the needs of both the old and parentsparents and the elderly.
The elderly is more respectful and formal in a business context. Placing parents before elderly feels more idiomatic - young to old. Just a random quirk of the language.
Smart gadgets and services will become another trend, because modern people often lack time for their household routinechores.
Chores emphasises that the routines are a bit boring and tiresome.
And finally, new technologies.
People are increasingly using online food deliveries, online services to pay bills, buy tickets, and study.
According to these trends, I can namepredict some products and services of the future.
Nothing wrong with your English, but I feel this is better style.
For example, retirement homes for cats and dogs, snacks to combat depression, and clothing with an in-built massage facility as specific consumer requests.
Again a style point - I don't feel the last clause adds anything of value.
Products for calmhelping parents with stress will also become especially popular.
Again a style point - calming isn't quite right here.
For example, pProducts aimed at children’s health and diet will be a major growth area.
Style again - you announced some time ago that these are examples - no need to repeat that here...
As for new technologies, products in this area will become increasingly popular.
For instance, intelligent refrigerators, smart cookers, delivery services and etc
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And from my point of viewin my opinion, by the end of next year, electric cars are about to becomewill become increasingly common
Etc stands on its own - no need for "and"
Opinion or judgement sounds more professional that point of view.
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Pretty good on the whole - apart from a couple of clear errors it's more a question of idiomatic style and finding a more formal register for business English.
To start with, doing business in the modern world is not easy.
The success of a business depends on how well it predicts consumer demands.
The author of the article presented the ideas of futurologists in the field of future market trends.
Let's look at some of them
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To start with, doing business in the modern world is not easy.
The success of a business depends on how well it predicts consumer demands.
The author of the article presented the ideas of futurologists in the field of future market trends.
Let's look at some of them
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First of all, the needs of consumers are becoming more personalized.
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Secondly, marketers will focus on the needs of both the oelderly and parents.
Elderly is a more formal and appropriate term for this context.
Smart gadgets and services will also become another trend, because in modern society, people often lack time for household routines.
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Technology is also used as a plural term rather than technologies.
People are increasingly using online food deliveries, and online services to pay bills, buy tickets, and study.
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My edits help the sentence to sound more natural.
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Exchange 'for example' for 'such as' because you said 'for example' before (reducing repetition).
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It means that mass marketing is outdated, today's trend is an individual approach. It means that mass marketing is outdated, today's trend is utilising / having / using an individual approach. It means that mass marketing is outdated Commas separate different parts of the same idea while a hyphen introduces a new idea. If you can replace the comma with "while", a hyphen is usually better. |
Secondly, marketers will focus on the needs of both the old and parents. Secondly, marketers will focus on the needs of both the Elderly is a more formal and appropriate term for this context. Secondly, marketers will focus on the needs of both The elderly is more respectful and formal in a business context. Placing parents before elderly feels more idiomatic - young to old. Just a random quirk of the language. |
Smart gadgets and services will become another trend, because modern people often lack time for household routine. Smart gadgets and services will also become another trend, because in modern society, people often lack time for household routines. Smart gadgets and services will become another trend, because modern people often lack time for their household Chores emphasises that the routines are a bit boring and tiresome. |
And finally, new technologies. And finally, new technolog Technology is also used as a plural term rather than technologies. This sentence has been marked as perfect! |
People are increasingly using online food deliveries, online services to pay bills, buy tickets, and study. People are increasingly using online food deliveries This sentence has been marked as perfect! |
According to these trends, I can name some products and services of the future. According to these trends, I c My edits help the sentence to sound more natural. According to these trends, I can Nothing wrong with your English, but I feel this is better style. |
For example, retirement homes for cats and dogs, snacks to combat depression, clothing with an in-built massage facility as specific consumer requests. For example For example, retirement homes for cats and dogs, snacks to combat depression, and clothing with an in-built massage facility Again a style point - I don't feel the last clause adds anything of value. |
Products for calming parents will also become especially popular. Products for Products for Again a style point - calming isn't quite right here. |
For example, products aimed at children’s health and diet will be a major growth area.
Exchange 'for example' for 'such as' because you said 'for example' before (reducing repetition).
Style again - you announced some time ago that these are examples - no need to repeat that here... |
As for new technologies, products in this area will become increasingly popular. As for new technolog This sentence has been marked as perfect! |
For instance, intelligent refrigerators, smart cookers, delivery services and etc And from my point of view, by the end of next year, electric cars are about to become common For instance, intelligent refrigerators, smart cookers, delivery services Although it's not strictly incorrect, I was always taught never to start a sentence with 'and' because it's a conjunction. For instance, intelligent refrigerators, smart cookers, delivery services Etc stands on its own - no need for "and" Opinion or judgement sounds more professional that point of view. |
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