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jorgenager

July 12, 2022

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From the Bottom of my Heart

Yesterday it was a very sad day for me. I knew something unusual must be happening to my long-standing language partner. She wasn’t just my language partner. Over the years we have been in contact, we had become very close friends. We usually spoke twice a week. However, throughout the last few weeks, that frequency had shrunk to such an extent that we just exchanged a few text messages once a week. Yesterday, I sent her the simplest of the messages: “Hi Patti, how are you?” We were exchanging messages for a short time; nothing out of the ordinary. At one point, I asked her if she would like to speak to me later. She told me that wouldn’t be possible and that there was something she needed to tell me. I feared the worst and the worst was what she told me: “I think that our friendship has fizzled out” When I asked her what the matter was, her reply was: “I guess all friendships aren’t meant to last, we’ve had six great years”.

I had been attending a language school for a few months and wanted to put into practise the things I had learned there. To achieve that, I had to meet people, the so-called language partners, willing to practise with me. That way, I met Patti on one of those websites for language learners who are looking for language partners. She was an English woman learning Spanish and I was a Spanish man learning English. Our beginning wasn’t very straightforward. Not only was it the first time I spoke with a foreign person, but it was also the first time I spoke in English. Not to mention, I had never met anyone on the internet. I’d like to add that, though I’m not a child, I’m an extremely shy person. At first, we just exchanged text messages. After a few months, we went from exchanging messages to voice calls. Finally, my for-then-already friend sent me a video message as a present on my birthday. It was one of the best presents I have ever received. From then until a few weeks ago, we spoke once, twice and even three times a week. Throughout these six years of friendship, we have spoken about everything. I know everything, or almost everything, about her and she knows almost everything about me. We have laughed together. We have cried together. We have shared our thoughts, our joys, and our sorrows.

Our friendship is over. According to her words, it wasn’t meant to last. Thanks Patti for let me know you. Thanks for teaching me so many things. Thanks for making me an improved version of my old self. You have made me see things from a completely different perspective. Not only were you the first foreign person I spoke to, but you were also the first black person I ever met. We had nothing in common and even so, our friendship lasted almost a lifetime.

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However, throughoutduring the last few weeks, that frequency had shrunkdiminished to such an extent that we just exchanged a few text messages once a week.

I had been attending a language school for a few months and wanted to put into practise the things I had learned there.

practise is fine if you use English form the UK or Australia.

Finally, my for-then-already friend sent me a video message as a present on my birthday.

Finally, my by then, already friend, sent me a video message as a present on my birthday.

Thanks Patti for let meting me get to know you.

We had nothing in common and even so, our friendship seemed to have lasted almost a lifetime.

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There weren't too many changes that needed to be made in addition to what's already been said by other correctors.. But content wise, I really felt the emotion in your writing which I enjoyed reading. It was truly heartfelt as I'm sure many of us have been in a a similar position at some point in our lives. I hope that you can both reach out to each other and reconnect in the near future.

From the Bottom of my Heart

Capitalization fine as a title

Yesterday it was a very sad day for me.

I knew something unusual must bewas happening to my long-standing language partner.

Over the years that we haved been in contact, we had become very close friends.

Alt: that we had known each other (more informal)

However, throughoutover the last few weeks, that frequency had shrunk to such an extent that we just exchanged a few text messages once a week.

Yesterday, I sent her the simplest of the messages: “Hi Patti, how are you?” We were exchanging messages for a short time;-- nothing out of the ordinary.

What comes after ; should be a complete sentence. You can use an em dash for a phrase.

I feared the worst, and the worst was what she told me:, “I think that our friendship has fizzled out.” When I asked her what the matter was, her reply was:, “I guess all friendships aren’t meant to last, we’ve had six great years”.

To achieve that, I had to meet people, the so-called language partners, willing to practise with me.

Just as a note, practice is the American English spelling -- not sure whether you are studying another kind!

She was an English woman learning Spanish, and I was a Spanish man learning English.

Our beginning wasn’t very straightforwardIt was hard at first.

Not clear what you mean by straightforward.

Not only was it the first time I spoke with a foreign person, but it was also the first time I spoke in English.

Not to mention, I had never met anyone on the internet until then.

Finally, my for-then-already friendriend at the time sent me a video message as a present on my birthday.

Throughout these six years of friendship, we have spoken about everything.

Alt: Just about everything

I know everything, or almost everything, about her, and she knows almost everything about me.

Thanks, Patti, for letting me know you.

Alt: Letting me into your life (though this is more figurative).

Thanks for making me an improved version of my old self.

Not only were you the first foreign person I spoke to, but you were also the first bBlack person I ever met.

We had nothing in common and even so, it was as if our friendship had lasted almost a lifetime.

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Hey! Thank you for sharing this reflection; I resonated with a lot of it, having seen friendships with folks I have met online, especially those I have done language exchanges with, change with time. The wonderful thing about exchanges, which so often involve vulnerability and intimacy, can lead to finding a friend where you would least expect to, and losing a connection like that can be a painful process.

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jorgenager

July 14, 2022

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I completely agree with you. It doesn't matter whether you meet someone on the internet or in the flesh. In fact, she became a very close friend and I hope in the near future we can in some way resume our friendship. Many thaks my friend for your reflection.

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jorgenager

July 14, 2022

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By the way, thanks, Toobatea, for taking the time to read and correct my long post. I really appreciate it.

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toobatea

July 15, 2022

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Of course! I hope the same for you!

From the Bbottom of my Hheart

Yesterday it, was a very sad day for me.

I knew something unusual must bewas happening towith my long-standing language partner.

She wasn’t just my language partner.

Over the years that we have been in contact, we had become very close friends.

We usually spoke twice a week.

However, throughoutduring the last few weeks, that frequency had shrunkdropped to such an extent that we justonly exchanged a few text messages once a week.

Yesterday, I sent her the simplest of the messages: “Hi Patti, how are you?”. We were exchanging messages for a short time; nothing out of the ordinary.

At one point, I asked her if she would like to speak to me later.

She told me that wouldn’t be possible and that there was something she needed to tell me.

I feared the worst and the worst was what she told me:, “I think that our friendship has fizzled out”. When I asked her what the matter was, her reply was:, “I guess all friendships aren’t meant to last, we’ve had six great years”.

I had been attending a language school for a few months and wanted to put into practisce the things I had learned there.

To achieve thatis, I had to meet people, the so-called language partners, willing to practise with me.

That way, I met Patti on one of those websites for language learners who are looking for language partners.

She was an English woman learning Spanish and I was a Spanish man learning English.

Our beginning wasn’t very straightforward.The start of our conversations were not easy.

Not only was it the first time I spoke with a foreign person, but it was also the first time I spoke in English.

Not to mention, I had never met anyone on the internet before.

I’d like to add that, though I’m not a child, I’m an extremely shy person.

At first, we just exchanged text messages.

After a few months, we went from exchanging messages to voicphone calls.

Finally, my for- by then-already friend sent me a video message as a present on my birthday.

It was one of the best presents I haved ever received.

From then until a few weeks ago, we spoke once, twice and even three times a week.

Throughout these past six years of friendship, we have spoken about everything.

I know everything, or almost everything, about her and she knows almost everything about me.

We have laughed together.

We have cried together.

We have shared our thoughts, our joys, and our sorrows.

Our friendship is over.

According to her words, it wasn’t meant to last.

Thanks Patti for let meting me get to know you.

Thanks for teaching me so many things.

Thanks for making me an improved version of my oldformer self.

You have made me see things from a completely different perspective.

Not only were you the first foreign person I spoke to, but you were also the first black person I ever met.

We had nothing in common and even so, it seemed as if our friendship lasted almost a lifetime.

Six years would not constitute a life time.

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jorgenager

July 13, 2022

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Many thanks Romany for taking the time to read and correct my long post. I really appreciate it.

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frannie_

July 14, 2022

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We had nothing in common and even so, it seemed as if our friendship lasted almost a lifetime.

Hi I saw this feedback and as a native English speaker who loves reading I would like to say this is a great use of SIMILE ! It is correct do not worry it is great English!!!

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jorgenager

July 17, 2022

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As a native English speaker who loves reading, can you recommend some books? Thanks.

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frannie_

July 17, 2022

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As a native English speaker who loves reading, can you recommend some books? Thanks.

- I would recommend sci-fi like “The Knife of Never Letting Go”
- YA novels: “It ends with us”
- if you want extremely formal language exposure: any British books from the nineteenth century like the Bronte sisters, Charles Dickens, etc

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jorgenager

July 18, 2022

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- I would recommend sci-fi like “The Knife of Never Letting Go” - YA novels: “It ends with us” - if you want extremely formal language exposure: any British books from the nineteenth century like the Bronte sisters, Charles Dickens, etc

Thanks Frannie. Your recommendations are very helpful.

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frannie_

July 19, 2022

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Thanks Frannie. Your recommendations are very helpful.

That is all good jorgenager I wish you luck with your endeavours. When you have finished reading any English books upload a review and I shall mark it readily !

From the Bottom of my Heart


From the Bbottom of my Hheart

From the Bottom of my Heart

Capitalization fine as a title

Yesterday it was a very sad day for me.


Yesterday it, was a very sad day for me.

Yesterday it was a very sad day for me.

I knew something unusual must be happening to my long-standing language partner.


I knew something unusual must bewas happening towith my long-standing language partner.

I knew something unusual must bewas happening to my long-standing language partner.

She wasn’t just my language partner.


This sentence has been marked as perfect!

Over the years we have been in contact, we had become very close friends.


Over the years that we have been in contact, we had become very close friends.

Over the years that we haved been in contact, we had become very close friends.

Alt: that we had known each other (more informal)

We usually spoke twice a week.


This sentence has been marked as perfect!

However, throughout the last few weeks, that frequency had shrunk to such an extent that we just exchanged a few text messages once a week.


However, throughoutduring the last few weeks, that frequency had shrunkdropped to such an extent that we justonly exchanged a few text messages once a week.

However, throughoutover the last few weeks, that frequency had shrunk to such an extent that we just exchanged a few text messages once a week.

However, throughoutduring the last few weeks, that frequency had shrunkdiminished to such an extent that we just exchanged a few text messages once a week.

Yesterday, I sent her the simplest of the messages: “Hi Patti, how are you?” We were exchanging messages for a short time; nothing out of the ordinary.


Yesterday, I sent her the simplest of the messages: “Hi Patti, how are you?”. We were exchanging messages for a short time; nothing out of the ordinary.

Yesterday, I sent her the simplest of the messages: “Hi Patti, how are you?” We were exchanging messages for a short time;-- nothing out of the ordinary.

What comes after ; should be a complete sentence. You can use an em dash for a phrase.

At one point, I asked her if she would like to speak to me later.


This sentence has been marked as perfect!

She told me that wouldn’t be possible and that there was something she needed to tell me.


This sentence has been marked as perfect!

I feared the worst and the worst was what she told me: “I think that our friendship has fizzled out” When I asked her what the matter was, her reply was: “I guess all friendships aren’t meant to last, we’ve had six great years”.


I feared the worst and the worst was what she told me:, “I think that our friendship has fizzled out”. When I asked her what the matter was, her reply was:, “I guess all friendships aren’t meant to last, we’ve had six great years”.

I feared the worst, and the worst was what she told me:, “I think that our friendship has fizzled out.” When I asked her what the matter was, her reply was:, “I guess all friendships aren’t meant to last, we’ve had six great years”.

I had been attending a language school for a few months and wanted to put into practise the things I had learned there.


I had been attending a language school for a few months and wanted to put into practisce the things I had learned there.

I had been attending a language school for a few months and wanted to put into practise the things I had learned there.

practise is fine if you use English form the UK or Australia.

To achieve that, I had to meet people, the so-called language partners, willing to practise with me.


To achieve thatis, I had to meet people, the so-called language partners, willing to practise with me.

To achieve that, I had to meet people, the so-called language partners, willing to practise with me.

Just as a note, practice is the American English spelling -- not sure whether you are studying another kind!

That way, I met Patti on one of those websites for language learners who are looking for language partners.


This sentence has been marked as perfect!

She was an English woman learning Spanish and I was a Spanish man learning English.


This sentence has been marked as perfect!

She was an English woman learning Spanish, and I was a Spanish man learning English.

Our beginning wasn’t very straightforward.


Our beginning wasn’t very straightforward.The start of our conversations were not easy.

Our beginning wasn’t very straightforwardIt was hard at first.

Not clear what you mean by straightforward.

Not only was it the first time I spoke with a foreign person, but it was also the first time I spoke in English.


This sentence has been marked as perfect!

Not only was it the first time I spoke with a foreign person, but it was also the first time I spoke in English.

Not to mention, I had never met anyone on the internet.


Not to mention, I had never met anyone on the internet before.

Not to mention, I had never met anyone on the internet until then.

I’d like to add that, though I’m not a child, I’m an extremely shy person.


This sentence has been marked as perfect!

At first, we just exchanged text messages.


This sentence has been marked as perfect!

After a few months, we went from exchanging messages to voice calls.


After a few months, we went from exchanging messages to voicphone calls.

Finally, my for-then-already friend sent me a video message as a present on my birthday.


Finally, my for- by then-already friend sent me a video message as a present on my birthday.

Finally, my for-then-already friendriend at the time sent me a video message as a present on my birthday.

Finally, my for-then-already friend sent me a video message as a present on my birthday.

Finally, my by then, already friend, sent me a video message as a present on my birthday.

It was one of the best presents I have ever received.


It was one of the best presents I haved ever received.

From then until a few weeks ago, we spoke once, twice and even three times a week.


This sentence has been marked as perfect!

Throughout these six years of friendship, we have spoken about everything.


Throughout these past six years of friendship, we have spoken about everything.

Throughout these six years of friendship, we have spoken about everything.

Alt: Just about everything

I know everything, or almost everything, about her and she knows almost everything about me.


I know everything, or almost everything, about her and she knows almost everything about me.

I know everything, or almost everything, about her, and she knows almost everything about me.

We have laughed together.


This sentence has been marked as perfect!

We have cried together.


This sentence has been marked as perfect!

We have shared our thoughts, our joys, and our sorrows.


This sentence has been marked as perfect!

Our friendship is over.


This sentence has been marked as perfect!

According to her words, it wasn’t meant to last.


This sentence has been marked as perfect!

Thanks Patti for let me know you.


Thanks Patti for let meting me get to know you.

Thanks, Patti, for letting me know you.

Alt: Letting me into your life (though this is more figurative).

Thanks Patti for let meting me get to know you.

Thanks for teaching me so many things.


This sentence has been marked as perfect!

Thanks for making me an improved version of my old self.


Thanks for making me an improved version of my oldformer self.

Thanks for making me an improved version of my old self.

You have made me see things from a completely different perspective.


This sentence has been marked as perfect!

Not only were you the first foreign person I spoke to, but you were also the first black person I ever met.


This sentence has been marked as perfect!

Not only were you the first foreign person I spoke to, but you were also the first bBlack person I ever met.

We had nothing in common and even so, our friendship lasted almost a lifetime.


We had nothing in common and even so, it seemed as if our friendship lasted almost a lifetime.

Six years would not constitute a life time.

We had nothing in common and even so, it was as if our friendship had lasted almost a lifetime.

We had nothing in common and even so, our friendship seemed to have lasted almost a lifetime.

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