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France vs Japan


Few months ago in Tokyo you can found this see through public toilets.

When use it the glass become opaque.

The designer said most people will think of public toilet is dirty place.

So, building a see through toilet people can clearly see the inside condition.

2 years ago in France you can find this open male toilet (Uritrottoir) in the street.

Open means a toilet without any walls cover.

Because in France most men will pee on the street?!

Actually, some people (even female) did agree this idea.

If you got any better ideas please do let us know.

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France vs JapanPublic Toilets in Japan and France

The title needs to reflect the story, which was solely about toilets. France vs. Japan sounds too board, and too much like a football match.

Few months ago in Tokyo you can found this, I saw see through public toilets in Tokyo.

It is not clear whether you personally saw the toilette in Tokyo, or you saw it in a magazine. My correction is based on the former.

When use itthe toilet is in use, the glass becomes opaque.

The designer of the toilet said most people will think of public toilet iss as a dirty place.

So, by building a see through toilet, people can clearly see the inside condition inside.

2 years ago in France you can find this open male toilet (Uritrottoir), open male toilets, known as l'Uritrottoir started appearing in the streets.

Open meanBy open, I mean it is a toilet without any walls cover.

Because in FrancIs it because most men will pee oin the streets in France?

Actually, some people (even, including female) dids agree with this idea.

Grammatically, this is correct, but what idea are you talking about. You've only stated a fact that France has these open toilets for men, but it is a statement, not an idea.

If you gothave any better ideasother toilet stories to share, please do let usme know.

First of all, you would not use "got", because that is too informal to use in writing. It tends to make you appear uneducated. Again, your story did not present any ideas, merely facts regarding toilets in the two countries, therefore, what ideas are you expecting people to share with you? Also, you wrote "please let US know". Who is us? Since you are writing from the perspective of a group of people, it is better to use "please let me know".

France vs Japan

FA few months ago in Tokyo you can found thisthey installed see -through public toilets.

Or you could use transparent instead of see-through

When the toilet is in use it the glass becomes opaque.

The designer said most people will think ofa public toilet iswill be a dirty place.

So, by building a see -through toilet people can clearly see the inside condition of the toilet before going inside.

2Two years ago in France you can find this open male toilet (Uritrottoir) in the street.

I am not sure what you are trying to say In this sentence.

Perhaps ‘Two years ago in France I saw an open male toilet...’? Or ‘Two years ago in France they installed an open male toilet...’?

In written English, numbers under 10 are usually written as words, not numbers. So we would use seven rather than 7, etc.

OBy open I means a toilet without any walls cover.

Again I am not sure what you are trying to say in this sentence.

BIs this because in France most men will pee on the street?

Actually, some people (evenincluding females) did agreed with this idea.

Are you trying to say that women agreed with the installation of an open toilet or that men piss in the street??? The sentence isn’t clear.

If you gothave any better ideas please do let usme know.

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France vs Japan


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France vs JapanPublic Toilets in Japan and France

The title needs to reflect the story, which was solely about toilets. France vs. Japan sounds too board, and too much like a football match.

Few months ago in Tokyo you can found this see through public toilets.


FA few months ago in Tokyo you can found thisthey installed see -through public toilets.

Or you could use transparent instead of see-through

Few months ago in Tokyo you can found this, I saw see through public toilets in Tokyo.

It is not clear whether you personally saw the toilette in Tokyo, or you saw it in a magazine. My correction is based on the former.

When use it the glass become opaque.


When the toilet is in use it the glass becomes opaque.

When use itthe toilet is in use, the glass becomes opaque.

The designer said most people will think of public toilet is dirty place.


The designer said most people will think ofa public toilet iswill be a dirty place.

The designer of the toilet said most people will think of public toilet iss as a dirty place.

So, building a see through toilet people can clearly see the inside condition.


So, by building a see -through toilet people can clearly see the inside condition of the toilet before going inside.

So, by building a see through toilet, people can clearly see the inside condition inside.

2 years ago in France you can find this open male toilet (Uritrottoir) in the street.


2Two years ago in France you can find this open male toilet (Uritrottoir) in the street.

I am not sure what you are trying to say In this sentence. Perhaps ‘Two years ago in France I saw an open male toilet...’? Or ‘Two years ago in France they installed an open male toilet...’? In written English, numbers under 10 are usually written as words, not numbers. So we would use seven rather than 7, etc.

2 years ago in France you can find this open male toilet (Uritrottoir), open male toilets, known as l'Uritrottoir started appearing in the streets.

Open means a toilet without any walls cover.


OBy open I means a toilet without any walls cover.

Again I am not sure what you are trying to say in this sentence.

Open meanBy open, I mean it is a toilet without any walls cover.

Because in France most men will pee on the street?


BIs this because in France most men will pee on the street?

Because in FrancIs it because most men will pee oin the streets in France?

Actually, some people (even female) did agree this idea.


Actually, some people (evenincluding females) did agreed with this idea.

Are you trying to say that women agreed with the installation of an open toilet or that men piss in the street??? The sentence isn’t clear.

Actually, some people (even, including female) dids agree with this idea.

Grammatically, this is correct, but what idea are you talking about. You've only stated a fact that France has these open toilets for men, but it is a statement, not an idea.

If you got any better ideas please do let us know.


If you gothave any better ideas please do let usme know.

If you gothave any better ideasother toilet stories to share, please do let usme know.

First of all, you would not use "got", because that is too informal to use in writing. It tends to make you appear uneducated. Again, your story did not present any ideas, merely facts regarding toilets in the two countries, therefore, what ideas are you expecting people to share with you? Also, you wrote "please let US know". Who is us? Since you are writing from the perspective of a group of people, it is better to use "please let me know".

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