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Tammy

July 9, 2025

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Fragments in my mind

1. I added 'proactive' to my vocabulary list today. I realized that sometimes, I just react. I hope to be less reactive and more proactive.

2. It has been extremely hot in Shanghai recently. Even iced coffee couldn't help me get fully alert. And even in an air-conditioned room, I still feel drowsy at noon.

3. I uploaded a video yesterday and planned to write an entry to introduce it. Then, in the evening, the time I was supposed to write here, I was not in the mood, and said to myself, 'I shouldn't push myself according to this kind of weather.' What a great excuse.

The video is about some groups of fish swimming in the theme park I visited two weeks ago. You can see it here: https://www.youtube.com/shorts/BBgMNPV1rtg


1. 今天把“proactive”加进了我的单词本。我意识到有时候,我只是对外界做出反应而已。我希望少一些被动,多一些主动。

2. 最近上海太热了。冰咖啡也不能让我完全清醒。即使在有空调的房间里,中午的我仍然感到昏昏欲睡。

3. 我昨天上传了一个视频,并打算写一篇文章来介绍它。到了晚上,也就是我应该在这里写东西的时候,没在状态。我对自己说:“都这种天气了,我不该强迫自己呀。”多好的借口啊。

这个视频是关于一些鱼群在我之前参观的主题公园里游来游去的。你可以在这里看到:https://www.youtube.com/shorts/BBgMNPV1rtg

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Fragments in my mindReflections and Excuses

The title "Reflections and Excuses" sums up both the personal insights you had (like adding "proactive" to your vocabulary) and the classic excuse for not writing because of the heat. It’s a mix of self-reflection and the everyday way we justify procrastination.

1.

I added 'proactive' to my vocabulary list today.

I realized that sometimes, I just react.

I hopewant to be less reactive and more proactive.

Instead of saying "I hope to be less reactive," I changed it to "I want to be less reactive," which sounds a bit more direct and intentional. It also helps emphasize your personal goal.

2.

It has been extremely hot in Shanghai recently.

Even iced coffee couldn't help me get fully alert’t fully wake me up.

"Couldn't help me get fully alert" felt a bit clunky, so I switched it to "couldn't fully wake me up," which is a more common phrasing.

And eEven in an air-conditioned room, I still feel drowsy atround noon.

The "around noon" part makes the timing feel more precise, but not too rigid.

3.

I uploaded a video yesterday and planned to write an entry to introduce it.

Then, in the evening, twhe timen I was supposed to write here, I was non’t in the mood, and said. I told myself, '"I shouldn't push myself according to this kind of weather.'in weather like this."

I changed "the time I was supposed to write here" to "when I was supposed to write" for smoother flow, and rephrased "I shouldn't push myself according to this kind of weather" to "I shouldn’t push myself in weather like this" to make it sound more natural and fluid.

What a great excuse.

The video is about someshows groups of fish swimming inat the theme park I visited two weeks ago.

I changed "is about" to "shows" for a more direct description of what the video actually does. "Swimming in the theme park" was adjusted to "swimming at the theme park" for a more natural phrasing.

You can seecheck it out here: https://www.youtube.com/shorts/BBgMNPV1rtg¶
OR¶
You can view
it here: https://www.youtube.com/shorts/BBgMNPV1rtg

"You can see it here" became "You can check it out here" to make it sound a bit more conversational and inviting. OR: "You can see it here" became "You can view it here" to keep it clear and still inviting, but a little more formal.

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Great job on sharing your experience and reflections! The way you connected your personal growth with everyday moments, like adding "proactive" to your vocabulary and dealing with the heat, makes this feel really relatable. The video is a nice touch too—it's interesting to see the fish swimming at the theme park. Keep it up!

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Tammy

July 11, 2025

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再次感谢!

赏花戏鱼在中国传统文化里,是很风雅的休闲和放松方式呢。

Have a nice day!

ALSO POSSIBLE: Mental Fragments in my mind

I added 'proactive' to my vocabulary list today.

AMERICAN SPELLING: I realized that sometimes, I just react to events.¶
BRITISH SPELLING: I realised that sometimes I just react to events
.

I hope to be less reactive and more proactive.

It has been extremely hot in Shanghai recently.

Even iced coffee couldn't help me get fully alert.

And even in an air-conditioned room, I still feel drowsy at noon.

This link might be useful: https://timesofindia.indiatimes.com/life-style/health-fitness/health-news/6-tips-to-borrow-from-sadhguru-to-cool-the-body-during-extreme-heat-and-humidity/articleshow/121910191.cms

Then, in the evening, twhe timen I was supposed to write here, I was not in the mood, and said to myself, 'I shouldn't push myself according to this kind ofin this grueling weather.'

grueling weather --> 艰苦的天气

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Tammy

July 11, 2025

3

受教了,谢谢您!

Have a nice day!

Fragments in my mindMy Recent Thoughts

I added 'proactive' to my vocabulary list today.

I realized that sometimes, I just react.

As in "react without thinking about it"?

2.

It has been extremely hot in Shanghai recently.

Even iced coffee couldn't help me get fully alert.

3.

Then, in the evening, the time I was supposed to write here, I was not in the mood, and said to myself, 'I shouldn't push myself according to this kind ofbecause the weather is bad.'

What a great excuse.

The video is about some groups of fish swimming in the theme park I visited two weeks ago.

You can see it here: https://www.youtube.com/shorts/BBgMNPV1rtg

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Do Chinese still take hot water in a hot weather?

I hope the weather becomes cool very soon.

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Tammy

July 11, 2025

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hahaha,我们在热天里也会喝热水,尤其是待在空调房里的时候。

回想了一下,我夏天时候喝水,大概一半是冰冻的饮料,一半是放温了的热水。

FragmenThoughts in my mindhead.

Usually we would it say it like this.

1.

I added 'proactive' to my vocabulary list today.

I realized that sometimes, I just react.

I hope to be less reactive and more proactive.

2.

It has been extremely hot in Shanghai recently.

Even iced coffee couldn't help me get fully alert.

And even in an air-conditioned room, I still feel drowsy at noon.

3.

I uploaded a video yesterday and had planned to write an entry to introduce it.

Then, in the evening, the time when I was supposed to write here, I was not in the mood, and said to myself, 'I shouldn't push myself according to this kind of weatherwhen the weather is like this.'

Too many commas in this sentence it doesn't read nicely.
I rewrote the first part to not use a comma.
"I was not in the mood, and said to myself" - Don't use a comma when the subject of the sentence is the same in both phrases.
Not sure exactly what you were trying to say in the quotation marks but I don't think "according" works here, according will usually be used to refer to information sources, for example : ''according to my friend I shouldn't push myself during this kind of weather".

What a great excuse.

The video is about some groups of fish swimming in the theme park I visited two weeks ago.

You can see it here: https://www.youtube.com/shorts/BBgMNPV1rtg

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Tammy

July 11, 2025

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Thank you so much!

Have a nice day!

It has been extremely hot in Shanghai recently.


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Even iced coffee couldn't help me get fully alert.


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Even iced coffee couldn't help me get fully alert’t fully wake me up.

"Couldn't help me get fully alert" felt a bit clunky, so I switched it to "couldn't fully wake me up," which is a more common phrasing.

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And even in an air-conditioned room, I still feel drowsy at noon.


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And eEven in an air-conditioned room, I still feel drowsy atround noon.

The "around noon" part makes the timing feel more precise, but not too rigid.

And even in an air-conditioned room, I still feel drowsy at noon.

This link might be useful: https://timesofindia.indiatimes.com/life-style/health-fitness/health-news/6-tips-to-borrow-from-sadhguru-to-cool-the-body-during-extreme-heat-and-humidity/articleshow/121910191.cms

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I uploaded a video yesterday and planned to write an entry to introduce it.


I uploaded a video yesterday and had planned to write an entry to introduce it.

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You can see it here: https://www.youtube.com/shorts/BBgMNPV1rtg


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You can seecheck it out here: https://www.youtube.com/shorts/BBgMNPV1rtg¶
OR¶
You can view
it here: https://www.youtube.com/shorts/BBgMNPV1rtg

"You can see it here" became "You can check it out here" to make it sound a bit more conversational and inviting. OR: "You can see it here" became "You can view it here" to keep it clear and still inviting, but a little more formal.

Fragments in my mind


FragmenThoughts in my mindhead.

Usually we would it say it like this.

Fragments in my mindMy Recent Thoughts

ALSO POSSIBLE: Mental Fragments in my mind

Fragments in my mindReflections and Excuses

The title "Reflections and Excuses" sums up both the personal insights you had (like adding "proactive" to your vocabulary) and the classic excuse for not writing because of the heat. It’s a mix of self-reflection and the everyday way we justify procrastination.

1.


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I added 'proactive' to my vocabulary list today.


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I added 'proactive' to my vocabulary list today.

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I realized that sometimes, I just react.


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I realized that sometimes, I just react.

As in "react without thinking about it"?

AMERICAN SPELLING: I realized that sometimes, I just react to events.¶
BRITISH SPELLING: I realised that sometimes I just react to events
.

I realized that sometimes, I just react.

I hope to be less reactive and more proactive.


This sentence has been marked as perfect!

This sentence has been marked as perfect!

I hopewant to be less reactive and more proactive.

Instead of saying "I hope to be less reactive," I changed it to "I want to be less reactive," which sounds a bit more direct and intentional. It also helps emphasize your personal goal.

2.


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Then, in the evening, the time I was supposed to write here, I was not in the mood, and said to myself, 'I shouldn't push myself according to this kind of weather.'


Then, in the evening, the time when I was supposed to write here, I was not in the mood, and said to myself, 'I shouldn't push myself according to this kind of weatherwhen the weather is like this.'

Too many commas in this sentence it doesn't read nicely. I rewrote the first part to not use a comma. "I was not in the mood, and said to myself" - Don't use a comma when the subject of the sentence is the same in both phrases. Not sure exactly what you were trying to say in the quotation marks but I don't think "according" works here, according will usually be used to refer to information sources, for example : ''according to my friend I shouldn't push myself during this kind of weather".

Then, in the evening, the time I was supposed to write here, I was not in the mood, and said to myself, 'I shouldn't push myself according to this kind ofbecause the weather is bad.'

Then, in the evening, twhe timen I was supposed to write here, I was not in the mood, and said to myself, 'I shouldn't push myself according to this kind ofin this grueling weather.'

grueling weather --> 艰苦的天气

Then, in the evening, twhe timen I was supposed to write here, I was non’t in the mood, and said. I told myself, '"I shouldn't push myself according to this kind of weather.'in weather like this."

I changed "the time I was supposed to write here" to "when I was supposed to write" for smoother flow, and rephrased "I shouldn't push myself according to this kind of weather" to "I shouldn’t push myself in weather like this" to make it sound more natural and fluid.

What a great excuse.


This sentence has been marked as perfect!

This sentence has been marked as perfect!

This sentence has been marked as perfect!

The video is about some groups of fish swimming in the theme park I visited two weeks ago.


This sentence has been marked as perfect!

This sentence has been marked as perfect!

The video is about someshows groups of fish swimming inat the theme park I visited two weeks ago.

I changed "is about" to "shows" for a more direct description of what the video actually does. "Swimming in the theme park" was adjusted to "swimming at the theme park" for a more natural phrasing.

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