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Jan. 14, 2023

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Fortune Teller

An Chinese documentary film director name Tong XU made three documentaries. We call those the 'vagrant trilogy' and Fortune Teller is one of them. The leading role is a crippled aged man who makes his living by fortune-telling.His name is Baicheng LI. In the beginning of the film, a young girl name Xiaoyan TANG was find consultant from LI. LI told her that she's gonna be lonely in this life time. He gave her one solution is to change her name and she accepted. That's how they got to know each other. Becasue of this documentary, they keep in touch till now. In the film, she's a girl who was running a brothel and caught by the police at the end. The part of her story was ended.
After watching this documentary, I admire him for his kindness, positive, fortitude. I admire her for her indomitable spirit and a vivd character. I think they are all heroes in their life. So I searched TANG in Weibo out of curiosity. Trying to find their trails. After all, twelve years have passed. What surprised me is she become a director and got married with Tong XU. And LI is no longer a fortune teller. His life beome a bit better. What inspiring me is that there is always a silver lining in the cloud. All we need to do is to keep going and no complains. We can be our own fortune teller.

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Fortune Teller

An Chinese documentary film director named Tong XU made three documentaries.

We call thosem the '"vagrant trilogy'" and Fortune Teller is one of them.

The leading role is a crippled aged man who makes his living by fortune-telling. His name is Baicheng LI.

In the beginning of the film, a young girl named Xiaoyan TANG was find consultantlooking for advice from LI.

or

- In the beginning of the film, a young girl named Xiaoyan TANG wanted to consult with LI.
- In the beginning of the film, a young girl named Xiaoyan TANG wanted a consultation with LI.

LI told her that she's gonnaing to be lonely in this life time.

He gave her one solution iwhich was to change her name andso she accepted.

That's how they got to know each other.

Becasuse of this documentary, they have keept in touch till now.

In the film, she's a girl who was running a brothel and got caught by the police atin the end.

Theat part of her story was ended.

After watching this documentary, I admired him for his kindness, positive, attitude, and fortitude.

I admired her for her indomitable spirit and a vivid character.

I think they are all heroes in their lifeves.

So I searched for TANG in Weibo out of curiosity to try to find what happened to them.

Trying to find their trails.

This is an incomplete sentence so I deleted it and added it to the previous line.

After all, twelve years have passed.

What surprised me is that she becoame a director and got married withto Tong XU while LI is no longer a fortune teller.

And LI is no longer a fortune teller.

His life beocame a bit better.

What's inspiring to me is that there is always a silver lining into the clouds.

All we need to do is to keep going and not complains.

Watch for parallel sentence construction. This needs two verbs to link the parts.

We can be our own fortune teller.

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This is a very, very good piece. Good work!

Fortune Teller

An Chinese documentary film director named Tong XUu made three documentaries.

We call those the 'vagrant trilogy,' and Fortune Teller is one of them.

The leading role is a crippled aged man who makes his living by fortune-telling. His name is Baicheng LI.

In the beginning of the film, a young girl named Xiaoyan TANGang was find consultant froming with LIi.

LIi told her that she's gonna will be lonely infor the entirety of this life time.

He gave her one solution iwhich was to change her name, and she accepted.

That's how they got to know each other.

Becasuse of the events of this documentary, they still keep in touch till now.

In the film, she' was a girl who was running a brothel and was caught by the police at the end.

The part ofat was where her story was ended.

After watching this documentary, I admire himLi for his kindness, positive, and fortitude.

I admire herTang for her indomitable spirit and a vivd character.

I think they are all heroes in their life.

So I searched TANGang in Weibo out of curiosity, trying to find their trails.

After all, twelve years have passed.

What surprised me is that she become a director and got married with Tong XUu while Li is no longer a fortune teller.

His life beocame a bit better.

WhatI was inspiring me is that ted. There is always a silver lining in the cloudevery cloud./Every cloud has a silver lining.

All we need to do is to keep going and nowithout complaints.

We can be our own fortune teller.

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I love the message you took from this. What a fascinating story and great writing!

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Inesssssss

Jan. 15, 2023

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Thank you for correcting me. ^.^
His works resonate powerfully with me.

Fortune Teller


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An Chinese documentary film director name Tong XU made three documentaries.


An Chinese documentary film director named Tong XUu made three documentaries.

An Chinese documentary film director named Tong XU made three documentaries.

We call those the 'vagrant trilogy' and Fortune Teller is one of them.


We call those the 'vagrant trilogy,' and Fortune Teller is one of them.

We call thosem the '"vagrant trilogy'" and Fortune Teller is one of them.

The leading role is a crippled aged man who makes his living by fortune-telling.His name is Baicheng LI.


The leading role is a crippled aged man who makes his living by fortune-telling. His name is Baicheng LI.

The leading role is a crippled aged man who makes his living by fortune-telling. His name is Baicheng LI.

In the beginning of the film, a young girl name Xiaoyan TANG was find consultant from LI.


In the beginning of the film, a young girl named Xiaoyan TANGang was find consultant froming with LIi.

In the beginning of the film, a young girl named Xiaoyan TANG was find consultantlooking for advice from LI.

or - In the beginning of the film, a young girl named Xiaoyan TANG wanted to consult with LI. - In the beginning of the film, a young girl named Xiaoyan TANG wanted a consultation with LI.

LI told her that she's gonna be lonely in this life time.


LIi told her that she's gonna will be lonely infor the entirety of this life time.

LI told her that she's gonnaing to be lonely in this life time.

He gave her one solution is to change her name and she accepted.


He gave her one solution iwhich was to change her name, and she accepted.

He gave her one solution iwhich was to change her name andso she accepted.

That's how they got to know each other.


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Becasue of this documentary, they keep in touch till now.


Becasuse of the events of this documentary, they still keep in touch till now.

Becasuse of this documentary, they have keept in touch till now.

In the film, she's a girl who was running a brothel and caught by the police at the end.


In the film, she' was a girl who was running a brothel and was caught by the police at the end.

In the film, she's a girl who was running a brothel and got caught by the police atin the end.

The part of her story was ended.


The part ofat was where her story was ended.

Theat part of her story was ended.

After watching this documentary, I admire him for his kindness, positive, fortitude.


After watching this documentary, I admire himLi for his kindness, positive, and fortitude.

After watching this documentary, I admired him for his kindness, positive, attitude, and fortitude.

I admire her for her indomitable spirit and a vivd character.


I admire herTang for her indomitable spirit and a vivd character.

I admired her for her indomitable spirit and a vivid character.

I think they are all heroes in their life.


I think they are all heroes in their life.

I think they are all heroes in their lifeves.

So I searched TANG in Weibo out of curiosity.


So I searched TANGang in Weibo out of curiosity, trying to find their trails.

So I searched for TANG in Weibo out of curiosity to try to find what happened to them.

Trying to find their trails.


Trying to find their trails.

This is an incomplete sentence so I deleted it and added it to the previous line.

After all, twelve years have passed.


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What surprised me is she become a director and got married with Tong XU.


What surprised me is that she become a director and got married with Tong XUu while Li is no longer a fortune teller.

What surprised me is that she becoame a director and got married withto Tong XU while LI is no longer a fortune teller.

And LI is no longer a fortune teller.


And LI is no longer a fortune teller.

His life beome a bit better.


His life beocame a bit better.

His life beocame a bit better.

What inspiring me is that there is always a silver lining in the cloud.


WhatI was inspiring me is that ted. There is always a silver lining in the cloudevery cloud./Every cloud has a silver lining.

What's inspiring to me is that there is always a silver lining into the clouds.

All we need to do is to keep going and no complains.


All we need to do is to keep going and nowithout complaints.

All we need to do is to keep going and not complains.

Watch for parallel sentence construction. This needs two verbs to link the parts.

We can be our own fortune teller.


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