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May 6, 2023

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Dear staff at Easylearning Club,
Following your recent notice email, I am writing to express my thoughts on the possible changes in the membership fees. First and foremost, I would like to thank that you are taking members' suggestions into consideration. I would, however, like to complain about the idea of introducing a new additional fee. As you may know, we have been charged with several fee increases over the last few years. The result of this is that a large number of people left the club. What I propose is that extra fees should be charged to new members. I find it fairer that old members paid less for their loyalty club. Additionally, I would appreciate it if you could set a meeting where we could discuss this matter further. I hope to receive an answer back from you. Thank you for your time and consideration.
Regards,
Sergio

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I would, however, like to complain about the idea of introducing a new additional fee.

What I propose is that extra fees should be charged to new members.

Thank you for your time and consideration.

Regards,

Sergio

Formal Email 8

Thank you for your time and consideration.

Regards,

Sergio

Formal Email 8

I would, however, like to complain about the idea of introducing a new additional fee.

The result of this is that a large number of people left the club.

What I propose is that extra fees should be charged to new members.

Thank you for your time and consideration.

Regards,

Sergio

Formal Email 8

I would, however, like to complain about the idea of introducing a new additional fee.

Thank you for your time and consideration.

Regards,

Sergio

Sergio


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Formal Email 8


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Dear staff at Easylearning Club,


Dear staff at Easylearning Club Staff, Dear Easylearning Club Staff,

Dear staff at Easylearning Club staff, Dear Easylearning Club staff,

Dear sStaff at Easylearning Club, Dear Staff at Easylearning Club,

We usually just use "To Whom It May Concern."

Following your recent notice email, I am writing to express my thoughts on the possible changes in the membership fees.


Following your recent notice email, I am writing to express my thoughts on the possible changes into the membership fees. Following your recent notice email, I am writing to express my thoughts on the possible changes to the membership fees.

Following your recent notice email, I am writing to express my thoughts on the possible changes in the membership fees. Following your recent email, I am writing to express my thoughts on the possible changes in the membership fees.

notice just sounds funny. I guess technically it's extraneous( extra/not needed)

FollowRegarding your recent notice email, I am writing to express my thoughts on the possible changes into the membership fees. Regarding your recent email, I am writing to express my thoughts on the possible changes to the membership fees.

FollowRegarding your recent notice email, I am writing to express my thoughts on the possible changes in the membership fees. Regarding your recent email, I am writing to express my thoughts on the possible changes in the membership fees.

First and foremost, I would like to thank that you are taking members' suggestions into consideration.


First and foremost, I would like to thankappreciate that you are taking members' suggestions into consideration. First and foremost, I appreciate that you are taking members' suggestions into consideration.

First and foremost, I would like to thank that you arefor taking members' suggestions into consideration. First and foremost, I would like to thank you for taking members' suggestions into consideration.

First and foremost, I would like to thank that you arefor taking members' suggestions into consideration. First and foremost, I would like to thank you for taking members' suggestions into consideration.

or, First of all, I would like to thank you for taking members' suggestions into consideration. First of all, I would like to thank you for taking suggestions from members into consideration.

First and foremost, I would like to thank that you arefor taking members' suggestions into consideration. First and foremost, I would like to thank you for taking members' suggestions into consideration.

I would, however, like to complain about the idea of introducing a new additional fee.


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I would, however, like to complaivoice my concern about the idea of introducing a new additionalyet another fee. I would, however, like to voice my concern about the idea of introducing yet another fee.

"complain" is very strong.

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As you may know, we have been charged with several fee increases over the last few years.


As you maprobably know, wthere have been charged with several fee increases over the last few years. As you probably know, there have been several fee increases over the last few years.

As you may know, we have been charged with several fee increases over the last few years. As you may know, we have been charged several fee increases over the last few years.

As you maleady know, we have been charged with several fee increases over the last few years. As you aleady know, we have been charged with several fee increases over the last few years.

As you may know, we have been charged with several fee increases have occurred over the last few years. As you may know, several fee increases have occurred over the last few years.

The result of this is that a large number of people left the club.


The result of this is that a large number of people have left the club. The result of this is that a large number of people have left the club.

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The result of this is thatBecause of this, a large number of people have left the club. Because of this, a large number of people have left the club.

What I propose is that extra fees should be charged to new members.


What I propose is that extra fees should be charged to new members. What I propose is that extra fees should be charged to new members.

This isn't gramatically incorrect, but saying, "What I suggest is..." would sound better/more natural.

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What I propose is that extra fees should be charged to new members only. What I propose is that extra fees should be charged to new members only.

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I find it fairer that old members paid less for their loyalty club.


I would find it fairer thatif old members were to paidy less forbecause of their loyalty club. I would find it fairer if old members were to pay less because of their loyalty.

I'd use the conditional here because you're talking about something that doesn't exist or isn't happening right now. Your original sentence makes it sound like old members are already paying less expensive fees.

I would find it more fairer that old members paidy less for their loyalty club. I would find it more fair that old members pay less for their loyalty club.

I find it fairer that oldexisting members paidy less in return for their loyalty to the club. I find it fair that existing members pay less in return for their loyalty to the club.

I find it more fairer that old members are paid less fordue to their loyalty club. I find it more fair that old members are paid less due to their loyalty.

Additionally, I would appreciate it if you could set a meeting where we could discuss this matter further.


Additionally, I would appreciate it if you could set up/arrange a meeting where we could discuss this matter further. Additionally, I would appreciate it if you could set up/arrange a meeting where we could discuss this matter further.

Additionally, I would appreciate it if you could set up a meeting where we could discuss this matter further. Additionally, I would appreciate it if you could set up a meeting where we could discuss this matter further.

Additionally, I would appreciate it if you cwould set a meeting where we could discuss this matter further. Additionally, I would appreciate it if you would set a meeting where we could discuss this matter further.

Additionally, I would appreciate it if youwe could set up a meeting where we couldto discuss this matter further. Additionally, I would appreciate it if we could set up a meeting to discuss this matter further.

I hope to receive an answer back from you.


I hope to receive an answehear back from you. I hope to hear back from you.

Your original sentence wasn't exactly gramatically wrong (except we would say "I hope to receive an answer from you"), but it sounded stilted and unnatural.

I hope to receive an answer back from you. I hope to receive an answer back from you.

Yours is fine. Less formal(what I would say) would be, "I look forward to hearing from you"

I hope to receive an answer back from youlook forward to your response. I look forward to your response.

Thank you for your time and consideration.


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