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kazu

Aug. 7, 2020

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Food poisoning

These days, I couldn't keep my diary because I was really busy with my final exams and reports. From today, I'll keep my diary as much as I can. By the way, I got food poisoning about three weeks ago. The cause of pood poisoning is probably eatieg raw chicken meat. I had a fever, stomach ache, and diarrhea for like three days. I was in a bad shape. My mother says that my family easily get food poisoning by eatieg raw meat, so I'll never eat raw meat.

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Food poisoning

These days, I couldn't keephaven't been able to keep up with my diary because I washave been really busy with my final exams and reports.

"These days" sets the narrative in the present, so you will need to use the simple present or the present perfect.

From today, I'll keep up with my diary as much as I can.

By the way, I got food poisoning about three weeks ago.

The cause of pfood poisoning iwas probably eatieng raw chicken meat.

To be more natural, I would rephrase to "the food poisoning was probably caused by."

"Chicken meat" is understandable and correct in certain situations, but here, "raw chicken" is more natural.

I had a fever, stomach ache, and diarrhea for likeabout three days.

"Like" is fine verbally but in writing, I would avoid it.

I was in a bad shape.

My mother says that my family easily get food poisoning byfrom eatieng raw meat, so I'll never eat raw meat again.

I would add "again" or something similar to the end since you did eat raw meat this time, whereas "I'll never eat raw meat" suggests that you never have at all.

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kazu

Aug. 8, 2020

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Thank you so much for your correction!

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Food poisoning

These days, I couldn't keepstay on top of my diary because I was really busy with my final exams and reports.

You can "keep up with"/"stay on top of" a habit (like writing in a diary), you can "keep" an object in a location (like keeping your diary on your bookshelf), and you can "keep" doing something over and over (like, "I kept running despite the rain"). However, you can't mean "keeping up with" a habit while shortening the whole phrase to "keep"

From today, I'll keep up with my diary as much as I can.

By the way, I got food poisoning about three weeks ago.

The cause of pfood poisoning is probably eatieng raw chicken meat.

I had a fever, stomach ache, and diarrhea for like three days.

I was in a bad shape.

The phrase "in bad shape" loses its meaning if you had an article like "a". When you add the "a" like "In a bad shape", I think you mean a literal bad posture (your bent over in a painful position).

My mother says that my family easily gets food poisoning by eatieng raw meat, so I'll never eat raw meat.

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I hate food poisoning :( I hope you don't get sick again!

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kazu

Aug. 8, 2020

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So do I:( Thanks!

These days, I couldn't keep up with my diary because I was really busy with my final exams and reports.

"Up with" makes it more natural but 'keep my diary' is not grammatically wrong.

From today, I'll keep up with my diary as much as I can.

More natural:
From now on, I'll keep up with my diary as much as I can.

By the way, I got food poisoning about three weeks ago.

The cause of pthe food poisoning iwas probably (eatiegng) raw chicken meat.

You can drop 'eating' if you want.

I had a fever, stomach ache, and diarrhea for like three days.

I was in a bad shape.

My mother says that my family easily gets food poisoning by eatieng raw meat, so I'll never eat raw meat.

More natural:
My mother says that my family is really prone to food poisoning from raw meat, so I'll never eat it again.

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I've had food poisoning.
I also go it from under cooked chicken.
It sucks. It really, really sucks.

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kazu

Aug. 8, 2020

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That's unfortunate :(
I think so too!
I appreciate your correction.

Food poisoning


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These days, I couldn't keep my diary because I was really busy with my final exams and reports.


These days, I couldn't keep up with my diary because I was really busy with my final exams and reports.

"Up with" makes it more natural but 'keep my diary' is not grammatically wrong.

These days, I couldn't keepstay on top of my diary because I was really busy with my final exams and reports.

You can "keep up with"/"stay on top of" a habit (like writing in a diary), you can "keep" an object in a location (like keeping your diary on your bookshelf), and you can "keep" doing something over and over (like, "I kept running despite the rain"). However, you can't mean "keeping up with" a habit while shortening the whole phrase to "keep"

These days, I couldn't keephaven't been able to keep up with my diary because I washave been really busy with my final exams and reports.

"These days" sets the narrative in the present, so you will need to use the simple present or the present perfect.

From today, I'll keep my diary as much as I can.


From today, I'll keep up with my diary as much as I can.

More natural: From now on, I'll keep up with my diary as much as I can.

From today, I'll keep up with my diary as much as I can.

From today, I'll keep up with my diary as much as I can.

By the way, I got food poisoning about three weeks ago.


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The cause of pood poisoning is probably eatieg raw chicken meat.


The cause of pthe food poisoning iwas probably (eatiegng) raw chicken meat.

You can drop 'eating' if you want.

The cause of pfood poisoning is probably eatieng raw chicken meat.

The cause of pfood poisoning iwas probably eatieng raw chicken meat.

To be more natural, I would rephrase to "the food poisoning was probably caused by." "Chicken meat" is understandable and correct in certain situations, but here, "raw chicken" is more natural.

I had a fever, stomach ache, and diarrhea for like three days.


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I had a fever, stomach ache, and diarrhea for likeabout three days.

"Like" is fine verbally but in writing, I would avoid it.

I was in a bad shape.


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I was in a bad shape.

The phrase "in bad shape" loses its meaning if you had an article like "a". When you add the "a" like "In a bad shape", I think you mean a literal bad posture (your bent over in a painful position).

I was in a bad shape.

My mother says that my family easily get food poisoning by eatieg raw meat, so I'll never eat raw meat.


My mother says that my family easily gets food poisoning by eatieng raw meat, so I'll never eat raw meat.

More natural: My mother says that my family is really prone to food poisoning from raw meat, so I'll never eat it again.

My mother says that my family easily gets food poisoning by eatieng raw meat, so I'll never eat raw meat.

My mother says that my family easily get food poisoning byfrom eatieng raw meat, so I'll never eat raw meat again.

I would add "again" or something similar to the end since you did eat raw meat this time, whereas "I'll never eat raw meat" suggests that you never have at all.

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