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3mar2030

June 16, 2025

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Focus

Hey guys
Two days ago, I started more steps to make my brain awake like Yoga sits, focus apps and reading about this issue.
In the past, I had a trouble to stay focused for short time, My mind can't solve one problem effectively because I was thinking about a lot of problems at the same time!
So I make a disscion to improve it.

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Hey guys .
Two days ago, I started
more stepdoing more things to mwake my brain awakeup like Yoga sits, focus apps and reading about thismy issue with focus.

“To make my brain awake” sounds odd, “wake my brain up” sounds better and more natural

In the past, I had a trouble to staying focused for short time,. My mind can't solve one problem effectively because I was thinking about a lot of problems at the same time!

So I make a decisscion to improve it.

Small spelling error, but it’s alright, even I struggle with this word sometimes, I always mix up the c and s…

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You’re doing really well with English, keep going! :D

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PacificOcean

June 17, 2025

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Small error I didn’t catch, “make” should be “made” in the last sentence since it’s in the past tense

Hey guys !
Two days ago, I started
taking more steps to makreignite my brain awake like Yoga sits, focus apps and reading about this issue.

Reignite is a word describing restarting/lighting up so it sounds better in this phrase to be more casual

In the past, I had a trouble to staying focused for short periods of time,. My mind caouldn't solve one problem effectively because I was thinking about a lot of problems at the same time!

Look back at your tenses and make sure they follow your story

So I makde a decisscion to improve it.

Past tense, you chose to do it in a time before the present

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Great job, keep writing :)

Hey guys
T
, two days ago, I started moretaking steps to make my brain awake like Yoga sits, focus apps and reading about this issueimprove my focus like meditation and using focus apps, as well as reading articles on focus to find other methods.

I think the word for "Yoga sits" is meditation. Separated "reading about the issue" from the two other activities as it doesn't directly improve your focus, but optimizes your methods.

In the past, I had a trouble to staying focused even for short time,s. My mind caouldn't solve even one problem effectively because I was constantly thinking about a lot ofseveral problems at the same time!

So, I makde a decisscion to improve it.

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Good work, and good luck on improving your focus.

In the past, I had a trouble to stay focused for short time, My mind can't solve one problem effectively because I was thinking about a lot of problems at the same time!


In the past, I had a trouble to staying focused even for short time,s. My mind caouldn't solve even one problem effectively because I was constantly thinking about a lot ofseveral problems at the same time!

In the past, I had a trouble to staying focused for short periods of time,. My mind caouldn't solve one problem effectively because I was thinking about a lot of problems at the same time!

Look back at your tenses and make sure they follow your story

In the past, I had a trouble to staying focused for short time,. My mind can't solve one problem effectively because I was thinking about a lot of problems at the same time!

Focus


Hey guys Two days ago, I started more steps to make my brain awake like Yoga sits, focus apps and reading about this issue.


Hey guys
T
, two days ago, I started moretaking steps to make my brain awake like Yoga sits, focus apps and reading about this issueimprove my focus like meditation and using focus apps, as well as reading articles on focus to find other methods.

I think the word for "Yoga sits" is meditation. Separated "reading about the issue" from the two other activities as it doesn't directly improve your focus, but optimizes your methods.

Hey guys !
Two days ago, I started
taking more steps to makreignite my brain awake like Yoga sits, focus apps and reading about this issue.

Reignite is a word describing restarting/lighting up so it sounds better in this phrase to be more casual

Hey guys .
Two days ago, I started
more stepdoing more things to mwake my brain awakeup like Yoga sits, focus apps and reading about thismy issue with focus.

“To make my brain awake” sounds odd, “wake my brain up” sounds better and more natural

So I make a disscion to improve it.


So, I makde a decisscion to improve it.

So I makde a decisscion to improve it.

Past tense, you chose to do it in a time before the present

So I make a decisscion to improve it.

Small spelling error, but it’s alright, even I struggle with this word sometimes, I always mix up the c and s…

So I make a disscion to imorove it.


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