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xiangying

Oct. 26, 2021

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Six months ago, when we bought second-hand furniture, the seller gave us a pot of green plants for free.
We did not take care of it very carefully, just put it in the corner and water it occasionally.
When I was cleaning the home today, I suddenly found that it was about to bloom. I sat next to it and counted the buds, and there were more than 20 buds!
I seem to feel it saying to me " Hi, dear. I have been here with you all the time, you are not alone."
My tears fell, at the beginning of this winter, this pot of free plants are bringing beautiful color to my home.

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We did not take care of it very carefully, justonly put it in the corner and watered it occasionally.

WYet, when I was cleaning the homuse today, I suddenly found that it was about to bloom.

Consider adding a word like "yet" to signal that something unexpected has happened.

I sat next to it and counted the buds, and there were more than 20 budstwenty!

I seem to feel itt felt like it was saying to me: " Hi, dear.,

I have been here with you all theis time, y. You are not alone."

My tears fell, a. At the beginning of this winter, this pot of free plants are is bringing a touch of beautiful color to my home.

The word "pot" is singular, so you should use "is" instead of "are". The "a touch of" addition is meant to be stylistic; technically it's correct without this phrase, but I think it sounds more natural this way.

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This was very cute to read. I'm glad you're enjoying the flowers!

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xiangying

Oct. 26, 2021

1

Thank you.

Flowers


Six months ago, when we bought second-hand furniture, the seller gave us a pot of green plants for free.


We did not take care of it very carefully, just put it in the corner and water it occasionally.


We did not take care of it very carefully, justonly put it in the corner and watered it occasionally.

When I was cleaning the home today, I suddenly found that it was about to bloom.


WYet, when I was cleaning the homuse today, I suddenly found that it was about to bloom.

Consider adding a word like "yet" to signal that something unexpected has happened.

I sat next to it and counted the buds, and there were more than 20 buds!


I sat next to it and counted the buds, and there were more than 20 budstwenty!

I seem to feel it saying to me " Hi, dear.


I seem to feel itt felt like it was saying to me: " Hi, dear.,

I have been here with you all the time, you are not alone."


I have been here with you all theis time, y. You are not alone."

My tears fell, at the beginning of this winter, this pot of free plants are bringing beautiful color to my home.


My tears fell, a. At the beginning of this winter, this pot of free plants are is bringing a touch of beautiful color to my home.

The word "pot" is singular, so you should use "is" instead of "are". The "a touch of" addition is meant to be stylistic; technically it's correct without this phrase, but I think it sounds more natural this way.

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