June 24, 2021
Fizzy Pop
Almost whenever I open the fizzy pop that I have taken away from the distant area by bicycle, the foam splashes out exuberantly. Even after several days in cold storage, the jet broke out with the content spilling over. The most dangerous act was to open a glass bottle just after getting back home. The spill could not stop by the vain shouting of my heart. My fingers and palm got soaked, so did the floor. Fortunately, my brand-new beautiful clothes were safe. I became determined not to buy fizzy pop in the distance as far as I can from the next time. But probably I will do it again, though.
Fizzy Pop
Almost whenevery time I open the fizzy pop that I have taken away from the distant area by bicycle, the foam splashes out exuberantly.
"Exuberantly" is an unusual word choice - it actually works quite well here, but it might sound odd to people in everyday conversation ;) it's a little poetic.
Even after several days in cold storage, the jet broke out with the contents sptilling overflowed immediately.
The most dangerous act was to open a glass bottle just after getting back home.
The spill could not be stopped by the vain shouting of my heart.
Again, this is very creative and poetic, but it might sound odd in a conversation
My fingers and palm got soaked, and so did the floor.
Fortunately, my brand-new beautifuleautiful brand-new clothes were safe.
I became determined not to buy fizzy pop in the distance as far as I can from the next time.
Not sure what the last part of this sentence ("in the distance...") means–maybe leave a comment and I can help you clarify?
But I will probably I will do it again, though.
Alternative: "But I'll probably do it again anyway."
June 26, 2021
By using ''in the distance'', I wanted to say at the distant place (a store or a vending machine) from my home. It is because the glass bottle will be shaken longer in the route when carrying it by my bicycle.
Thanks for reading this and correcting mine.
July 4, 2021
So I would say "I became determined not to buy fizzy pop if I knew I would have to carry it a long distance." You're welcome!
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Fizzy Pop This sentence has been marked as perfect! |
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Whenever I open the fizzy pop that I have taken away from the distant area by bicycle, the foam splashes out exuberantly. |
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Even after several days in cold storage, the jet broke out with the content spilling over. Even after several days in cold storage, |
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The most dangerous act was to open a glass bottle just after getting back home. This sentence has been marked as perfect! |
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The spill could not stop by the vain shouting of my heart. The spill could not be stopped by the vain shouting of my heart. Again, this is very creative and poetic, but it might sound odd in a conversation |
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My fingers got soaked, so did the floor. |
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I became determined not to buy fizzy pop in the distance as far as I can from the next time. I became determined not to buy fizzy pop in the distance as far as I can from the next time. Not sure what the last part of this sentence ("in the distance...") means–maybe leave a comment and I can help you clarify? |
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But probably I will do it again, though. But I will probably Alternative: "But I'll probably do it again anyway." |
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Almost whenever I open the fizzy pop that I have taken away from the distant area by bicycle, the foam splashes out exuberantly. Almost "Exuberantly" is an unusual word choice - it actually works quite well here, but it might sound odd to people in everyday conversation ;) it's a little poetic. |
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My fingers and a palm got soaked, so did the floor. |
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Fortunately, my brand-new beautiful clothes were safe. Fortunately, my b |
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My fingers and palm got soaked, so did the floor. My fingers and palm got soaked, and so did the floor. |
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