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homini

Dec. 16, 2021

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First journal

As far as I remember, I haven’t decorated and kept a diary since high school. So, It’s my first time keeping a diary in about 15 years, and keeping an English diary (even in cursive letters!) is the first time in my whole life.
And I’m loving it!! I’m so happy that I finally found a hobby than I can be really into. Although I’m not good at decorating things, I find it so enjoyable now.
Also, I feel like having moments to reflect today and think about myself to be a better person makes my day valuable.
I didn’t expect this, but after I decorated my diary, I realized the mood of today’s diary doesn’t fit December actually... It’s too pinky suitable for spring.. lol
But this is my first try, so I feel okay with it. I’m going to do it better. The only thing I need to do is keep doing this!

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First journal

As far as I remember, I haven’t decorated and kept a diary since high school.

What exactly did you mean by "decorating" here? Could you clarify?

So, I it’s my first time keeping a diary in about 15 years, and keeping an English diary (even in cursive letters!) is thea first time in my whole liffor me.

"in my whole life" is a redundant expression here.

And I’m loving it!!

I’m so happy that I finally found a hobby than I can be really into.

Although I’m not good at decorating things, I find it so enjoyable now.

Also, I feel like having moments to reflect today and thinking about myselfhow to be a better person makes my day valuableis valuable for my day.

"makes my day valuable" doesn't sound that natural.

I didn’t expect this, but after I decorated my diary, I realized the mood of today’s diary doesn’tdoesn’t really/quite fit December actually... It’s too pinky-ish, more suitable for spring.. lol

But this is my first try, so I feel okay with it.

I’m going to do it better.

Adding "in the future" or 'eventually' at the end might've made it sound more natural.

The only thing I need to do is keep doing this!

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Overall, another really nicely-written diary! There was almost no grammar mistakes and the style really is quite native. If I hadn't known, I might've mistaken you for one :D

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homini

Dec. 16, 2021

1

As far as I remember, I haven’t decorated and kept a diary since high school.

I do appreciate for your time:) I actually wrote this down on my diary I decorated with stickers or something

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Faizyrooma4

Dec. 17, 2021

1

Ahh, I see

First journal


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As far as I remember, I haven’t decorated and kept a diary since high school.


As far as I remember, I haven’t decorated and kept a diary since high school.

What exactly did you mean by "decorating" here? Could you clarify?

So, It’s my first time keeping a diary in about 15 years, and keeping an English diary (even in cursive letters!) is the first time in my whole life.


So, I it’s my first time keeping a diary in about 15 years, and keeping an English diary (even in cursive letters!) is thea first time in my whole liffor me.

"in my whole life" is a redundant expression here.

And I’m loving it!!


This sentence has been marked as perfect!

I’m so happy that I finally found a hobby than I can be really into.


This sentence has been marked as perfect!

Although I’m not good at decorating things, I find it so enjoyable now.


This sentence has been marked as perfect!

Also, I feel like having moments to reflect today and think about myself to be a better person makes my day valuable.


Also, I feel like having moments to reflect today and thinking about myselfhow to be a better person makes my day valuableis valuable for my day.

"makes my day valuable" doesn't sound that natural.

I didn’t expect this, but after I decorated my diary, I realized the mood of today’s diary doesn’t fit December actually... It’s too pinky suitable for spring.. lol


I didn’t expect this, but after I decorated my diary, I realized the mood of today’s diary doesn’tdoesn’t really/quite fit December actually... It’s too pinky-ish, more suitable for spring.. lol

But this is my first try, so I feel okay with it.


This sentence has been marked as perfect!

I’m going to do it better.


I’m going to do it better.

Adding "in the future" or 'eventually' at the end might've made it sound more natural.

The only thing I need to do is keep doing this!


This sentence has been marked as perfect!

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