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Hiking Views after Snow
As I mentioned earlier, our hike last Saturday was an unexpected and delightful surprise.
I think I need to add a bit of background information: In the Jiangnan region, it is quite rare to have such heavy snowfall. Moreover, when we watched the weather forecast, even when we reached the foot of the mountain, we still thought it was just a difficult and muddy mountain trail.
Then you can imagine the delight in our hearts when we saw the views in this video: https://www.youtube.com/shorts/L0ibAFVNJR0
Even though the path was challenging and muddy when we went down the mountain, and I fell twice, we still appreciated this beautiful surprise.
As usual, you're welcome to help me improve my English in that video.
Thanks in advance!
Hiking Views after Snow
As I mentioned earlier, our hike last Saturday was an unexpected and, but delightful surprise.
I think I need to add a bit of background information:
In the Jiangnan region, it is quite rare to have such heavy snowfall.
Moreover, wheneven after we watched the weather forecast, even when we reached the foot of the mountain, we it still thought it wasappeared to be just a difficult and muddy mountain trail.
I re-worded the "we still thought it was just a difficult and muddy..." to make it a little more clear that when you arrived at the mountain the conditions appeared difficult and muddy.
Then you can imagine the delight in our hearts when we saw the views in this video: https://www.youtube.com/shorts/L0ibAFVNJR0
Even though the path was challenging and muddy when we went down the mountain, and I fell twice, we still appreciated this beautiful surprise.
As usual, you're welcome to help me improve my English in that video.
Thanks in advance!
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Great job, just added some minor tweaks.
Watched the video and the English was well done there as well. Around 10 to 11 seconds in you say, "it could be poetic". I would just change this "it can be poetic".
"All sounds seemed hushed" is a very nice line. In day-to-day English, you probably wouldn't hear this, but it sounds very poetic in combination with the scenery.
Hiking Views after Snow
I would say "Views from Our Hike In the Snow"
As I mentioned earlier, our hike last Saturday was an unexpected and delightful surprise.
I would start with "Our hike last"... instead of "as I mentioned earlier" unless there was a previous post talking about the hike
I think I need to add a bit of background information:
Moreover, when we watched the weather forecast, even when we reached the foot of the mountain, we still thought it was just a difficult and muddy mountain trail.
It's more natural to say "after checking" or "after looking up" the weather forecast
Then you can imagine the delight in our hearts when we saw the views in this video: https://www.youtube.com/shorts/L0ibAFVNJR0
Even though the path was challenging and muddy when we wentre going down the mountain, and I fell twice, we still appreciated this beautiful surprise.
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Thanks a lot!
Have a nice day!
As I mentioned earlier, our hike last Saturday was an unexpected and delightful surprise.NOTE: The sentence-level grammar is fine. However, most readers do not know *who* "our" refers to. Your family? Your club members? Your best friend? (In English, pronouns are usually are used only *after* the noun they refer to is explicit.)
I thinkALSO POSSIBLE: It seems I need to add a bit of background information:.
In the Jiangnan region, it is quite rare to have such heavy snowfall.
CLEARER: Moreover, when we watched the weather forecast, even when we reached the foot of the mountain, we still thought it was just amountain foot , we thought the trail would be passable, but difficult and muddy mountain trail.
Then you can imagine the delight in our hearts when we saw the views in this video: https://www.youtube.com/shorts/L0ibAFVNJR0
Even though the path was challenging and muddy when we went down the mountain, and I fell twice, we still appreciated this beautiful surprise.
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Interesting. You have a slightly British accent. Nice!
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Thank you so much!
Have a nice day!
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It's a good thing you are such an experienced hiker!
I think I heard an extra ending "ah" on the word "wasn't" = "wasenta."
Although I feel bad pointing this out, I want to pronounce words correctly when I speak other languages too.
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Thank you! I really appreciate your pointing out-- please don't feel bad. Confucius said a good friend should be "友直友谅友多闻". You are the first type of friend here.
Have a nice day!
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As I mentioned earlier, our hike last Saturday was an unexpected and delightful surprise.
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