March 2, 2024
No one can be unaware of the fashion industry these days. It has grow enormously for the past decades and also has the effect it has in our lifes.
People begin to think look more at their own bodies and others' because they pay more attention to how they look in certain clothes. These can be associated with ideals of beauty, but also with status.
There're clothes that are really expensive and just a few can buy. With so may publicity about these kind of clothes the obsession for having the latest model of certain shirt, blouse, skirt, etc has just increased between people. It just doesn't matter the price, just to have it here and now.
However, it's not all bad. There are many artist that use the fashion as a way to express what they think and feel. But not only that, there're cultures around the world that see the clothes they wear as a part of who they are as a community. In the end, it all depends on how we see clothes these times
FASHION BUT CONSCIOUS - Essay B2 First
No one can be unaware of the fashion industry these days.
You can also say "Everyone is aware of the fashion industry these days.".
It has grow enormously for the past decades and also has the effect it hased in our lifves.
The plural form of "life" is "lives", I know, English is confusing !
People begin to think look more at their own bodies and others' because they pay more attention to how they look in certain clothes.
Theseis can be associated with ideals of beauty, but also with status.
With so mayuch publicity about these kind of clothes the obsession for having the latest model of certain shirt, blouse, skirt, etc has just increased between people.
It justthe price doesn't matter, the price, jusy just want to have it here and now.
However, it's not all bad.
There are many artist that use the fashion as a way to express what they think and feel.
But not only that, there're cultures around the world that see the clothes they wear as a part of who they are as a community.
In the end, it all depends on how we see clothes these timourselves.
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Interesting topic. Good job on writing this, few mistakes.
No one can be unaware of the fashion industry these days.
It has grown enormously for the past decades and also has thhas a noticeable effect it has in our lifves.
the plural of "life" is "lives"
People begin to think look more about their own bodies and those of others' because they pay more attention to how they look in certain clothes.
"of others" : you don't have to add an apostrophe to "others"
These can be associated with ideals of beauty, butbeauty ideals and also with status.
There're clothes that are really expensive and are very expensive clothes that just a few can buyafford.
"there are"
With so mayuch publicity about these kind of clothes, the obsession forto havinge the latest modelstyle of certain shirt, blouse, skirt, etc has just increased betweenamong people.
It just doesn't matter the price, just to have it here and now.
I would rewrite this like this:
The price doesn't matter, having it here and now is what matters.
However, it's not all bad.
There are many artists that use the fashion as a way to express what they think and feel.
"la moda" = "fashion" (without the article "the")
But not only that, there' are cultures around the world that see the clothes they wear as a part of who they are as a community.
"there are"
In the end, it all depends on how we see clothes these times.
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You write very well. Congratulations!
FASHION BUT CONSCIOUS - Essay B2 First
No one can be unaware of the fashion industry these days.
It has grown enormously for the past few decades and also has the effect it has ihas a clear effect on our lifves.
"has the effect it has in our lives" is a bit awkward to understand; it would be better to rephrase this for clarity.
People begin to think about and look more at their own bodies and those of others' because they pay more attention to how they look in certain clothes.
We look "at" thing and we think "about" things
These can be associated with ideals of beautybeauty ideals, but also with status.
There' are clothes that are really expensive and just a few can buywhich few people can buy/afford.
You wouldn't typically see the contraction "there're" in written form. Having enough money to buy something = being able to afford it, another option for your sentence
With so mayuch publicity about these kind of clothes, the obsession for having the latest modelstyle of certain shirt, blouse, skirt, etc. has justonly increased betweenamong people.
A "model" isn't really used to describe clothing, we would say "style" here. However, new versions of vehicles/electronics/appliances would be new models.
"Between" implies a count of two, where "among" implies a number larger than two.
It just doesn't matter the price, jusit's just important to have it here and now.
However, it's not all bad.
There are many artists that use the fashion as a way to express what they think and feel.
But not only that, there' are cultures around the world that see the clothes they wear as a part of who they are as a community.
In the end, it all depends on how we see clothes in these timescontexts.
I'm not sure what you mean by "these times." If you are referring back to your given examples, you could say "in these contexts."
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Good job
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FASHION BUT CONSCIOUS - Essay B2 First This sentence has been marked as perfect! This sentence has been marked as perfect! |
No one can be unaware of the fashion industry these days. This sentence has been marked as perfect! This sentence has been marked as perfect! No one can be unaware of the fashion industry these days. You can also say "Everyone is aware of the fashion industry these days.". |
It has grow enormously for the past decades and also has the effect it has in our lifes. It has grown enormously for the past few decades and "has the effect it has in our lives" is a bit awkward to understand; it would be better to rephrase this for clarity. It has grown enormously for the past decades and the plural of "life" is "lives" It has grow enormously for the past decades and also has the effect The plural form of "life" is "lives", I know, English is confusing ! |
People begin to think look more at their own bodies and others' because they pay more attention to how they look in certain clothes. People begin to think about and look more at their own bodies and those of others We look "at" thing and we think "about" things People begin to think "of others" : you don't have to add an apostrophe to "others" This sentence has been marked as perfect! |
These can be associated with ideals of beauty, but also with status. These can be associated with These can be associated with Th |
There're clothes that are really expensive and just a few can buy. There You wouldn't typically see the contraction "there're" in written form. Having enough money to buy something = being able to afford it, another option for your sentence There "there are" |
It just doesn't matter the price, just to have it here and now. It It just doesn't matter the price, just to have it here and now. I would rewrite this like this: The price doesn't matter, having it here and now is what matters. It |
However, it's not all bad. This sentence has been marked as perfect! This sentence has been marked as perfect! This sentence has been marked as perfect! |
But not only that, there're cultures around the world that see the clothes they wear as a part of who they are as a community. But not only that, there But not only that, there "there are" This sentence has been marked as perfect! |
In the end, it all depends on how we see clothes these times In the end, it all depends on how we see clothes in these I'm not sure what you mean by "these times." If you are referring back to your given examples, you could say "in these contexts." In the end, it all depends on how we see clothes In the end, it all depends on how we see clothes |
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