Dec. 30, 2020
Fashion
I am going to talk about my favourite clothes. Actually, it is an elegant ginger dress I got from my mother. I am so into it because it can perfectly match all of my shoes and its colour goes well with my accessories. On top of that, it is the first present my mother gave me, so it is meaningful. Every time I need to go to formal occasions, I will wear this dress. For me, clothes are just cloth that can keep me warm. Of course, I need practical clothes. For example, if I am going out walking and it is raining, I need to wear the appropriate kind of clothes. Maybe a rain coat, taking an umbrella, something that will protect me from the rain. So, from a practical point of view, I think clothes are really important. However, people have very different views about grab. Some people are crazy about designer clothes from upmarket shops in which clothes are rather pricey, whereas others go for rock-bottom prices. What’s more, people have different tastes in texture. Some people prefer cotton, while others tend to choose synthetic fibers. It strikes me that fashion goes around its cycles and it is not long before it comes back into fashion. For example, flared jeans, bell-bottom jeans, and ripped jeans raged in 80s or 90s, and shits with really long collars, these huge, flying collars, they were fashionable in the past. But I think flared jeans and ripped jeans are much more fashionable now than they were in the past, they went out of fashion, and then again came back in fashion. So, fashion has changed, but I’d say not in a linear way, but in a circular way, if I can say that.
Actually, it isMost particularly, about an elegant ginger dress I got received from my mother.
Actually means more like 'in reality' , or an actual fact, and maybe one would expect the opposite.
" got " is a useful word indeed but it is better to avoid ' got' in writing 'Got' is used more in spoken English.
I am so intolove it, because it can perfectly matches all of my shoes and its colour goes well with my accessories.
"I am so into it" does not sound good, it can be used in spoken English, it is very ' familiar' but does not sound good in writing and it sometimes has vaguely smutty overtones, which may be inappropriate in some settings.
Every time I need to go to a formal occasions, I will wear this dress.
For example, if I am going out walking, and it is raining, I would need to wear the appropriate kind of clothes.
Maybe I will wear a rain coat, takingand carry an umbrella, something that will to protect me from the rain.
you need a verb in the sentence. 'taking ' does not work as The raincoat is not taking an umbrella so it does not sound right
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'So' is unnecessary and makes is sound cumbersome
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Some people are crazy about designer clothes from upmarket shops in whichwhere clothes are rather pricey, whereas others go. Others prefer to search for rock-bottom prices.
What’s more, some persons don't think about is that some people have different tastes in texture.
It strikes me that fashion goes around itsin cycles and it is not long before ita particular style comes back into fashion.
For example, flared jeans, bell-bottom jeans, and ripped jeans raged in 80s or 90s, and s. Shirts with really long collars, theseor huge, flying collars, they were fashionable in the past.
So, fashion has changed, but I’d says, not in a linear way, but in a circular way, if I can say that.
It is better not to say "if i can say that" . It is unnecessary, you are writing it - (or speaking it), so you ARE saying it and it sounds like you are not confident - We must respect others opinions but we can also be proud of our own opinions, especially when we have spent time carefully thinking them through
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Dec. 30, 2020
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I am going to talk about my favourite clothes. |
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Actually, it is an elegant ginger dress I got from my mother.
Actually means more like 'in reality' , or an actual fact, and maybe one would expect the opposite. " got " is a useful word indeed but it is better to avoid ' got' in writing 'Got' is used more in spoken English. |
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On top of that, it is the first present my mother gave me, so it is meaningful. |
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I am so into it because it can perfectly match all of my shoes and its colour goes well with my accessories. I "I am so into it" does not sound good, it can be used in spoken English, it is very ' familiar' but does not sound good in writing and it sometimes has vaguely smutty overtones, which may be inappropriate in some settings. |
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Every time I need to go to formal occasions, I will wear this dress. Every time I need to go to a formal occasion |
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For me, clothes are just cloth that can keep me warm. |
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Of course, I need practical clothes. |
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For example, if I am going out walking and it is raining, I need to wear the appropriate kind of clothes. For example, if I am going out walking, and it is raining, I would need to wear |
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Maybe a rain coat, taking an umbrella, something that will protect me from the rain. Maybe I will wear a rain coat, you need a verb in the sentence. 'taking ' does not work as The raincoat is not taking an umbrella so it does not sound right |
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So, from a practical point of view, I think clothes are really important.
'So' is unnecessary and makes is sound cumbersome |
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However, people have very different views about grab. However, people have very different views about ???? what is grab |
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Some people are crazy about designer clothes from upmarket shops in which clothes are rather pricey, whereas others go for rock-bottom prices. Some people are crazy about designer clothes from upmarket shops |
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What’s more, people have different tastes in texture. What |
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Some people prefer cotton, while others tend to choose synthetic fibers. |
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It strikes me that fashion goes around its cycles and it is not long before it comes back into fashion. It strikes me that fashion goes |
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For example, flared jeans, bell-bottom jeans, and ripped jeans raged in 80s or 90s, and shits with really long collars, these huge, flying collars, they were fashionable in the past. For example, flared jeans, bell-bottom jeans, and ripped jeans raged in 80s or 90s |
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But I think flared jeans and ripped jeans are much more fashionable now than they were in the past, they went out of fashion, and then again came back in fashion. |
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So, fashion has changed, but I’d say not in a linear way, but in a circular way, if I can say that. So, fashion It is better not to say "if i can say that" . It is unnecessary, you are writing it - (or speaking it), so you ARE saying it and it sounds like you are not confident - We must respect others opinions but we can also be proud of our own opinions, especially when we have spent time carefully thinking them through |
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