July 29, 2021
Falling Asleep
I went to bed at 10.30 yesterday evening. After I had cuddled for a while with my girlfriend, I went on reading my book about Deng Xiaoping by Ezra Vogel while she was sleeping. Since the light had been turned off, I turned down my kindle light in my girlfriend’s convenience and made the font bigger. In a short while, the words became blurred and I felt like falling into comfortable and cosy space.
Falling Asleep
I went to bed at 10.:30 yesterday evening.
After I had cuddled for a while with my girlfriend, I went on for a while, I reading my book about Deng Xiaoping by Ezra Vogel while shemy girfriend was sleeping.
Since the room light had been turned off, I also turned down my kindle backlight in, to not wake up my girlfriend’s convenience, and made the font bigger.
in my girlfriend’s convenience: is not wrong but it doesn't sound like something a native speaker would usually say.
InAfter a short while, the words became blurred and I felt like falling into comfortable and cosy space.
July 29, 2021
Pringerx , thanks a lot.
Falling Asleep
I went to bed at 10.:30 yesterday evening.
After I had cuddled for a while with my girlfriend, I went on for a while, I reading my book about Deng Xiaoping by Ezra Vogel while she was sleeping.
Since the light had been turneds were off, I turned down my kindle's light in my girlfriend’s convenience and made the font bigger.
I'm not really sure what you are trying to say here. Do you mean that you turned up the kindle's light because the lights were off?
In a short whileShortly after, the words became blurred and I felt like I was falling into a comfortable and coszy space.
'Shortly after' sounds more natural/conversation than 'in a short while.'
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I only found minor errors. Good job!
July 29, 2021
After I had cuddled for a while with my girlfriend, I went on for a while, I reading my book about Deng Xiaoping by Ezra Vogel while she was sleeping.
Before I cuddled, I was reading. So I use went on reading. Is it correct?
July 29, 2021
Since the light had been turneds were off, I turned down my kindle's light in my girlfriend’s convenience and made the font bigger.
Actually no. I turned my Kindle's light down because otherwise it would be too bright for my gf to fall asleep.
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After I had cuddled for a while with my girlfriend, I went on reading my book about Deng Xiaoping by Ezra Vogel while she was sleeping. After I had cuddled After I |
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Since the light had been turned off, I turned down my kindle light in my girlfriend’s convenience and made the font bigger. Since the light I'm not really sure what you are trying to say here. Do you mean that you turned up the kindle's light because the lights were off? Since the room light had been turned off, I also turned down my kindle backlight in my girlfriend’s convenience: is not wrong but it doesn't sound like something a native speaker would usually say. |
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In a short while, the words became blurred and I felt like falling into comfortable and cosy space.
'Shortly after' sounds more natural/conversation than 'in a short while.'
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