A snowy day
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It snowed. The window was covered with condensation and I could draw a picture on it. When it snows, the traffic becomes very heavy. Today, my father talks about 2 hours to get to his office. It usually takes about 40 minutes. Also, many trains are delayed or suspended due to the snow. The Shinkansen is not suspended easily.
雪が降りました。窓は結露で曇って、その上に絵を描くことができました。 雪が降ると、道路が非常に渋滞します。父はいつも40分で着く職場に行くのに、2時間近くかかったそうです。 また、電車の多くは雪によって遅延するか止まるかします。新幹線は簡単には止まりません。
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When it snows, the traffic becomes very heavyslow.
Today, my father talkstook about 2 hours to get to his office.
Thank you very much!
A snowy daySnowy Day
The window was covered with condensation andso that I could draw a picture on it.
Today, my father talkstalked about 2 hours before he got to get to his office.
Thank you very much!
A snowy daySnowy Day
Proper capitalization with your title.
The window was covered with condensation, and I could draw a picture on it.
Add a comma before "and"
Today, my father talkstook about 2two hours to get to his office.
Use past tense (“took”) Spell out “two” for formal writing.
Also, many trains are delayed or suspended due tobecause of the snow.
"Because of" is more natural here.
The Shinkansen is notrarely suspended easily.
“Rarely suspended” is more natural than
Overall feedback
Corrections are mostly about verb tense and article usage. Good job, keep writing! 🤍 I heard it gets slippery and dangerous when it snows, stay safe always.
Thank you very much! Yes, I don't want to go out when it snows because it gets slippery and very dangerous!
Today, my father talkstook about 2 hours to get to his office.
It usually takes about 40 minutes.
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While your sentence is correct on its own, it feels disconnected from your previous sentence. I think the below is closer to your original Japanese: Today, my father took about 2 hours to get to his office, when it usually only takes him about 40 minutes.
The Shinkansen is not suspended easily.
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Similar to the above, this feels disconnected from the previous sentence. It is not clear to the reader that if the Shinkansen actually ended up suspended or not. For example, it may seem you are implying that "The Shinkansen is not suspended easily, but it did anyway!" Adding a contrast like "but" or "however" will help: "Also, many trains are delayed or suspended due to the snow, but the Shinkansen is not suspended easily."
Today, my father talksdad said it took about 2 hours to get to his office.
"father" is fine, but is a bit formal perhaps - many people use "dad" to refer to their own father.
The Shinkansen is not suspended easilyfor trivial matters.
"easily" might be correct strictly speaking, but English speakers would usually phrase this differently. An alternative would be "The Shinkansen is not suspended lightly."
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Today, my father talkstook about 2 hours to get to his office.
Iteven though it usually only takes about 40 minutes.
Connect this sentence with the previous one using a comma to feel more natural! 🙂↕️
The Shinkansen is not suspended easily suspended.
Both ways are fine, but in this context, this way is more natural
Overall feedback
Very good English. Just minor corrections that will make you sound more natural!
Thank you very much for your corrections and feedbacks!
TheEven though the Shinkansen is notdoesn't get suspended easily.
"even though" as a connecting phrase emphasis the contrast with the previous sentence in the context, and makes it sound more natural. "Doesn't get xxxx-ed easily." emphasis that it's unusual or abnormal for it to become suspended.
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