April 29, 2020
Everything in moderation
A: “When I’m accepted by the university, I’ll try an unfamiliar field that I have never learned in high school.”
B: “Sounds nice. But you should care about your health ,and being idle is also important.”
A: “That makes sense. I’ll care about it”
B: “Don’t extremely devote yourself to something. Good balance is very important in anything. I wish you good luck.”
「大学にめでたく入学出来たら、受験にはなかった分野の勉強に挑戦したいと思います。」
「それは結構だが、あまり無理をして体をこわさないように。遊ぶことも大事だよ」
「たしかにそうですね。その面でも頑張ることにします」
「ただし、勉強と同じで極端はいけない。程度が肝心だ。ともかく合格を祈るよ」
A: “When I’m accepted by theinto a university, I’ll try going into an unfamiliar field that I have never learned anything about in high school.”
BThat sounds nice, but you should care abouttake care of your health , and being idle is also importanttry not to be lazy in your studies.”
The way you worded this sentence makes it sound like B says A SHOULD be lazy/idle in their studies. I don't know whether you mean they want A to "take it easy (for their health)," or if they should "try not to be lazy in their studies"
Also, try not to start a sentence with a conjunction, such as "but."
I’ll care about ittry to take care of myself.”
B: “Don’t extremely devote yourself to somethingoverwork yourself.
Good balance is very important in anythingIt's important to have a good work-life balance.
I wish you good luck.”
May 3, 2020
thank you!!
Everything in moderation
A: “When I’m accepted by the university, I’ll try an unfamiliar field that I have never learned (tried) in high school.”
“learned” doesn’t quite work in the context of this sentence, however if you were to say “I would like to learn about an unfamiliar subject/field I didn’t get to explore in high school” that would work better
B: “Sounds nice.
But you should care about your health ,and being idle (relaxing) is also important.”
Idle doesn’t work here because it means “to do nothing or to remain still”, and it seems like you’re going for an adjective that conveys more of a “self-care” meaning.
A: “That makes sense.
I’ll care about(consider) it”
B: “Don’t extremely devote yourself to something.” ¶
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Don’t overwork yourself
“extremely” doesn’t work here as an adverb and you can simplify this sentence
Good balance is very important in anything.¶
Everything requires a healthy balance
I wish you good luck.”
Feedback
I think you’re doing well, however i think you may find it helpful to work on incorporating appropriate adjectives for clarity.
April 29, 2020
thank you!!
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A: “When I’m accepted by the university, I’ll try an unfamiliar field that I have never learned in high school.” A: “When I’m accepted by the university, I’ll try an unfamiliar field that I have never learned (tried) in high school.” “learned” doesn’t quite work in the context of this sentence, however if you were to say “I would like to learn about an unfamiliar subject/field I didn’t get to explore in high school” that would work better A: “When I’m accepted |
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B: “Sounds nice. This sentence has been marked as perfect! |
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But you should care about your health ,and being idle is also important.” But you should care about your health ,and being idle (relaxing) is also important.” Idle doesn’t work here because it means “to do nothing or to remain still”, and it seems like you’re going for an adjective that conveys more of a “self-care” meaning.
The way you worded this sentence makes it sound like B says A SHOULD be lazy/idle in their studies. I don't know whether you mean they want A to "take it easy (for their health)," or if they should "try not to be lazy in their studies" Also, try not to start a sentence with a conjunction, such as "but." |
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A: “That makes sense. This sentence has been marked as perfect! |
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I’ll care about it” I’ll care I’ll |
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B: “Don’t extremely devote yourself to something. B: “Don’t extremely devote yourself to something “extremely” doesn’t work here as an adverb and you can simplify this sentence B: “Don’t |
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Good balance is very important in anything. Good balance is very important in anything.¶
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I wish you good luck.” This sentence has been marked as perfect! I wish you |
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