The Crusades and Jerusalem The Crusades and Jerusalem

Here's an excerpt from a book I recently read: "In June 1099, the Crusaders finally reached a point where they could see Jerusalem in the distance. Here's an excerpt from a book I recently read: "In June 1099, the Crusaders finally reached a point where they could see Jerusalem in the distance.

Excerpts are typically seperated by quotation marks. "in the distance" is fine, but I think "from a distance" sounds slightly better.

Here's an excerpt from a book I recently read: “In June 1099, the Crusaders finally reached a point where they could see Jerusalem in the distance. Here's an excerpt from a book I recently read: “In June 1099, the Crusaders finally reached a point where they could see Jerusalem in the distance.

Should always use quotation marks if copying an excerpt like this. (But if you paraphrased/reworded the excerpt then there’s no need to put it in quotation marks) Another note: it’s not necessary here but in some cases you may want to consider including the name of the book and its author

Here's an excerpt from a book I recently read: "In June 1099, the Crusaders finally reached a point where they could see Jerusalem in the distance. Here's an excerpt from a book I recently read: "In June 1099, the Crusaders finally reached a point where they could see Jerusalem in the distance.

Knights and soldiers alike were trembling with emotion, chokinged with tears of joy. Knights and soldiers alike were trembling with emotion, choked with tears of joy.

I would change it to "choked" in order to avoid using gerunds twice in a row.

The distinction between murderers and thieves who had joined the Crusade for indulgence, and the clergy who had vowed to dedicate their lives to God from the beginning, disappeared. The distinction between murderers and thieves who had joined the Crusade for indulgence, and the clergy who had vowed to dedicate their lives to God from the beginning, disappeared.

I would add commas for clairity, but I'm not 100% if grammar rules require this.

The distinction between murderers and thieves who had joined the Crusade for indulgence and the clergy who had vowed to dedicate their lives to God from the beginning disappeared.” The distinction between murderers and thieves who had joined the Crusade for indulgence and the clergy who had vowed to dedicate their lives to God from the beginning disappeared.”

To show that this is the end of the excerpt

The distinction between murderers and thieves who had joined the Crusade for indulgence and the clergy who had vowed to dedicate their lives to God from the beginning disappeared." The distinction between murderers and thieves who had joined the Crusade for indulgence and the clergy who had vowed to dedicate their lives to God from the beginning disappeared."

I'm guessing this is the end of your excerpt

I too once traveled to Jerusalem overland from Cairo overland, and I had a similar thought: "This is the Jerusalem mentioned in Fauré's Requiem." I too once traveled to Jerusalem from Cairo overland, and I had a similar thought: "This is the Jerusalem mentioned in Fauré's Requiem."

A quick stylistic note - book titles are always italicized!

I too once traveled to Jerusalem overland fromvia Cairo, and I had a similar thought: "This is the Jerusalem mentioned in Fauré's Requiem." I too once traveled to Jerusalem via Cairo, and I had a similar thought: "This is the Jerusalem mentioned in Fauré's Requiem."

And I also thought, "What a wilderness this is!." And I also thought, "What a wilderness this is!"

And I also thought, "What a wilderness this is!.” I also thought, "What a wilderness this is!”

Some people prefer not starting a sentence with “and”. Make sure to include the second quotation mark. Since you used an exclamation mark there’s no need to include a full stop (the exclamation mark ends the sentence instead of the full stop here)

And I also thought, "What a wilderness this is!." And I also thought, "What wilderness this is!"