Jan. 14, 2023
In the last decades more and more people are getting distracted for the amount of work and leisure activities around them. However they don’t usually take into account the importance that keeping on shape have on their lives. Linked to this topic I saw a programme on the radio where theses issues were discussed more in deep.
From all the solutions the solutions provided on this programme, I would like to highlight two of them, that is, better facilities and a proper advertising.
Firstly, I completely agree on what one of the participant told about the facilities: there is need of plenty of these, especially on small towns and villages, where lacks of public funding make the existing ones obsolete or they need to be repaired. Besides, people can not afford paying a gym, so the only alternative to this areas for its inhabitants is going running, which is not a very stimulating activity for most them.
Secondly, but not less important, any kind of sport activity must be widely announced, in order to keep people from different ages informed. That is the most unexpensive (mostly free) way to attack the problem at its source, specially for those activities aimed at young people, through social networks. What is described above link perfectly with was expressed by the broadcaster in the radio programme, who stated that just good facilities without a proper advertising about the activities which are taken place in your local area is senseless.
As a conclusion, both facilities availability and advertising are indispensable in order to encourage people from all ages to find spaces in their busy agendas for getting started again in doing physical exercise.
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However they don’t usually take into account the importance that keeping on shape haves on their lives.
Linked to this topic I sawI listened to a programme on the radio related to this topic, where theses issues were discussed more in deepth.
From all the solutions the solutions provided on this programme, I would like to highlight two of them, that is,: better facilities and a proper advertising.
Firstly, I completely agree onwith what one of the participant tols said about the facilities: there is need ofare plenty of these, especially on small towns and villages, where lacks of public funding makes the existing ones obsolete or theyin need to beof repaired.
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Secondly, but not less important, any kind of sport activity must be widely announced, in order to keep people from different ages informed.
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What is described above links perfectly with was expressed by the broadcaster in the radio programme, who stated that just having good facilities without a proper advertising about the activities which are takening place in your local area is senseless.
As aIn conclusion, both facilities availability and advertising are indispensable in order to encourage people ofrom all ages to find spaces in their busy agendas for getting started again in doing physical exercise.
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