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Do You Prefer to Dwell in the Past, Live in the Present or Dream of the Future?
Which view do you agree with?
Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.

There is a saying from Kung Fu Panda movie which states that “The past is history, the future is a mystery, but today is a gift what it is called the present”. It clearly states that nothing is in our control except the moment we have. Personally, I would much rather enjoy the present than the past or the future because it makes me happy and inspires me to accomplish my goals.

To begin with, living in the present enables people to admire the moment they have, so they will be relaxed and happier. This means people will feel the things and love to spend time with them. For instance, I am working with a Pharmaceutical company as a data analyst in Hartford. Even though it is a nine-to-five job, I am happy with my work responsibilities like data analysis, project delegation, and report submission. During this process, I am not only improving my skills but also interacting with different people who will have funny conversations, and some are pretty subjective too. After office hours, I am a dad and husband spending time with them which is the most incredible time I ever got in my life. Enjoying my son’s activities and appreciating his artwork. Everything I have is the time that I can control and adore the happiness received from doing those activities. Therefore, for me present means living in the moment which I adore than the things that are not existing like the past or the future.

Besides living in the moment, I choose to be in the present than the past or the future since the present inspires me to strive hard for a better career. In other words, I prefer to work for a purpose where I will devote my time to accomplish the tasks. For example, right now, I am preparing for my TOEFL exams where I must get a required score of 26 in speaking and 24 in writing. Therefore, I am working arduously to get the required grades which is critically important for me to land my career in the USA. If I receive the desired scores, I will be eligible for Pharmacy license Exam which is the first step for getting a registered pharmacist position in the USA. Hence, the present gives me an opportunity to work on my tasks and fulfill my dreams.


In essence, I strongly believe that the present plays an essential role in people’s lives than in the past or the future. This is because it allows people to appreciate the moment and live happily, also present motivates people to work hard for a better possibility.


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I am preparing for TOEFL, and I would like to improve my writing skills, so requesting people in this community or review my writing. I appreciate your help.

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Essay for sObtaining Suggestions

In English, the first letter of all nouns, verbs, adjectives, adverbs, pronouns, etc., in the title are capitalized.

Do You Prefer to Dwell in the Past, Live in the Present, or Dream of the Future?

If this is the title of the essay, then it would be correct, but if it was the essay question, then it should be formatted like a normal sentence.

Which view do you agree with?

Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.

There is a saying from Kung Fu Panda movie which states that, “The past is history, the future is a mystery, but today is a gift what itich is called the present”.

It clearly states that nothing is in our control except the moment we havecurrent moment.

Personally, I would much rather enjoy the present than the past or the future, because it makes me happy and inspires me to accomplish my goals.

To begin with, living in the present enables people to admire the momentrelish the time they have, so they will become more relaxed and happier.

This means people will feel the things towards each other and love to spend time with them.

For instance, I am working with a Pharmaceutical company as a data analyst in Hartford.

“I am” is often written/said as “I’m”.

Even though it is a nine-to-five job, I am happy with my work responsibilities like data analysis, project delegation, and report submission.

“It is” is often written/said as “It’s”.
“I am” is often written/said as “I’m”.

During this process, I am not only improving my skills but also interacting with different people who willI have funny conversations, and some with, some of which are pretty subjective too.

“I am” is often written/said as “I’m”.

After office hours, I am a dad and husband spending time with them which imy family, and it’s the most incredible time I ever gothave in my life.

“I am” is often written/said as “I’m”.

EFor example, I love enjoying my son’s activities and appreciating his artwork.

EverythingThe only things that I have is the time that I can control and adore the happiness received from doing those activities.

Therefore, for me the present means living in the moment, which I adore more than other things that are not n-existingent, like the past or the future.

Besides living in the moment, I choose to be in the present than the past or the future since the present inspires me to strivework harder for a better career.

In other words, I prefer to work for awith purpose where I willand I devote my time to accomplish theing tasks.

For example, right now, I am preparing for my TOEFL exams, where I must get a required score of 26 in speaking and 24 in writing.

“I am” is often written/said as “I’m”.

Therefore, I am working arduously to get the required grades, which isare critically important in order for me to land my career in the USA.

If I receive the desired scores, I will be eligible for Pharmacy lLicense Exam, which is the first step forin getting a registered pharmacist position in the USA.

Hence, the present gives me an opportunity to work on my tasks and fulfill my dreams.

In essence, I strongly believe that the present plays an more essential role in people’s lives than in the past or the future do.

This is because it allows people to appreciate the moment and live happily, also presents well as motivates people to work harder for a better possibilityfuture.

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Great Job! Just a few corrections!

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ira007

Jan. 17, 2021

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Thanks a lot for reviewing my essay.

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ira007

Jan. 17, 2021

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Personally, I would much rather enjoy the present than the past or the future, because it makes me happy and inspires me to accomplish my goals.

Hi, I am wondering about the comma usage here. Will it be possible for you to explain the rule here?

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oceandrive76

Jan. 17, 2021

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Commas can be used to show pauses. When I place commas in a sentence (besides the ones required for it to be grammatically correct), I often use my breathe and the natural rhythm of the sentence in order to determine where the comma goes.

Here's an article about it:
https://teaspoon-consulting.com/articles/commas.html

I hope this helps!

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ira007

Jan. 18, 2021

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Thanks for the clarification.

Essay for suggestions


Essay for sObtaining Suggestions

In English, the first letter of all nouns, verbs, adjectives, adverbs, pronouns, etc., in the title are capitalized.

Do You Prefer to Dwell in the Past, Live in the Present or Dream of the Future?


Do You Prefer to Dwell in the Past, Live in the Present, or Dream of the Future?

If this is the title of the essay, then it would be correct, but if it was the essay question, then it should be formatted like a normal sentence.

Which view do you agree with?


This sentence has been marked as perfect!

Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.


This sentence has been marked as perfect!

There is a saying from Kung Fu Panda movie which states that “The past is history, the future is a mystery, but today is a gift what it is called the present”.


There is a saying from Kung Fu Panda movie which states that, “The past is history, the future is a mystery, but today is a gift what itich is called the present”.

It clearly states that nothing is in our control except the moment we have.


It clearly states that nothing is in our control except the moment we havecurrent moment.

Personally, I would much rather enjoy the present than the past or the future because it makes me happy and inspires me to accomplish my goals.


Personally, I would much rather enjoy the present than the past or the future, because it makes me happy and inspires me to accomplish my goals.

To begin with, living in the present enables people to admire the moment they have, so they will be relaxed and happier.


To begin with, living in the present enables people to admire the momentrelish the time they have, so they will become more relaxed and happier.

This means people will feel the things and love to spend time with them.


This means people will feel the things towards each other and love to spend time with them.

For instance, I am working with a Pharmaceutical company as a data analyst in Hartford.


For instance, I am working with a Pharmaceutical company as a data analyst in Hartford.

“I am” is often written/said as “I’m”.

Even though it is a nine-to-five job, I am happy with my work responsibilities like data analysis, project delegation, and report submission.


Even though it is a nine-to-five job, I am happy with my work responsibilities like data analysis, project delegation, and report submission.

“It is” is often written/said as “It’s”. “I am” is often written/said as “I’m”.

During this process, I am not only improving my skills but also interacting with different people who will have funny conversations, and some are pretty subjective too.


During this process, I am not only improving my skills but also interacting with different people who willI have funny conversations, and some with, some of which are pretty subjective too.

“I am” is often written/said as “I’m”.

After office hours, I am a dad and husband spending time with them which is the most incredible time I ever got in my life.


After office hours, I am a dad and husband spending time with them which imy family, and it’s the most incredible time I ever gothave in my life.

“I am” is often written/said as “I’m”.

Enjoying my son’s activities and appreciating his artwork.


EFor example, I love enjoying my son’s activities and appreciating his artwork.

Everything I have is the time that I can control and adore the happiness received from doing those activities.


EverythingThe only things that I have is the time that I can control and adore the happiness received from doing those activities.

Therefore, for me present means living in the moment which I adore than the things that are not existing like the past or the future.


Therefore, for me the present means living in the moment, which I adore more than other things that are not n-existingent, like the past or the future.

Besides living in the moment, I choose to be in the present than the past or the future since the present inspires me to strive hard for a better career.


Besides living in the moment, I choose to be in the present than the past or the future since the present inspires me to strivework harder for a better career.

In other words, I prefer to work for a purpose where I will devote my time to accomplish the tasks.


In other words, I prefer to work for awith purpose where I willand I devote my time to accomplish theing tasks.

For example, right now, I am preparing for my TOEFL exams where I must get a required score of 26 in speaking and 24 in writing.


For example, right now, I am preparing for my TOEFL exams, where I must get a required score of 26 in speaking and 24 in writing.

“I am” is often written/said as “I’m”.

Therefore, I am working arduously to get the required grades which is critically important for me to land my career in the USA.


Therefore, I am working arduously to get the required grades, which isare critically important in order for me to land my career in the USA.

If I receive the desired scores, I will be eligible for Pharmacy license Exam which is the first step for getting a registered pharmacist position in the USA.


If I receive the desired scores, I will be eligible for Pharmacy lLicense Exam, which is the first step forin getting a registered pharmacist position in the USA.

Hence, the present gives me an opportunity to work on my tasks and fulfill my dreams.


This sentence has been marked as perfect!

In essence, I strongly believe that the present plays an essential role in people’s lives than in the past or the future.


In essence, I strongly believe that the present plays an more essential role in people’s lives than in the past or the future do.

This is because it allows people to appreciate the moment and live happily, also present motivates people to work hard for a better possibility.


This is because it allows people to appreciate the moment and live happily, also presents well as motivates people to work harder for a better possibilityfuture.

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