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Ways adults can influence how younger people behave

From the point of view of parents and teachers, providing an appropriate education for young people it is often a strong challenge. Since they are not really aware of the consequences of their action or choises, orienting and help them to take their responsibility, firsT step to became adults tomorrow.

there is no doubt that young people need rules but, according to the main statistics, also persuading or influencing them plays a crucial role in determining their behaviour.

Talking about the way adults can influence younger people behave, giving an examble is a very relevant one because they try to behave adults they admire.

Another relevant way is offering advice. As long as "advice" is not a rule but is a suggestion, apparently it seems to be a more emphatic way to communicate.
Sometimes it should works, but as long as teens refuse rules, they also could refuse advices especially if the come from parents or teachers.

As far as my concerned, no one would dispute the fact that giving advice - when there is a strong and trustly relationship - can be a good solution but it could be also seen by teens as quite invasive. In contrast, providing an example of right behaviour does not require to others to change anything.

For this reason, providing an example of right behaviour, whithout the intentions of apparently requires to change anything, is considered more effective in a long term period.

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Ways adults can influence how younger people behave

Another relevant way is offering advice.

As long as "advice" is not a rule but is a suggestion, apparently it seems to be a more emphatic way to communicate.

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Ways adults can influence how younger people behave


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From the point of view of parents and teachers, providing an appropriate education for young people it is often a strong challenge.


From the point of view of parents and teachers, providing an appropriate education for young people it is often a stronbig challenge. From the point of view of parents and teachers, providing an appropriate education for young people is often a big challenge.

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Since they are not really aware of the consequences of their action or choises, orienting and help them to take their responsibility, firsT step to became adults tomorrow.


Since they are not really aware of the consequences of their actions or choisces, orienting and helping them to take their responsibility, is the firsTt step to became adults tomorrowthem becoming adults. Since they are not really aware of the consequences of their actions or choices, orienting and helping them to take responsibility is the first step to them becoming adults.

Since they are not really aware of the consequences of their action or choises, orienting and help them to take their responsibility, firsT step to became adults tomorrow. Since they are not really aware of the consequences of their action or choises, orienting and help them to take their responsibility, firsT step to became adults tomorrow.

choices ..(guiding them and helping them to take responsibility) is the first step to becoming adults in the future

there is no doubt that young people need rules but, according to the main statistics, also persuading or influencing them plays a crucial role in determining their behaviour.


tThere is no doubt that young people need rules, but, according to the main statistics, also persuading or influencing them also plays a crucial role in determining their behaviour. There is no doubt that young people need rules, but according to the main statistics, persuading or influencing them also plays a crucial role in determining their behavior.

Talking about the way adults can influence younger people behave, giving an examble is a very relevant one because they try to behave adults they admire.


Talking about the wayhow adults can influence the way younger people behave, giserving as an exambple is a very relevant one because they try to behave like adults they admire. Talking about how adults can influence the way younger people behave, serving as an example is a very relevant one because they try to behave like adults they admire.

Talking about the way adults can influence younger people behave, giving an examble is a very relevant one because they try to behave adults they admire. Talking about the way adults can influence younger people behave, giving an examble is a very relevant one because they try to behave adults they admire.

example One way adults influence young people is by example. This is relevant because young people try to follow the behavior of adults they admire.

Another relevant way is offering advice.


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As long as "advice" is not a rule but is a suggestion, apparently it seems to be a more emphatic way to communicate.


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Sometimes it should works, but as long as teens refuse rules, they also could refuse advices especially if the come from parents or teachers.


Sometimes it shouldwill works, but as long assince some teens refuse to follow the rules, they also could also refuse advices, especially if ithe comes from parents or teachers. Sometimes it will work, but since some teens refuse to follow the rules, they could also refuse advice, especially if it comes from parents or teachers.

Sometimes it should works, but as long as teens refuse rules, they also could refuse advices especially if the come from parents or teachers. Sometimes it should works, but as long as teens refuse rules, they also could refuse advices especially if the come from parents or teachers.

sometimes it works, but if teens refuse to obey rules, they also can refuse to take advice, especially if it comes from parents and teachers.

As far as my concerned, no one would dispute the fact that giving advice - when there is a strong and trustly relationship - can be a good solution but it could be also seen by teens as quite invasive.


As far as I amy concerned, no one would dispute the fact that giving advice - when there is a strong and trustlying relationship - can be a good solution, but it could be also seen by teens as quite invasive. As far as I am concerned, no one would dispute the fact that giving advice - when there is a strong and trusting relationship - can be a good solution, but it could be also seen by teens as quite invasive.

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In contrast, providing an example of right behaviour does not require to others to change anything.


In contrast, providing an example of the right behaviour does not require to others to change anything. In contrast, providing an example of the right behavior does not require others to change anything.

In contrast, providing an example of right behaviour does not require to others to change anything. In contrast, providing an example of right behaviour does not require others to change anything.

For this reason, providing an example of right behaviour, whithout the intentions of apparently requires to change anything, is considered more effective in a long term period.


For this reason, providing an example of rightproper behaviour, whithout the intentions of apparently requiresobviously trying to change anysomething, is considered more effective in a long term period. For this reason, providing an example of proper behavior, without the intentions of obviously trying to change something, is considered more effective in a long term period.

For this reason, providing an example of righcorrect behaviour, whithout the intentions of apparently requires to change anythingdemanding the teen follow the example, is considered more effective in athe long term period. For this reason, providing an example of correct behavior, without demanding the teen follow the example, is considered more effective in the long term.

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