Essay (C1 CAE): How adults can be a good influence:: WRITING

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Sept. 10, 2022

Essay (C1 CAE): How adults can be a good influence:: WRITING

Your class has listened to a radio discussion about how adults can be a good influence on younger people. You have made the notes below:

Ways adults can influence how younger people behave:
- giving rules
- setting an example
- offering advice

Some opinions expressed in the discussion:
- “Sometimes it’s fun to break the rules!”
- “If you admire somebody, you try to behave like them.”
- “Young people don’t always listen.”

Write an essay discussing two of the ways in your notes that adults can influence younger people’s behaviour. You should explain which way you think is more effective, giving reasons to support your opinion.

You may, if you wish, make use of the opinions expressed in the discussion, but you should use your own words as far as possible.

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We heard in class a radio conversation about the good influence adults can be to youth generations. I took some notes and these are my thoughts.
As everyone has experienced the “teenagers era”, we personally know that adolescents can be very vivacious and outgoing sometimes, sometimes causing a lot of bad occurrences to themselves or even other people. These could be for instance, incidents or bullying. That’s the reason they need rules: they help youngsters to make choices to create better self-regulation and decision-making, and at the same time develop mind order and awareness.
Most of the time, adults can be seen as an example, such as an idol, and this method can help teenager’s consistency in improving themselves since they have an objective to follow. Personally, I do have a model and it helps me to keep track of my progress. A drawback to this method can be the lack of patience a young mind can have, and this would lead to depression and less self-confidence if failing to succeed.
Last but not least, one thing that I personally suggest to every kid I encounter is to follow adults advices, especially the oldest ones who have more experience above all. There will always be someone with more experience in a certain field than you and asking for help won’t be seen as embarassing as you could think. Therefore, not asking for help would only occur to a future decision you might regret taking.

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Essay (C1 CAE): How adults can be a good influence:: WRITING

Your class has listened to a radio discussion about how adults can be a good influence on younger people.

You have made the notes below:

Ways adults can influence how younger people behave:

- giving rules

- setting an example

- offering advice

Some opinions expressed in the discussion:

- “Sometimes it’s fun to break the rules!”

- “If you admire somebody, you try to behave like them.”

- “Young people don’t always listen.”

Write an essay discussing two of the ways in your notes that adults can influence younger people’s behaviour.

You should explain which way you think is more effective, giving reasons to support your opinion.

You may, if you wish, make use of the opinions expressed in the discussion, but you should use your own words as far as possible.

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We heard ~~in class~~ a radio conversation in class about the good influence adults can be to youth generations.

I took some notes and these are my thoughts.

As everyone has experienced the “teenager~~s era~~ phase”, we personally know that adolescents can be very vivacious and outgoing sometimes~~, s~~. Sometimes causing a lot of bad ~~occurrences~~things to happen to themselves or even other people.

These could be for instance, incidents or bullying.

That’s the reason they need rules: they help youngsters to make choices to create better self-regulation and decision-making, and at the same time develop mind order and awareness.

Most of the time, adults can be seen as an example, such as an idol, and this method can help teenager’s consistency in improving themselves since they have an objective to follow.

Personally, I do have a role model and ithey helps me to keep track of my progress.

A drawback to this method can be the lack of patience a young mind can have, and this would lead to depression and less self-confidence if failing to succeed.

Last but not least, one thing that I personally suggest to every kid I encounter is to follow adults advices, especially the oldest ones who have more experience above all.

There will always be someone with more experience in a certain field than you and asking for help won’t be seen as embarassing as you ~~could~~ think.

Therefore, not asking for help wcould ~~only occur~~lead to a future decision you might regret taking.

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Essay (C1 CAE): How adults can be a good influence:: WRITING