April 13, 2024
Essay (C1 CAE): How adults can be a good influence
Your class has listened to a radio discussion about how adults can be a good influence on younger people. You have made the notes below:
Ways adults can influence how younger people behave:
- giving rules
- setting an example
- offering advice
Some opinions expressed in the discussion:
- “Sometimes it’s fun to break the rules!”
- “If you admire somebody, you try to behave like them.”
- “Young people don’t always listen.”
Write an essay discussing two of the ways in your notes that adults can influence younger people’s behaviour. You should explain which way you think is more effective, giving reasons to support your opinion.
You may, if you wish, make use of the opinions expressed in the discussion, but you should use your own words as far as possible.
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While in class, we listened to a radio debate concerning the various ways adults can be a good influence on the youth. I have written down a couple of notes and wanted to share my thoughts on them.
It's all but obvious how children can act up sometimes, throw tantrums and disrespect the people around them, which is why it's important to take action before it comes to this.
The most obvious solution would be to give rules. Doing so, a child has the option to either behave accordingly or risk punishment, the graveness of which depends entirely on the adult. The cons of having rules is the child's inability to experience freedom, which could dramatically impact their happiness.
Another way is to give them advice. Some young people might be inefficient in reasoning, which, in turn, could backfire in the later stages of their lives. This is exactly why it's necessary to point out their mistakes and stop them from repeating them, while also offering advice on how they should act in foreign to them situations. The only drawback to this is that despite an adult's efforts to correct the way the young person handles various situations, the child might ignore this advice, depending on their discipline.
In conclusion, most people might agree with me that giving advice is the most effective way of influencing young people and their actions. Instead of being forced to abide by rules, they are allowed to be in a free environment and learn about the do's and don'ts along the way.
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- “If you admire somebody, you try to behave like them.”
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- “Young people don’t always listen.”
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Write an essay discussing two of the ways in your notes that adults can influence younger people’s behaviour.
You should explain which way you think is more effective, giving reasons to support your opinion.
You may, if you wish, make use of the opinions expressed in the discussion, but you should use your own words as farmuch as possible.
While in class, we listened to a radio debate concerning the various ways adults can be a good influence on the youth.
I have written down a couple of notes and wanted to share my thoughts on them.
It's all but obvious how children can act up sometimes,; throwing tantrums and disrespecting the people around them, which is why. That's why I believe that it's important to take action before it comes to this.
The most obvious solution would be to give rules.
Another way is to give them advice.
Some young people might be inefficient in reasoning, which, in turn, could backfire in the later stages of their lives.
This is exactly why it's necessary to point out their mistakes and stop them from repeating them, while also offering advice on how they should act in foreign to them situations.
The only drawback to this is that despite an adult's efforts to correct the way the young person handles various situations, the child might ignore this advice, depending on their discipline.
In conclusion, most people might agree with me that giving advice is the most effective way of influencing young people and their actions.
Instead of being forced to abide by rules, they are allowed to be in a free environment and learn about the do's and don'ts along the way.
Essay (C1 CAE): How adults can be a good influence
Your class has listened to a radio discussion about how adults can be a good influence on younger people.
You have made the notes below: Ways adults can influence how younger people behave: - giving rules - setting an example - offering advice Some opinions expressed in the discussion: - “Sometimes it’s fun to break the rules!” - “If you admire somebody, you try to behave like them.” - “Young people don’t always listen.” Write an essay discussing two of the ways in your notes that adults can influence younger people’s behaviour.
You should explain which way you think is more effective, giving reasons to support your opinion.
You may, if you wish, make use of the opinions expressed in the discussion, but you should use your own words as farmuch as possible.
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This is exactly why it's necessary to point out their mistakes and stop them from repeating them, while also offering advice on how they should act in foreign to them situations.
The only drawback to this is that despite an adult's efforts to correct the way the young person handles various situations, the child might ignore this advice, depending on their discipline.
In conclusion, most people might agree with me that giving advice is the most effective way of influencing young people and their actions.
Instead of being forced to abide by rules, they are allowed to be in a free environment and learn about the do's and don'ts along the way.
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