July 16, 2025
Entry 2: Melchizedek and the Price of Following a Dream
Santiago met the old man Melchizedek, who spoke to him about the “Personal Legend”: it’s what each person comes into the world to do. He also told him something uncomfortable: many people give up on their Personal Legend because they are afraid, or they no longer believe it’s possible.
Melchizedek asked Santiago for a tenth of his sheep in exchange for more information. That’s not a small amount. How much are you willing to pay to follow your dream? I’m not only talking about money, but also about leaving a comfortable place, enduring criticism, or starting from zero.
This made me think about two years ago. I left my entire life behind to follow a new perspective and experience life in another country. I had a job, a professional career, a house, my parents, and my brother… but I still felt empty. I went through a serious illness that made me wake up. Everyone told me I was crazy, that my decision was too risky, that everything will be bad to me.
And now, I’m happier and healthier, in a better place, with my own family.
How many times do we say we want something, but it’s not enough to let go of what we already know?
Entrada 2: Melchezedek y el precio de seguir un sueño.
Santiago conoció al anciano Merchizedek, él le habló sobre la "Leyenda Personal": es lo que cada persona vino a hacer en el mundo. Él también le dijo algo incómodo: muchas personas renuncian a su Leyenda Personal porque ellos están asustados, o no creen que sea posible.
Mechizedek le pidió a Santiago una décima parte de sus ovejas a cambio de más información. Esto no es una cantidad pequeña. ¿Qué tanto estás dispuesto a pagar para seguir tus sueños? No estoy hablando solamente de dinero, también estoy hablando de dejar un lugar cómodo, de soportar críticas o de empezar desde cero.
Esto me hizo pensar sobre dos años atrás. Dejé mi vida entera para seguir una nueva perspectiva y experiencias en otro país. Tenía un trabajo, una carrera profesional, un hogar, mis padres, mi hermano... pero aún así me sentía vacía. Atravesé una seria enfermedad que me hizo despertar. Todo el mundo me dijo que estaba loca, que mi decisión era demasiado riesgosa, que todo me saldría mal.
Y ahora, soy más feliz y saludable, en un mejor lugar con mi propia familia.
¿Cuántas veces decimos que queremos algo, pero no es suficiente para dejar lo que ya conocemos?
Entry 2: Melchizedek and the Price of Following a Dream
Santiago met the old man Melchizedek, who spoke to him about the “Personal Legend”: it’s what each person comes into the world to do.
He also told him something uncomfortable: many people give up on their Personal Legend because they are afraid, or they no longer believe it’s possible.
Melchizedek asked Santiago for a tenth of his sheep in exchange for more information.
That’s not a small amount.
How much are you willing to pay to follow your dream?
I have no correction to offer here, but I wanted to mention that, when the opportunity is available, emphasis would commonly be placed on "your," either by using bold or italic font.
I’m not only talking about money, but also about leaving a comfortable place, enduring criticism, or starting from zero.
This made me think about two years ago.
I left my entire life behind to follow a new perspective and experience life in another country.
I had a job, a professional career, a house, my parents, and my brother… but I still felt empty.
I went through a serious illness that made me wake up.
This sentence is written correctly, but it reads as a bit "abrupt." I don't know if that's just my personal sense, or if it's more of an English stylistic thing. I have some suggestions that might help it "mesh" with the rest in a different way:
"I had a job, a professional career, a house, my parents, and my brother...but I still felt empty, until I went through a serious illness that made me wake up."
or
"I had a job, a professional career, a house, my parents, and my brother...but I still felt empty. Then I went through a serious illness that made me wake up."
even more optional here would be to add a time description, like "made me wake up one day" or "made me slowly wake up"
Everyone told me I was crazy, that my decision was too risky, that everything will beould go bad tofor me.
instead of "would go" it could also say "would turn out"
but it should say "would" to express their conjecture about the future
And now, I’m happier and healthier, in a better place, with my own family.
I don't see anything wrong with this, but an idea to add a bit more would be to introduce a verb for each aspect here, something like:
And now, I'm happier and healthier, living in a better place and enjoying time with my own family.
How many times do we say we want something, but it’s not enough to let go of what we already know?
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Easy-to-follow chapter summary and personal reflection with some varied sentence constructions--this reads like a native English speaker wrote it. The only obligatory thing I saw was the "would" part. The rest was just in case you wanted any extra suggestions/options.
Entry 2: Melchizedek and tThe Price of Following a Dream
Santiago met the old man Melchizedek, who spoke to him about the “Personal Legend”: i. It’s what each person comes into the world to do.
He also told him something uncomfortable: m. Many people give up on their Personal Legend because they are afraid, or they no longer believe it’s possible.
Melchizedek asked Santiago for a tenth of his sheep in exchange for more information.
That’s not a small amount.
How much are you willing to pay to follow your dream?
I’m not only talking about money, but also about leaving a comfortable place, enduring criticism, or starting from zero.
This made me think about a situation that I've gone through two years ago.
I left my entire life behind to follow a new perspective and experience life in another country.
I had a job, a professional career, a house, my parents, and my brother… but. However, I still felt empty.
I went through a serious illness that made me wake up.
Everyone told me I was crazy,. They've told me off that my decision was too risky, and that everything will be bad to me.
And nNow, I’m happier and healthier,. I'm in a better place, with my own family.
How many times do we say that we want something, but it’s not enough to let go of what we already know?
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I had a job, a professional career, a house, my parents, and my brother… but I still felt empty. I had a job, a professional career, a house, my parents, and my brother This sentence has been marked as perfect! |
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I went through a serious illness that made me wake up. This sentence has been marked as perfect! I went through a serious illness that made me wake up. This sentence is written correctly, but it reads as a bit "abrupt." I don't know if that's just my personal sense, or if it's more of an English stylistic thing. I have some suggestions that might help it "mesh" with the rest in a different way: "I had a job, a professional career, a house, my parents, and my brother...but I still felt empty, until I went through a serious illness that made me wake up." or "I had a job, a professional career, a house, my parents, and my brother...but I still felt empty. Then I went through a serious illness that made me wake up." even more optional here would be to add a time description, like "made me wake up one day" or "made me slowly wake up" |
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And now, I’m happier and healthier, in a better place, with my own family.
And now, I’m happier and healthier, in a better place, with my own family. I don't see anything wrong with this, but an idea to add a bit more would be to introduce a verb for each aspect here, something like: And now, I'm happier and healthier, living in a better place and enjoying time with my own family. |
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How many times do we say we want something, but it’s not enough to let go of what we already know? How many times do we say that we want something, but it’s not enough to let go of what we already know? This sentence has been marked as perfect! |
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