Technically, today is New Year's Eve here, but since most of my family and friends still live in Asia, it feels like New Year's Day to me.

여기서 “to me”는 없어도 의미가 자연스럽게 전달돼요. 이미 “it feels like New Year’s Day” 자체가 주관적인 느낌을 나타내기 때문에, 붙이지 않아도 충분히 자연스럽습니다. 문장이 더 깔끔하고 읽기 쉬워집니다.

I headedwent to the office at 5 a.m. and wrapped upfinished my report from yesterday: The Relationship between China, Japan, and Taiwan from a Korean Perspective.

“headed to”도 맞지만, 일상적인 글에서는 “went to”가 더 자연스럽게 들려요.

The relationship between China, Japan, and Taiwan from a Korean perspective.

After I sentding the report to my English tutor, I planned to study grammar.

“After I sent”보다 “After sending”으로 바꾸면 문장이 더 간결하고 자연스럽게 이어집니다. 길게 쓰지 않아도 의미가 그대로 전달돼요.

But there were manymy phone was full of notifications on my phone, and I realized the New Year had already dawnstarted in Korea and Japan.

“there were many notifications”도 틀린 건 아니지만, “my phone was full of notifications”라고 하면 조금 더 자연스럽고 생동감 있게 느껴집니다. “dawned” 대신 “started”가 일상 영어에서 자연스럽습니다.

I replied to everyone's messages and exchanged well wishegreetings.

“well wishes”도 맞지만, 글의 톤과 문맥상 “greetings”가 더 자연스럽고 간결합니다.

We shared standard greetings likethe usual "Happy New Year," wishes, but also chatted about random things, like buying lottery tickets for the new year.

“standard greetings”보다는 “usual wishes”가 조금 더 부드럽게 읽히고 자연스러워요. 마지막 쉼표로 문장 연결을 더 매끄럽게 만들었습니다.

One of my friends even video-called me.

“One of my friends”도 틀린 건 아니지만, 간단하게 “One friend”라고 해도 충분히 의미가 전달되고 글이 깔끔해집니다.

I left home to study, but the environment wasn't good for focusing on my studiesit wasn’t a good environment for focusing.

“the environment wasn’t good for focusing on my studies”는 조금 길고 반복적인 느낌이 있어요. “it wasn’t a good environment for focusing”로 줄이면 훨씬 자연스럽습니다.

I justSo I gave up and spent time catching up with my friends.

As the messages decreasedslowed down around 2 or 3 a.m. at their time, I moved to a Starbucks because I was tired.

“decreased”보다는 “slowed down”이 자연스럽게 들리고, “a Starbucks” 대신 “Starbucks”로 해도 의미가 충분합니다.

I ordered a coffee and tried to resumcontinue studying.

“resume studying”도 틀린 건 아니지만, 일상 글에서는 “continue studying”이 조금 더 자연스럽습니다.

I reviewed my notes from yesterday and checked the causative verbs and prepositions I keep gettingoften get wrong.

However, Iit was hard to focus, so I closed the book pretty quickly.

영어에서는 “I was hard to focus”는 어색합니다. “it was hard to focus”로 수정하면 자연스럽습니다. “pretty quickly”도 “quickly”로 충분히 전달됩니다.

Instead, I asked AI to give me some English quizzes, and I answered them.

쉼표를 제거하고 연결하면 문장이 더 자연스럽게 이어집니다.

Since my husband finished his work at 1:30 p.m., I killed myspent the time by adding vocabulary into my Anki app until then.

“killed my time”는 조금 부정적이고 구어체 느낌이 있어요. 대신 “spent the time”이라고 하면 더 자연스럽고 부드럽게 들립니다. 그리고 “in my Anki app”보다는 “to my Anki app”가 영어식 표현으로 더 맞아요.

After he got offfinished, we went grocery shopping (I couldmanaged to buy a 20kg-- / 44lb-- bag of rice at a good price!) and took a nap.

“could buy”를 “managed to buy”로 바꾸면 성취감과 자연스러움을 살릴 수 있어요.

Yay!) and took a nap.

I was supposed to take a short nap, but I overslept too long and woke up pastafter 6 p.m.

Before dinner, I called my mom and aunt before dinner and my in-laws after dinner to say, and after dinner, I called my in-laws to wish them a Happy New Year.

시간 순서를 먼저 적고 쉼표를 넣으면 문장이 훨씬 자연스럽습니다. “to wish them a Happy New Year”가 더 영어다운 표현이에요.

Since they are all getting older, we feel worried and sorry for living so far away.

Fortunately, we have a chance to visit Korea next year, so we plan to catch up on everything twhen we go.

“then”도 틀린 건 아니지만, “when we go”라고 하면 방문 시점이 조금 더 명확하게 전달됩니다.

However, (I found it hard to focus / it was hard to focus), so I closed the book pretty quickly.

This is a tricky one, but "hard to focus" is not actually treated like an emotion. So you can say "it was hard to focus" where "it" is the general situation you're in, or "I found it hard to focus" where "finding it hard to focus" is something that a person can experience.

Since my husband finished his work at 1:30 p.m., I killed my time by adding vocabulary in my Anki app until then.

After he got off, we went grocery shopping (I could buy a 20kg--/44lb-- bag of rice at a good price!

When given a measurement in multiple units you can either use a slash to seperate them::

e.g. 20kg/44lb

or put the other units in brackets:

20kg (44lb)

The second form makes it clear you got to the second unit by converting the first, rather than having a scale that measures in lbs for example.

I was supposed to take a short nap, but I overslept and woke up pastafter 6 p.m.