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Nowadays,smartphone are an important part of our daily lives.Even young children use them to watching videos,play games or talk with their friends.Smartphone have both advantages and disadvantages,and how we use them can qreatly affect our lives.
One of the biggest advantages is smartphone make communication easier. people can send a massages,call or video chat with anyone,anytime.For example,when you are out late,you can send massages to send your family,so they do not worry.Smartphone also helps us keep in touch with people who live far away,and by using them you can improve communication skills.
Another reasons is that smartphone provide entertainment and information.This is because you can listen to music,watch movies and play games whenever you want.Moreover,you can also use smartphone to study and search for information quickly.By doing this, you can learn new things easily and reduce stress in our daily lives.As a result, these devices enrich my life in so many ways.
However, Smartphone has disadvantages as well.One problem is health.staring at smartphone screen for long time can hurt our eyes and cause lack of sleep. Also,people tend to move less when using smartphones,which can lead to poor health.
Another problems is that smartphone are expensive.Not only are the devices costly,but also the data plans and apps require money.Some people spend too much time or money on online games or social media.So you have to work to pay for smartphones.
In conclusion,smartphones are useful an conventional tools that helps us connect with others and enjoy our free time.However, if you rely on them too much,you can cause health and financial problems.Therefore,it is important to use smartphones wisely,take breajs,and try to balance online and real life.
In addition,you need to know how to use smartphones.
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Nowadays, smartphones are an important part of our daily lives.
Even young children use them to watching videos, play games or talk with their friends.
Smartphones have both advantages and disadvantages, and how we use them can qgreatly affect our lives.
One of the biggest advantages is that smartphones make communication easier.
pPeople can send a maessages, call or video chat with anyone, anytime.
For example, when you are out late, you can send maessages to send your family, so they do not worry.
Smartphones also helps us keep in touch with people who live far away, and by using them, you can improve communication skills.
Another reasons is that smartphones provide entertainment and information.
This is because you can listen to music, watch movies and play games whenever you want.
Moreover, you can also use smartphones to study and search for information quickly.
"Moreover" already means "also," so using both words is redundant
By doing this, youwe can learn new things easily and reduce stress in our daily lives.
Stick to "we/our" or "you/your"
Alternative: By doing this, you can learn new things easily and reduce stress in your daily life.
As a result, these devices enrich my life in so many ways.
However, Ssmartphones hasve disadvantages as well.
No need to capitalize "smartphone"
One problemissue is health.
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sStaring at smartphone screens for a long time can hurt our eyes and cause lack of sleep.
Also, people tend to move less when using smartphones, which can lead to poor health.
Another problems is that smartphones are expensive.
Not only are the devices costly, but also the data plans and apps also require money.
Some people spend too much time or money on online games or social media.
So you have to work to pay for smartphones.
In conclusion, smartphones are useful ans conventional tools that helps us connect with others and enjoy our free time.
However, if you rely on them too much, you can cause health and financial problems.
Therefore, it is important to use smartphones wisely, take breajks, and try to balance online and real life.
In addition, you need to know how to use smartphones.
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Great job. Reminder to add a space after each comma.
English eEsseay.
Nowadays, smartphones are an important part of our daily lives.
Even young children use them to watching videos, play games, or talk with their friends.
Smartphone have both advantages and disadvantages, and how we use them can qgreatly affect our lives.
One of the biggest advantages is that smartphones make communication easier.
pPeople can send a massages, call, or video chat with anyone, at anytime.
For example, when you are out late, you can send massages to send your family, so they do non't worry about you.
"so they do not worry" sounds just a little bit incomplete, so I added what your family doesn't have to worry about (that being you).
Smartphones also helps us keep in touch with people who live far away, and by using them you, can improve your communication skills.
"you can improve your" is a very common phrase in English.
Another reasons is that smartphones provide entertainment and information.
This is because you can listen to music, watch movies, and play games whenever you want.
Moreover, you can also use smartphones to study and search for information quickly.
By doing this, you can learn new things easily and reduce stress in your daily livesfe.
Since you used "you" in the first part of the sentence, you have to stay consistent and use some form of "you" throughout the rest of the sentence.
Alternate suggestion:
"By doing this, we can learn new things easily and reduce stress in our daily lives."
As a result, these devices enrich my life in so many ways.
However, Ssmartphones has disadvantages as well.
One problem is health.
sStaring at a smartphone screen for long time can hurt our eyes and cause a lack of sleep.
Also, people tend to move less when using smartphones, which can lead to poor health.
Another problems is that smartphones are expensive.
Not only are the devices costly, but also the data plans and apps also require money.
Some people spend too much time orand money on online games orand social media.
Since people spend "too much time or money or both" on "online games or social media or both", you would use "and" to say that people could be doing any combination of these things.
So you have to work to pay for smartphones.
In conclusion, smartphones are useful and conventional tools that helps us connect with others and enjoy our free time.
However, if you rely on them too much,you it can cause health and financial problems.
Therefore, it is important to use smartphones wisely, take breajks, and try to balance online and real life.
In addition, you need to know how to use smartphones.
Feedback
Great Job! The main problems I see are that you need to remember to put a space after every punctuation mark ( . , " ) ... etc. ). You also often used "smartphone" instead of "smartphones" when talking about smartphones in general. When talking about something in general, you should always use the plural form of the word. Finally (though this is probably a more advanced point to keep in mind), you frequently swap between using "you" and "we/our" when talking about people in general. Both of these words work when talking about people in general, but they should not be used together in the same essay. It should either all be "you," or all "we/our".
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Nowadays,smartphone are an important part of our daily lives. Nowadays, smartphones are an important part of our daily lives. Nowadays, smartphones are an important part of our daily lives. |
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Even young children use them to watching videos,play games or talk with their friends. Even young children use them to watch Even young children use them to watch |
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Smartphone have both advantages and disadvantages,and how we use them can qreatly affect our lives. Smartphone have both advantages and disadvantages, and how we use them can Smartphones have both advantages and disadvantages, and how we use them can |
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One of the biggest advantages is smartphone make communication easier. One of the biggest advantages is that smartphones make communication easier. One of the biggest advantages is that smartphones make communication easier. |
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people can send a massages,call or video chat with anyone,anytime.
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For example,when you are out late,you can send massages to send your family,so they do not worry. For example, when you are out late, you can send massages to "so they do not worry" sounds just a little bit incomplete, so I added what your family doesn't have to worry about (that being you). For example, when you are out late, you can send m |
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Smartphone also helps us keep in touch with people who live far away,and by using them you can improve communication skills. Smartphones also help "you can improve your" is a very common phrase in English. Smartphones also help |
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Another reasons is that smartphone provide entertainment and information. Another reason Another reason |
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This is because you can listen to music,watch movies and play games whenever you want. This is because you can listen to music, watch movies, and play games whenever you want. This is because you can listen to music, watch movies and play games whenever you want. |
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Moreover,you can also use smartphone to study and search for information quickly. Moreover, you can also use smartphones to study and search for information quickly. Moreover, you can "Moreover" already means "also," so using both words is redundant |
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By doing this, you can learn new things easily and reduce stress in our daily lives. By doing this, you can learn new things easily and reduce stress in your daily li Since you used "you" in the first part of the sentence, you have to stay consistent and use some form of "you" throughout the rest of the sentence. Alternate suggestion: "By doing this, we can learn new things easily and reduce stress in our daily lives." By doing this, Stick to "we/our" or "you/your" Alternative: By doing this, you can learn new things easily and reduce stress in your daily life. |
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As a result, these devices enrich my life in so many ways. This sentence has been marked as perfect! This sentence has been marked as perfect! |
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However, Smartphone has disadvantages as well. However, However, No need to capitalize "smartphone" |
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One problem is health. This sentence has been marked as perfect! One More natural |
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staring at smartphone screen for long time can hurt our eyes and cause lack of sleep.
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Also,people tend to move less when using smartphones,which can lead to poor health. Also, people tend to move less when using smartphones, which can lead to poor health. Also, people tend to move less when using smartphones, which can lead to poor health. |
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Another problems is that smartphone are expensive. Another problem Another problem |
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Not only are the devices costly,but also the data plans and apps require money. Not only are the devices costly, but Not only are the devices costly, but |
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Some people spend too much time or money on online games or social media. Some people spend too much time Since people spend "too much time or money or both" on "online games or social media or both", you would use "and" to say that people could be doing any combination of these things. This sentence has been marked as perfect! |
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So you have to work to pay for smartphones. This sentence has been marked as perfect! This sentence has been marked as perfect! |
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In conclusion,smartphones are useful an conventional tools that helps us connect with others and enjoy our free time. In conclusion, smartphones are useful and conventional tools that help In conclusion, smartphones are useful a |
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However, if you rely on them too much,you can cause health and financial problems. However, if you rely on them too much, However, if you rely on them too much, you can cause health and financial problems. |
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Therefore,it is important to use smartphones wisely,take breajs,and try to balance online and real life. Therefore, it is important to use smartphones wisely, take brea Therefore, it is important to use smartphones wisely, take brea |
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In addition,you need to know how to use smartphones. In addition, you need to know how to use smartphones. In addition, you need to know how to use smartphones. |
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