Dec. 19, 2020
I spent almost all of today on my club activity. I woke up early and came back to my home in the evening, so I'm tired. However, I did some workouts after getting home, and it energized me. I think activities cause tiredness but, simultaneously, energize us. If you don't any activity and only take a rest, you will be spoiled and get sick. Our energy is made by the repetition of activity and rest.
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I woke up early in the morning and came back to my home in the evening, so I'm feeling pretty tired.
What you have works well. I think adding some more context around your tiredness and when you woke up completes the sentence and makes it sound less like stating a fact.
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I think activities causehaving a busy day makes you tiredness but, simultaneously, energize uss you.
I think talking using the third person `us` is a bit strange here. If you want to sound more casual, like your talking to friend, `you` seems more natural here to make a statement.
If you doaren't any activityctive in your daily life and only take a rest, you wi'll be spoiledcome weak and get sick more often.
It makes more sense to use `active` here since it's describing one's lifestyle rather than an action they do everyday, e.g. doing activities.
I think the meaning you're going for with `spoiled` is weak, but please correct me if I'm wrong. Common examples of when you'd use spoiled would be for a lazy person or child, 駄々っ子 , or if something has gone off like food.
Our energy is madene's stamina is improved by the repetition of activity and rest.
Energy
I spent almost all of topretty much the entire day on my club activity.
“Almost all of today” isn’t wrong necessarily, it just doesn’t sound as natural (at least to me).
I woke up early and came back to my home in the evening, so I'm tired.
“To my” isn’t needed here because it’s automatically assumed by the reader.
However, I did some workouts after getting home, and it energized me.
I think activities cause tiredness but, simultaneously, energize us.
If you don't do any activity and only take a rest, you will be spoiled and get sick.
“You will” is often written/said as “You’ll”.
Our energy is madecreated by the repetitionprocess of activity and rest.
“Repetition” didn’t really sound right here.
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I spent almost all of today on my club activity. I spent “Almost all of today” isn’t wrong necessarily, it just doesn’t sound as natural (at least to me). I spent |
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I woke up early and came back to my home in the evening, so I'm tired. I woke up early and came back “To my” isn’t needed here because it’s automatically assumed by the reader. I woke up early in the morning and came back What you have works well. I think adding some more context around your tiredness and when you woke up completes the sentence and makes it sound less like stating a fact. |
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However, I did some workouts after getting home, and it energized me. This sentence has been marked as perfect! However, I |
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I think activities cause tiredness but, simultaneously, energize us. This sentence has been marked as perfect! I think I think talking using the third person `us` is a bit strange here. If you want to sound more casual, like your talking to friend, `you` seems more natural here to make a statement. |
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If you don't any activity and only take a rest, you will be spoiled and get sick. If you don't do any activity and only “You will” is often written/said as “You’ll”. If you It makes more sense to use `active` here since it's describing one's lifestyle rather than an action they do everyday, e.g. doing activities. I think the meaning you're going for with `spoiled` is weak, but please correct me if I'm wrong. Common examples of when you'd use spoiled would be for a lazy person or child, 駄々っ子 , or if something has gone off like food. |
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Our energy is made by the repetition of activity and rest. Our energy is “Repetition” didn’t really sound right here. O |
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