Nov. 2, 2024
Encountered a Person 人とのふれあい
I didn’t expect it to be so challenging to get to Lake Okutama (a reservoir). The mountain roads were winding, and I had to turn the steering wheel right and left as I climbed. It was pretty exhausting.
For lunch, I ate soba at a restaurant called "Jinya". It came with mountain vegetables on the side. It was delicious.
The owner didn’t seem particularly friendly at first, but when I said, "It was delicious. Is there anything you’re especially particular about in your cooking?" .
Hhe opened up and talked with me quite warmly.
He even told me some of the local history, and by the end of our conversation, I discovered that one of his samurai ancestors had served under one of my ancestors, General Takeda. It was just a soba shop I entered by chance, but it turned out to be a truly memorable encounter.
奥多摩湖（ダム湖）までに行くのにはこんなに大変だとは思わなかった。山道はくねくねしハンドルを右に左に切りながら上って行った。結構くたびれた。
昼食は陣屋という蕎麦屋でそばを食べた。山菜が添えられていた。うまかった。
愛想がなさそうなご主人だったが、「おいしかったです。何かこだわっていることはありますか」と聞くと、いろいろと気さくに話してくれた。
また、この土地の歴史も教えてくれ、最後にはご主人の先祖の武士が私の武将先祖に仕えてくださっていたことが分かった。何気なく入ったお蕎麦屋だったが、非常に貴重な出会いとなった。
ItMy meal came with mountain vegetables on the side.
“It” referring back to “soba” is a bit unclear since the restaurant’s name is in between in the prior sentence.
The owner didn’t seem particularly friendly at first, but whenafter I said, "It was delicious.
“After” better clarifies / illustrates the sequence of events. First X then Y.
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Hhe opened up and talked with me quite warmly.
Splitting a sentence with a multi-sentence quite in the middle can be hard to read.
If you wanted to reword to avoid this, “The owner didn’t seem particularly friendly at first, but opened up and talked with me quite warmly after I said,...”
He even told me some of the local history, and b. By the end of our conversation, I discovered that one of his samurai ancestors had served under one of my ancestors, General Takeda.
Comma splice. Two complete sentences should separate with a period or semicolon.
Nov. 9, 2024
Thank you for your corrections. Your advices help me a lot.
Encountered a Person 人とのふれあい
I didn’t expect it to be so challenging to get to Lake Okutama (a reservoir).
The mountain roads were winding, and I had to turn the steering wheel right and left as I climbed.
For lunch, I ate soba at a restaurant called "Jinya".
It came with mountain vegetables on the side.
It was delicious.
The owner didn’t seem particularly friendly at first, but when I said, "It was delicious.
Is there anything you’re especially particular about in your cooking?"
Hhe opened up and talkconversed with me quite warmlwith a more welcoming demeanor. (or [...] in a more welcoming way.)
He even told me some of the local history, and by the end of our conversation, I discovered that one of his samurai ancestors had served under one of my ancestors, General Takeda.
It was just a soba shop I entered by chance, but it turned out to be a truly memorable encounter.
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Great job! And what an amazing coincidence!
Nov. 4, 2024
Yes! Thank you for your correction.
SMOOTHER: I didn’t expect it to be so challenging to get to the Lake Okutama (a reservoir) near Tokyo.
The mountainous roads there were winding, and I had to turn the steering wheel right and left as I climbedcontinuously as I climbed towards the summit.
It was pretty exhausting.
ALSO POSSIBLE: It was an exhausting drive.
For lunch, I ate soba at a restaurant called "Jinya"buckwheat noodles at a local restaurant.
NOTE: The name of the restaurant is not important to most reader - I've deleted that detail.
It came with mountain vegetables on theits side.
ALSO POSSIBLE: The noodles were mixed with mountain vegetables.
The owner didn’t seem particularly friendly at first, but when I said, "It was delicious.
Is there anything you’re especially particular about in your cooking?"
Hhe opened up and talked with me quite warmly.
He even told me some of the local history, and by the end of our conversation, I discovered that one of his samurai ancestors had served under one of my ancestors, General Takeda.
It was just a soba shop I entered by chance, but it turned out to be a truly memorable encounter.
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Glad you had a good experience, Kikokun.
Nov. 4, 2024
Thank you for your corrections. I will visit there to see him again.
EAn encountered with a Pperson 人とのふれあい
I didn’t expect it to be so challenging to get to Lake Okutama (a reservoir).
The mountain roads were windingy, and I had to (constantly) turn the steering wheel right and left as I climbeddrove up (the mountain).
It was pretty exhausting.
For lunch, I ate soba at a restaurant called "Jinya".
ItThe meal came with mountain vegetables on the side.
It was delicious.
The owner didn’t seem particularly friendly at first, but when I said, "It was delicious.
Is there anything you’re doing especially particular aboutthoroughly in your cooking?"
Hhe opened up and talked with me quite warmly.
He even told me about some of the local history, and by the end of our conversation, I discovered that one of his samurai ancestors had served under one of my ancestors, General Takeda.
It was just a soba shop I entered by chance, but it turned out to be a truly memorable encounter.
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I learned a new word (山菜) thanks to you.
Besides, great job!
Nov. 2, 2024
Thank you for your corrections. 山菜は、わらび、たけのこなど。
A Chance Encountered a Person 人とのふれあい
I didn’t expect it to be so challenging to get to Lake Okutama (a reservoir).
The mountain roads were winding, and I had to turn the steering wheel right and left as I climbeddrove up the mountain.
It was pretty exhausting.
For lunch, I ate soba at a restaurant called "Jinya".
It came with mountain vegetables on the sidea side of plants and vegetables foraged from the mountain.
The term “mountain vegetables” doesn’t exist in English
It was delicious.
The owner didn’t seem particularly friendly at first, but when I said, "It was delicious.
Is there anything you’re especially particularly mindful about in your cooking?"
何かこだわっていることはありますか
I’m not quite sure how to translate this. I don’t understand the question, or what an answer/response might be. ごめなさい
Hhe (then) opened up and talked with me quite warmly.
He even told me some of the local history, and by the end of our conversation, I discovered that one of his samurai ancestors had served under one of my ancestors, General Takeda.
It was just a soba shop I entered by chance, but it turned out to be a truly memorable encounter.
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Another well written post!
Nov. 2, 2024
Thank you for your rapid corrections. こだわり＞＞attention to detail, or commitemen to detail
つまり、おいしくするために何か気をつけていることがあるのかということです。
Nov. 2, 2024
わかった！
“What’s your secret?”
“How did you X”
e.g. How did you get it so crispy?
e.g. How did you get it so juicy?
e.g. How did you get the potatoes so soft like that?
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