Sept. 4, 2020
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I feel kind of ashamed to write these words because I have shown the contrary points. Long story short, some applications have a very small font on the iPhone and you can’t set it bigger. Although it has a zoom function, it is still not ideal as android. I used an Oppo cellphone for about a week, and my eyes got uncomfortable. I have to compare it with the iPhone, Samsung and Huawei by showing some TV shows at the same time. The final conclusion is that the iPhone has the best display quality. The result made me very embarrassed. Even at such an age, I am still easy to draw conclusions. This is not supposed to be.
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I feel kind of ashamed to write these words because I have shown the contrary pointscontradict myself.
I think this is what you want to say here since you first say you don’t like the iPhone, then decide it’s the best.
Long story short, some applications have a very small font on the iPhone and you can’t set it any bigger.
Your version is technically fine but it “sounds better” this way.
You could also say “and you can’t increase it”
Although it has a zoom function, it is still not ideal as aAndroid.
Capitalizing since Android is a brand name
I used an Oppo cellphone for about a week, and my eyes got uncomfortable.
I haved to compare it withto the iPhone, Samsung and Huawei by showing some TV shows at the same time.
Matching tense to the rest of the story
The final conclusion iwas that the iPhone has the best display quality.
Since the previous and following sentences are in past tense, I would change this to match.
The result made me very embarrassed.
Even at such anmy age, I am still easy to drawquick to jump to conclusions.
“quick to jump to conclusions” is the phrase you’re looking for here
This isI am not supposed to be.
The way this sentence was originally written sounds a little unnatural given the context.
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Sept. 4, 2020
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I feel kind of ashamed to write these words because I have shown the contrary points. I feel kind of ashamed to write these words because I I think this is what you want to say here since you first say you don’t like the iPhone, then decide it’s the best. |
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Long story short, some applications have a very small font on the iPhone and you can’t set it bigger. Long story short, some applications have a very small font on the iPhone and you can’t set it any bigger. Your version is technically fine but it “sounds better” this way. You could also say “and you can’t increase it” |
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Although it has a zoom function, it is still not ideal as android. Although it has a zoom function, it is still not ideal as Capitalizing since Android is a brand name |
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I used an Oppo cellphone for about a week, and my eyes got uncomfortable. This sentence has been marked as perfect! |
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I have to compare it with the iPhone, Samsung and Huawei by showing some TV shows at the same time. I ha Matching tense to the rest of the story |
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The final conclusion is that the iPhone has the best display quality. The final conclusion Since the previous and following sentences are in past tense, I would change this to match. |
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The result made me very embarrassed. This sentence has been marked as perfect! |
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Even at such an age, I am still easy to draw conclusions. Even at “quick to jump to conclusions” is the phrase you’re looking for here |
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This is not supposed to be.
The way this sentence was originally written sounds a little unnatural given the context. |
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