Aug. 24, 2022
Dear Ms Li,
Hope you are doing well. My name is Joyce I am Ryan’s mom.
Thank you for giving us a wonderful school tour last time, we were so impressed with Mulgrave’s value and facilities. We are certain that Mulgrave will be a perfect fit for Ryan next year if all goes well.
Summer holiday went by so quickly, Ryan enjoyed going to his daycare everyday and he made a lot a of friends in the school. He also loves going to gymnastics class and soccer class after school. We noticed that he really likes music and dancing, beacuse when we accidentally join the Katie Brock Music session, Ryan was dancing and singing all along with Katie. We took him to Victoria during the holiday and he went fishing for the first time, he was so happy on the boat and saw us fishing, we had a great family time over there.
Regarding the application this year, since Ryan’s birthday is Dec 11th 2019, would you consider him as a PK 3 candidate this year?
我希望表达Ryan在暑期进步了很多,在大动作方面和与人沟通上面都表现的很出色。老师也夸他很聪明。
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HI hope you are doing well.
My name is Joyce and I am Ryan’s mom.
Thank you for giving us a wonderful school tour last time, w. We were so impressed with Mulgrave’s valueteachers and facilities.
We don't really use the word, "value," when being impressed with schools in the US.
We are certain that Mulgrave will be a perfect fit for Ryan next year if all goes well.
Summer holiday went by so quickly,. Ryan enjoyed going to his daycare everyday and he made a lot a of friends in the school.
Be careful of run-on sentences.
He also loves going to gymnastics class and soccer classes after school.
We noticed that he really likes music and dancing, beacause, when we accidentally joined the Katie Brock Music session, Ryan was dancing and singing all along with Katie.
We took him to Victoria during the holiday and he went fishing for the first time, h. He was so happy on the boat and saw us fishing, wewhile we were fishing. Our family had a great family time over there.
Again, be careful of run-on sentences.
Regarding thehis application this year, since Ryan’s birthday is Dec 11th 2019, would you consider him as a PK 3 candidate this year?
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HI hope you are doing well.
My name is Joyce and I am Ryan’s mom.
Thank you for giving us a wonderful school tour last time, we were so impressed with Mulgrave’s values and facilities.
SThe summer holiday went by so quickly, Ryan enjoyed going to his daycare everyday and he made a lot as of friends in the school.
We noticed that he really likes music and dancing, beacause when we accidentally joined the Katie Brock Music session, Ryan was dancing and singing all along with Katie.
We took him to Victoria during the holiday and he went fishing for the first time, he was so happy on the boat and saw us fishing, we had a great familyial time over there.
'and saw us fishing' not too sure what you mean here?
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Dear Ms Li, |
Hope you are doing well.
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My name is Joyce I am Ryan’s mom. My name is Joyce and I am Ryan’s mom. My name is Joyce and I am Ryan’s mom. |
Thank you for giving us a wonderful school tour last time, we were so impressed with Mulgrave’s value and facilities. Thank you for giving us a wonderful school tour last time, we were so impressed with Mulgrave’s values and facilities. Thank you for giving us a wonderful school tour We don't really use the word, "value," when being impressed with schools in the US. |
We are certain that Mulgrave will be a perfect fit for Ryan next year if all goes well. We are certain that Mulgrave will be a perfect fit for Ryan next year |
Summer holiday went by so quickly, Ryan enjoyed going to his daycare everyday and he made a lot a of friends in the school.
Summer holiday went by so quickly Be careful of run-on sentences. |
He also loves going to gymnastics class and soccer class after school. He also loves going to gymnastics |
We noticed that he really likes music and dancing, beacuse when we accidentally join the Katie Brock Music session, Ryan was dancing and singing all along with Katie. We noticed that he really likes music and dancing, be We noticed that he really likes music and dancing |
We took him to Victoria during the holiday and he went fishing for the first time, he was so happy on the boat and saw us fishing, we had a great family time over there. We took him to Victoria during the holiday and he went fishing for the first time, he was so happy on the boat 'and saw us fishing' not too sure what you mean here? We took him to Victoria during the holiday and he went fishing for the first time Again, be careful of run-on sentences. |
Regarding the application this year, since Ryan’s birthday is Dec 11th 2019, would you consider him as a PK 3 candidate this year? Regarding |
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