April 8, 2022
Email about my first job
Hi Bob,
it's been a long time, I'm glad to receive your email.
In my first job I was a computer technician in a local shop. It was a part-time job because at that time I was still studying at high school. It's so I only had to worked in the afternoons and on Saturdays.
The main thing I learned obviously was how to repair computers, even though I was studying computing we seldom worked with hardware at school, so it was a great complement.
The other great skill it taught me was punctuality. After a few months working there, I got a copy of the keys and I sometimes managed to open the shop.
About the bad things, not much, but one problem I used to face every other month, was related with the payment. I could say the manager wasn't as punctual paying as I were opening the shop.
I hope the email is helpful for your project. Write me back if you need any further information.
Cheers,
Dani
Hi Bob,
it's been a long time, I'm glad to receive your email.
In my first job I was a computer technician in a local shop.
It was a part-time job becauseas I was still studying high school. OR It was a part time job at that time because I was still studying atin high school.
The time reference is in the a strange place and sounds odd. I replaced at high school with in high school. If you were to say a specific high school you would say 'at'
It's sSo I only had to work in the afternoons and on Saturdays. OR So I only worked in the afternoons and on Saturdays.
'worked' makes it past tense or 'had to' makes it past tense. Using both together sounds odd.
The other great skill it taught me was punctuality.
After a few months working there, I got a copy of the keys and I sometimes managed to opened the shop.
'managed to' tends to mean something you struggled with but eventually accomplished, which is not what I think you're trying to say here. If you were somteimes in charge of opening the shop I would just say 'I sometimes opened the shop"
About the bad things, there was not much, but o. One problem I used to face every other month, was related with theto payment.
Grammar. I replaced 'with the' with 'to' the problem is related to payment
Usage you could also replace not much with 'not too bad' or not many'. 'not much' sounds strange though but that might be just me
I could say the manager wasn't as punctual paying as I wereas opening the shop.
was and were are both past tense. Generally was is singular and were is plural. I was, we were
I hope the email is helpful for your project.
Writeemail me back if you need any further information.
for email it is fine to say email me back, but if you were writing it would be 'write back to me'. Generally people say 'if you need any further information please let me know'
Cheers,
Dani
April 10, 2022
Thanks for the explanations in corrections. I appreciate it.
Hi Bob,
It's so I only had to worked in the afternoons and on Saturdays.
“Had” implies the past tense of “worked”
About the bad things, nothere isn’t much, but one problem I used to face every other month, was related with the payment.
I could say the manager wasn't as punctual paying as I wereas opening the shop.
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Your spelling and grammar are really good with only a few minor mistakes, great job :)
April 9, 2022
I'm really happy of hearing that 🤗. Thanks
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It was a part-time job because at that time I was still studying at high school. It was a part-time job The time reference is in the a strange place and sounds odd. I replaced at high school with in high school. If you were to say a specific high school you would say 'at' |
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It's so I only had to worked in the afternoons and on Saturdays. It's so I only had to work “Had” implies the past tense of “worked”
'worked' makes it past tense or 'had to' makes it past tense. Using both together sounds odd. |
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The main thing I learned obviously was how to repair computers, even though I was studying computing we seldom worked with hardware at school, so it was a great complement. |
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The other great skill it taught me was punctuality. This sentence has been marked as perfect! |
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After a few months working there, I got a copy of the keys and I sometimes managed to open the shop. After a few months working there, I got a copy of the keys and I sometimes 'managed to' tends to mean something you struggled with but eventually accomplished, which is not what I think you're trying to say here. If you were somteimes in charge of opening the shop I would just say 'I sometimes opened the shop" |
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About the bad things, not much, but one problem I used to face every other month, was related with the payment. About the bad things, About the bad things, there was not much Grammar. I replaced 'with the' with 'to' the problem is related to payment Usage you could also replace not much with 'not too bad' or not many'. 'not much' sounds strange though but that might be just me |
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I could say the manager wasn't as punctual paying as I were opening the shop. I could say the manager wasn't as punctual paying as I w I could say the manager wasn't as punctual paying as I w was and were are both past tense. Generally was is singular and were is plural. I was, we were |
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I hope the email is helpful for your project. This sentence has been marked as perfect! |
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Write me back if you need any further information.
for email it is fine to say email me back, but if you were writing it would be 'write back to me'. Generally people say 'if you need any further information please let me know' |
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