Oct. 14, 2022
My friend is coming back
Earlier this morning, I learned that an old friend of mine - David, is coming back to Taiwan from Canada next month on Facebook. He must be thrilled to fly back as Taiwan reopens its border for the first time since the pandemic. Although it's an exciting news for me, I don't bother messaging him right away. Instead, I'll wait for him to contact me when he is available to do something together, and I have a good reason to do so. Because David only returns home once every three years or so, he must schedule meetups with all of his family, relatives and friends for a mere week of stay.
I have known David since middle school. We used to be in the same class and that's how I met him. (Technically, he was in a class next to mine, but we took certain classes together.) David was born with a silver spoon. He spent most of his life in Canada, but I was lucky to meet him in school. One day, I took the courage to ask for his Yahoo messenger ID, and then started overwhelming him with English-related questions almost every day. Even after he transferred to middle school to Toronto in the last year of school, we were still in close contact. Both of us were keen on computer games, so we would play online games together. What good old days!
Since we started working, we have been growing apart and have been messaging each other less often than we used to. Nevertheless, we're still good friends. It feels strange when you meet someone you don't get to see for so long, you'd feel as if both of you had only been separated for a couple of days. Perhaps this is what a true friendship is. To me, only a true friendship can stand the last of time and difficulties in life.
As for what activities I'd probably want to do with him as he comes back, I'd probably want to try something different this time. Other than doing window shopping in the mall, maybe I can invite him for a gokart ride on the outskirts of my city, or take him to a newly opened fancy cafe for a chat. I am tempted to know what he has been up to, and who he is seeing, etc.
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My friend is coming back
Earlier this morning, I learned on Facebook that an old friend of mine -, David, is coming back to Taiwan from Canada next month on Facebook.
Earlier this morning, I learned on Facebook that an old friend of mine, David, is coming back to Taiwan from Canada next month.
Easier to understand.
He must be thrilled to fly back as Taiwan reopens / has reopened its border for the first time since the pandemic. He must be thrilled to fly back as Taiwan reopens / has reopened its border for the first time since the pandemic.
Although it's an exciting news for me, I dwon't bother messaging him right away.
Although it's exciting news for me, I won't bother messaging him right away.
“News” is uncountable.
(Technically, he was in a class next to mine, but we took had certain classes together.) David was born with a silver spoon. in his mouth.
(Technically, he was in a class next to mine, but we had certain classes together.) David was born with a silver spoon in his mouth.
One day, I tookfound the courage to ask for his Yahoo messenger ID, and then started overwhelming him with English-related questions almost every day.
One day, I found the courage to ask for his Yahoo messenger ID, and then started overwhelming him with English-related questions almost every day.
Even after he transferred to middle school toin Toronto in the last year of school, we were still in close contact.
Even after he transferred to middle school in Toronto in the last year of school, we were still in close contact.
Both of us were keen on computer games, so we would play online games together.
WhatThose were the good old days!
Those were the good old days!
Since we started working, we have been growing apart and have been messaging each other less often than we used to.
Nevertheless, we're still good friends.
It feels strange when you meet someone you don't get to see very often / you haven’t seen for so long, you'd. You feel as if (both of) you hadve only been separated for a couple of days.
It feels strange when you meet someone you don't get to see very often / you haven’t seen for so long. You feel as if (both of) you have only been separated for a couple of days.
“Both of” is unnecessary and unnatural.
Perhaps this is what a(a) true friendship is.
Perhaps this is what (a) true friendship is.
More natural without “a”.
To me, only a true friendship can stand the latest of time and last through the difficulties inof life.
To me, only a true friendship can stand the test of time and last through the difficulties of life.
As for what activities I'd probably want to do with him as he comes back, I'd probably want to try something different this time.
As for what activities I'd probably want to do with him, I'd probably want to try something different this time.
Other than doing window shopping in the mall, maybe I can invite him for a gokart ride on the outskirts of my city, or take him to a newly opened fancy cafe for a chat.
I am temptedeager to know what he has been up to, and who he is seeing, etc.
I am eager to know what he has been up to, and who he is seeing, etc.
Oct. 14, 2022
Thank you so much for the correction and many thoughtful notes! After going through the areas you have helped corrected, I have noticed some bad habits that I had been making for so long without realizing them, such as the wrong order of a sentence(on facebook), punctuation and wrong usage of vocabulary (had certain classes, found the courage, eager to...etc). I'll keep them in mind and hopefully will be able to write a better journal next time. :)
Oct. 14, 2022
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Earlier this morning, I learned that an old friend of mine - David, is coming back to Taiwan from Canada next month on Facebook.
Earlier this morning, I learned on Facebook that an old friend of mine Easier to understand. |
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He must be thrilled to fly back as Taiwan reopens its border for the first time since the pandemic. He must be thrilled to fly back as Taiwan reopens / has reopened its border for the first time since the pandemic. He must be thrilled to fly back as Taiwan reopens / has reopened its border for the first time since the pandemic. |
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Although it's an exciting news for me, I don't bother messaging him right away.
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Instead, I'll wait for him to contact me when he is available to do something together, and I have a good reason to do so. |
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Because David only returns home once every three years or so, he must schedule meetups with all of his family, relatives and friends for a mere week of stay. |
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I have known David since middle school. |
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We used to be in the same class and that's how I met him. |
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(Technically, he was in a class next to mine, but we took certain classes together.) David was born with a silver spoon.
(Technically, he was in a class next to mine, but we |
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He spent most of his life in Canada, but I was lucky to meet him in school. |
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One day, I took the courage to ask for his Yahoo messenger ID, and then started overwhelming him with English-related questions almost every day.
One day, I |
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Even after he transferred to middle school to Toronto in the last year of school, we were still in close contact.
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Both of us were keen on computer games, so we would play online games together. This sentence has been marked as perfect! |
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What good old days!
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Since we started working, we have been growing apart and have been messaging each other less often than we used to. This sentence has been marked as perfect! |
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Nevertheless, we're still good friends. This sentence has been marked as perfect! |
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It feels strange when you meet someone you don't get to see for so long, you'd feel as if both of you had only been separated for a couple of days.
It feels strange when you meet someone you don't get to see very often / you haven’t seen for so long “Both of” is unnecessary and unnatural. |
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Perhaps this is what a true friendship is.
Perhaps this is what More natural without “a”. |
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To me, only a true friendship can stand the last of time and difficulties in life.
To me, only a true friendship can stand the |
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As for what activities I'd probably want to do with him as he comes back, I'd probably want to try something different this time.
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Other than doing window shopping in the mall, maybe I can invite him for a gokart ride on the outskirts of my city, or take him to a newly opened fancy cafe for a chat. This sentence has been marked as perfect! |
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I am tempted to know what he has been up to, and who he is seeing, etc.
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